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Ⅴ. 写作指导
你校英文校刊 Teen Magazine 正在举办“My Music Story”主题征文活动，请你根据以下提示，写一篇英语短文，分享你和音乐之间的故事。
提示：
(1) What made you start with music? (e. g. , an instrument, a song, or a musician)
(2) What was your experience of learning music, and what difficulties did you meet?
(3) What changes has music brought to you?
(4) What does music mean to your life?
注意：
(1) 短文须包括提示中所有信息，可适当发挥；
(2) 文中不得出现真实的人名、校名和地名；
(3) 词数 80 个左右。
你校英文校刊 Teen Magazine 正在举办“My Music Story”主题征文活动，请你根据以下提示，写一篇英语短文，分享你和音乐之间的故事。
提示：
(1) What made you start with music? (e. g. , an instrument, a song, or a musician)
(2) What was your experience of learning music, and what difficulties did you meet?
(3) What changes has music brought to you?
(4) What does music mean to your life?
注意：
(1) 短文须包括提示中所有信息，可适当发挥；
(2) 文中不得出现真实的人名、校名和地名；
(3) 词数 80 个左右。
答案
范文：
My Music Story
The gift that changed my life was a piano my mother bought me for my seventh birthday. I spent half an hour every evening learning to play it. At first, I had a lot of trouble reading music, and my fingers always got stiff. But I never gave up and practised until I could play simple songs.
Later, I joined the school music club. I made many friends who share the same love for music. We often perform together at school parties. Music cheers me up when I am upset and makes me more confident. It will always be my best friend.
My Music Story
The gift that changed my life was a piano my mother bought me for my seventh birthday. I spent half an hour every evening learning to play it. At first, I had a lot of trouble reading music, and my fingers always got stiff. But I never gave up and practised until I could play simple songs.
Later, I joined the school music club. I made many friends who share the same love for music. We often perform together at school parties. Music cheers me up when I am upset and makes me more confident. It will always be my best friend.
解析
【分析】本题为英语主题征文写作，需围绕“My Music Story”主题，覆盖四个提示要点：一是明确开始接触音乐的契机；二是叙述学习音乐的经历及遇到的困难；三是说明音乐带来的变化；四是点明音乐对生活的意义。写作时需注意词数80左右，不得出现真实人名、校名、地名，语言需连贯自然。
【解析】写作步骤：1. 开篇点题：以七岁生日妈妈送的钢琴为契机，引出与音乐的故事；2. 叙述学习经历：说明初期读谱困难、手指僵硬的问题，以及坚持练习的过程；3. 阐述变化：加入学校音乐俱乐部，结识同好，音乐在低落时带来慰藉，提升自信；4. 结尾总结：点明音乐是自己的朋友，升华主题，控制词数符合要求。
【答案】My Music Story
The gift that changed my life was a piano my mother bought me for my seventh birthday. I spent half an hour every evening learning to play it. At first, I had a lot of trouble reading music, and my fingers always got stiff. But I never gave up and practised until I could play simple songs.
Later, I joined the school music club. I made many friends who share the same love for music. We often perform together at school parties. Music cheers me up when I am upset and makes me more confident. It will always be my best friend.
【知识点】英语记叙文写作、主题征文写作、英语书面表达
【点评】范文紧扣主题，全面覆盖所有提示要求，结构清晰，逻辑连贯，语言简洁流畅，情感真挚，符合初中英语写作规范，很好地完成了“My Music Story”的分享任务。
【难度系数】0.6
【解析】写作步骤：1. 开篇点题：以七岁生日妈妈送的钢琴为契机，引出与音乐的故事；2. 叙述学习经历：说明初期读谱困难、手指僵硬的问题，以及坚持练习的过程；3. 阐述变化：加入学校音乐俱乐部，结识同好，音乐在低落时带来慰藉，提升自信；4. 结尾总结：点明音乐是自己的朋友，升华主题，控制词数符合要求。
【答案】My Music Story
The gift that changed my life was a piano my mother bought me for my seventh birthday. I spent half an hour every evening learning to play it. At first, I had a lot of trouble reading music, and my fingers always got stiff. But I never gave up and practised until I could play simple songs.
Later, I joined the school music club. I made many friends who share the same love for music. We often perform together at school parties. Music cheers me up when I am upset and makes me more confident. It will always be my best friend.
【知识点】英语记叙文写作、主题征文写作、英语书面表达
【点评】范文紧扣主题，全面覆盖所有提示要求，结构清晰，逻辑连贯，语言简洁流畅，情感真挚，符合初中英语写作规范，很好地完成了“My Music Story”的分享任务。
【难度系数】0.6
