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四、书面表达
学校英语报征稿了!请根据以下要求,以"My favourite story"为题写一篇英文短文介绍你课内或课外读过的一个英文故事,内容应包括:
注意:词数100左右,讲清楚故事并适当发挥。
My favourite story
学校英语报征稿了!请根据以下要求,以"My favourite story"为题写一篇英文短文介绍你课内或课外读过的一个英文故事,内容应包括:
注意:词数100左右,讲清楚故事并适当发挥。
My favourite story
I love reading and I have read many books. My favourite story is Cinderella.
The characters in the story are Cinderella, her stepmother, two stepsisters, a fairy godmother and a
prince. The story is about a beautiful girl, who with the help of the fairy godmother, was able to go to the
ball. There, she fell in love with the prince, got married and lived happily ever after.
This is my favourite story because it is interesting and it teaches us to be kind and not to be wicked like
the stepmother and the two stepsisters. There are many wonderful and colourful pictures too. I admire
Cinderella very much for she is a kind and beautiful girl who has never done anything bad to anyone.
答案
四、One possible version:
My favourite story
I love reading and I have read many books. My favourite story is Cinderella.
The characters in the story are Cinderella, her stepmother, two stepsisters, a fairy godmother and a
prince. The story is about a beautiful girl, who with the help of the fairy godmother, was able to go to the
ball. There, she fell in love with the prince, got married and lived happily ever after.
This is my favourite story because it is interesting and it teaches us to be kind and not to be wicked like
the stepmother and the two stepsisters. There are many wonderful and colourful pictures too. I admire
Cinderella very much for she is a kind and beautiful girl who has never done anything bad to anyone.
My favourite story
I love reading and I have read many books. My favourite story is Cinderella.
The characters in the story are Cinderella, her stepmother, two stepsisters, a fairy godmother and a
prince. The story is about a beautiful girl, who with the help of the fairy godmother, was able to go to the
ball. There, she fell in love with the prince, got married and lived happily ever after.
This is my favourite story because it is interesting and it teaches us to be kind and not to be wicked like
the stepmother and the two stepsisters. There are many wonderful and colourful pictures too. I admire
Cinderella very much for she is a kind and beautiful girl who has never done anything bad to anyone.
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道书面表达题，先明确写作的核心要求：主题是"My favourite story"，需要覆盖思维导图给出的全部要点：1. 点明要介绍的故事的标题；2. 介绍故事的核心要素：故事发生的时间、地点、出场人物、完整的核心情节；3. 说明你喜欢这个故事的原因。我们可以优先选择大众熟知的经典童话作为写作对象，避免因为对故事内容陌生出现表述障碍。写作时先开篇点题，直接引出选定的故事名称；中间部分按顺序梳理故事的人物和情节，注意叙事时讲故事要使用一般过去时；最后从故事的趣味性、传递的正向道理、欣赏的人物特质几个角度说明喜爱的理由，调整语句把词数控制在100左右，保证通顺无语法错误即可。
【解析】
写作可按照三步完成：
步骤1：开篇引入：先说明自己喜爱阅读，自然点出自己最喜欢的故事是《灰姑娘》，开门见山直接切题。
步骤2：叙事介绍故事：先逐一介绍故事里的所有出场人物，再按时间顺序梳理故事核心情节：灰姑娘在仙女教母的帮助下参加舞会，和王子相爱，最终成婚过上幸福生活，完整覆盖who、what happened等故事要素。
步骤3：收尾说明喜爱理由：从故事的趣味性、故事传递的"为人要善良不要心怀恶意"的正向价值观、灰姑娘本身善良美好的人物特质几个角度展开，内容充实贴合要求。
最后通读全文，检查要点是否全部覆盖、时态使用是否正确、词数是否符合100左右的要求，修正小的语法错误即可。
【答案】
One possible version:
My favourite story
I love reading and I have read many books. My favourite story is Cinderella.
The characters in the story are Cinderella, her stepmother, two stepsisters, a fairy godmother and a prince. The story is about a beautiful girl, who with the help of the fairy godmother, was able to go to the ball. There, she fell in love with the prince, got married and lived happily ever after.
This is my favourite story because it is interesting and it teaches us to be kind and not to be wicked like the stepmother and the two stepsisters. There are many wonderful and colourful pictures too. I admire Cinderella very much for she is a kind and beautiful girl who has never done anything bad to anyone.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，叙事时态运用，写作要点覆盖
【点评】
本篇范文选取大众熟知的经典童话作为写作素材，内容饱满自然，完全覆盖了题目要求的所有写作要点，叙事逻辑清晰，时态使用准确，传递的价值观积极正向，词数符合题目要求，是一篇非常规范的参考习作。同学们完成同类写作时，优先选择自己熟悉的故事素材，能有效避免内容表述错误，只要注意叙事时态统一、不遗漏题干给出的写作要点，就很容易拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先拿到这道书面表达题，先明确写作的核心要求：主题是"My favourite story"，需要覆盖思维导图给出的全部要点：1. 点明要介绍的故事的标题；2. 介绍故事的核心要素：故事发生的时间、地点、出场人物、完整的核心情节；3. 说明你喜欢这个故事的原因。我们可以优先选择大众熟知的经典童话作为写作对象，避免因为对故事内容陌生出现表述障碍。写作时先开篇点题，直接引出选定的故事名称；中间部分按顺序梳理故事的人物和情节，注意叙事时讲故事要使用一般过去时；最后从故事的趣味性、传递的正向道理、欣赏的人物特质几个角度说明喜爱的理由，调整语句把词数控制在100左右，保证通顺无语法错误即可。
【解析】
写作可按照三步完成：
步骤1：开篇引入：先说明自己喜爱阅读，自然点出自己最喜欢的故事是《灰姑娘》，开门见山直接切题。
步骤2：叙事介绍故事：先逐一介绍故事里的所有出场人物，再按时间顺序梳理故事核心情节：灰姑娘在仙女教母的帮助下参加舞会，和王子相爱，最终成婚过上幸福生活，完整覆盖who、what happened等故事要素。
步骤3：收尾说明喜爱理由：从故事的趣味性、故事传递的"为人要善良不要心怀恶意"的正向价值观、灰姑娘本身善良美好的人物特质几个角度展开，内容充实贴合要求。
最后通读全文，检查要点是否全部覆盖、时态使用是否正确、词数是否符合100左右的要求，修正小的语法错误即可。
【答案】
One possible version:
My favourite story
I love reading and I have read many books. My favourite story is Cinderella.
The characters in the story are Cinderella, her stepmother, two stepsisters, a fairy godmother and a prince. The story is about a beautiful girl, who with the help of the fairy godmother, was able to go to the ball. There, she fell in love with the prince, got married and lived happily ever after.
This is my favourite story because it is interesting and it teaches us to be kind and not to be wicked like the stepmother and the two stepsisters. There are many wonderful and colourful pictures too. I admire Cinderella very much for she is a kind and beautiful girl who has never done anything bad to anyone.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，叙事时态运用，写作要点覆盖
【点评】
本篇范文选取大众熟知的经典童话作为写作素材，内容饱满自然，完全覆盖了题目要求的所有写作要点，叙事逻辑清晰，时态使用准确，传递的价值观积极正向，词数符合题目要求，是一篇非常规范的参考习作。同学们完成同类写作时，优先选择自己熟悉的故事素材，能有效避免内容表述错误，只要注意叙事时态统一、不遗漏题干给出的写作要点，就很容易拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.6
