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【写作导引】
本单元以“思想的力量”为话题，属于“人与社会”主题范畴中“科学与技术”这一主题群。此类话题常见的写作角度涉及:①谈论各种发明；②讨论发明是如何改变我们的生活的；③探寻发明家和发明的故事。
【写作任务】
为了培养学生的发明和创新精神，学校将
举行中学生科技创新大赛。假如你是李华，你准备发明一件物品，参加本次大赛。请你以“I Want to Invent
要求：1. 请先补全标题；2. 短文须全面包含要点内容；3. 词数80-100。
本单元以“思想的力量”为话题，属于“人与社会”主题范畴中“科学与技术”这一主题群。此类话题常见的写作角度涉及:①谈论各种发明；②讨论发明是如何改变我们的生活的；③探寻发明家和发明的故事。
【写作任务】
为了培养学生的发明和创新精神，学校将
举行中学生科技创新大赛。假如你是李华，你准备发明一件物品，参加本次大赛。请你以“I Want to Invent
a Special Bag
”为题，写一篇英语短文，介绍你的发明物。内容包括：发明的原因、外观和用途；使用的时间或场合；你的评价。要求：1. 请先补全标题；2. 短文须全面包含要点内容；3. 词数80-100。
答案
I Want to Invent a Special Bag
I want to invent a special bag. Because I notice that students often carry heavy backpacks filled with books¹, which can cause back pain. It’s a lightweight bag with built-in compartments for books, stationery, and even a small lunchbox. The bag is made of advanced materials² that are both strong and light.³ It uses sensors to detect the weight and adjust its size accordingly. The wheels are smooth, making it easy to pull around. This bag would be perfect for daily school use, as well as for trips and outdoor activities.
I believe this special bag will greatly benefit students by reducing the weight on their backs and making it easier to carry their belongings. I'm excited to see it help students in their daily lives.
亮点词块
① carry heavy backpacks filled with books 背着塞满书的沉重双肩包
② is made of advanced materials 由先进材料制作
高分句子
③ The bag is made of advanced materials that are both strong and light. (that 引导的定语从句) 这个包是由既结实又轻便的先进材料制作的。
I want to invent a special bag. Because I notice that students often carry heavy backpacks filled with books¹, which can cause back pain. It’s a lightweight bag with built-in compartments for books, stationery, and even a small lunchbox. The bag is made of advanced materials² that are both strong and light.³ It uses sensors to detect the weight and adjust its size accordingly. The wheels are smooth, making it easy to pull around. This bag would be perfect for daily school use, as well as for trips and outdoor activities.
I believe this special bag will greatly benefit students by reducing the weight on their backs and making it easier to carry their belongings. I'm excited to see it help students in their daily lives.
亮点词块
① carry heavy backpacks filled with books 背着塞满书的沉重双肩包
② is made of advanced materials 由先进材料制作
高分句子
③ The bag is made of advanced materials that are both strong and light. (that 引导的定语从句) 这个包是由既结实又轻便的先进材料制作的。
解析
【分析】首先需补全标题，确定发明物品（如特殊书包）；接着围绕要求的要点展开：1. 发明原因（学生背重书包易致背痛）；2. 外观与用途（内置隔层、传感器调大小、轮子，轻便结实）；3. 使用场合（上学、出行）；4. 个人评价（对学生有益）；同时控制词数在80-100，运用合适句式提升表达。
【解析】第一步：补全标题为“I Want to Invent a Special Bag”；第二步：开篇说明发明原因（学生常背塞满书的重书包，易引发背痛）；第三步：介绍发明的外观（内置隔层、先进材料、传感器、轮子）与用途；第四步：说明使用场合（日常上学、出行）；第五步：表达个人评价（减轻负担，便利生活），确保要点齐全、词数符合要求。
【答案】I Want to Invent a Special Bag
I want to invent a special bag. Because I notice that students often carry heavy backpacks filled with books, which can cause back pain. It’s a lightweight bag with built-in compartments for books, stationery, and even a small lunchbox. The bag is made of advanced materials that are both strong and light. It uses sensors to detect the weight and adjust its size accordingly. The wheels are smooth, making it easy to pull around. This bag would be perfect for daily school use, as well as for trips and outdoor activities.
I believe this special bag will greatly benefit students by reducing the weight on their backs and making it easier to carry their belongings. I'm excited to see it help students in their daily lives.
【知识点】英语话题写作、补全标题、要点式写作
【点评】本文紧扣话题，围绕发明的原因、外观用途、使用场合及评价展开，要点齐全，句式多样（含定语从句），符合词数要求，是一篇符合要求的优秀习作。
【难度系数】0.7
【解析】第一步：补全标题为“I Want to Invent a Special Bag”；第二步：开篇说明发明原因（学生常背塞满书的重书包，易引发背痛）；第三步：介绍发明的外观（内置隔层、先进材料、传感器、轮子）与用途；第四步：说明使用场合（日常上学、出行）；第五步：表达个人评价（减轻负担，便利生活），确保要点齐全、词数符合要求。
【答案】I Want to Invent a Special Bag
I want to invent a special bag. Because I notice that students often carry heavy backpacks filled with books, which can cause back pain. It’s a lightweight bag with built-in compartments for books, stationery, and even a small lunchbox. The bag is made of advanced materials that are both strong and light. It uses sensors to detect the weight and adjust its size accordingly. The wheels are smooth, making it easy to pull around. This bag would be perfect for daily school use, as well as for trips and outdoor activities.
I believe this special bag will greatly benefit students by reducing the weight on their backs and making it easier to carry their belongings. I'm excited to see it help students in their daily lives.
【知识点】英语话题写作、补全标题、要点式写作
【点评】本文紧扣话题，围绕发明的原因、外观用途、使用场合及评价展开，要点齐全，句式多样（含定语从句），符合词数要求，是一篇符合要求的优秀习作。
【难度系数】0.7
跟踪演练
你的同学李华设计的“老年人助手机器人 (The Elderly Assistant Robot)”在“宁德市科普创新比赛”中获奖。假如你是一名校园小记者，请你根据下列提示写一则新闻报道，介绍这款机器人的外观、功能并表达看法。
| Look | tall, cute... |
| --- | --- |
| Functions | give medicine... | do housework...
| communicate with... |
| Opinions | not replace, care... |
要求：1.必须包含所有提示要点，可适当发挥；2.词数不少于100（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。
Li Hua, a student from Ningde, has won a prize in the Science Popularization and Innovation Competition with a creative elderly assistant robot. Here is a report about this robot.
你的同学李华设计的“老年人助手机器人 (The Elderly Assistant Robot)”在“宁德市科普创新比赛”中获奖。假如你是一名校园小记者，请你根据下列提示写一则新闻报道，介绍这款机器人的外观、功能并表达看法。
| Look | tall, cute... |
| --- | --- |
| Functions | give medicine... | do housework...
| communicate with... || Opinions | not replace, care... |
要求：1.必须包含所有提示要点，可适当发挥；2.词数不少于100（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。
Li Hua, a student from Ningde, has won a prize in the Science Popularization and Innovation Competition with a creative elderly assistant robot. Here is a report about this robot.
The robot is tall and looks very cute. He looks like a friendly person, making it easier for the elderly to accept him.
The robot is of great use. First, he can give the elderly medicine on time when they are ill. He will also call for help at once if they meet danger. Besides, the robot can do some cooking and sweep the floor for the elderly, which makes their life easier. Last but not least, he is good at communicating with the elderly. He can tell stories and jokes, bringing joy and laughter into old people’s life.
Although robots can help us a lot, our love for the elderly can’t be replaced. Let’s take good care of the elderly with the help of robots, making sure they live happily.
The robot is of great use. First, he can give the elderly medicine on time when they are ill. He will also call for help at once if they meet danger. Besides, the robot can do some cooking and sweep the floor for the elderly, which makes their life easier. Last but not least, he is good at communicating with the elderly. He can tell stories and jokes, bringing joy and laughter into old people’s life.
Although robots can help us a lot, our love for the elderly can’t be replaced. Let’s take good care of the elderly with the help of robots, making sure they live happily.
答案
写作提优练
范文:
Li Hua, a student from Ningde, has won a prize in the Science Popularization and Innovation Competition with a creative elderly assistant robot. Here is a report about this robot.
The robot is tall and looks very cute. He looks like a friendly person, making it easier for the elderly to accept him.
The robot is of great use. First, he can give the elderly medicine on time when they are ill. He will also call for help at once if they meet danger. Besides, the robot can do some cooking and sweep the floor for the elderly, which makes their life easier. Last but not least, he is good at communicating with the elderly. He can tell stories and jokes, bringing joy and laughter into old people’s life.
Although robots can help us a lot, our love for the elderly can’t be replaced. Let’s take good care of the elderly with the help of robots, making sure they live happily.
范文:
Li Hua, a student from Ningde, has won a prize in the Science Popularization and Innovation Competition with a creative elderly assistant robot. Here is a report about this robot.
The robot is tall and looks very cute. He looks like a friendly person, making it easier for the elderly to accept him.
The robot is of great use. First, he can give the elderly medicine on time when they are ill. He will also call for help at once if they meet danger. Besides, the robot can do some cooking and sweep the floor for the elderly, which makes their life easier. Last but not least, he is good at communicating with the elderly. He can tell stories and jokes, bringing joy and laughter into old people’s life.
Although robots can help us a lot, our love for the elderly can’t be replaced. Let’s take good care of the elderly with the help of robots, making sure they live happily.
解析
【分析】
这是一篇英语新闻报道写作题，需围绕获奖的老年人助手机器人，按要求包含外观、功能、看法三个核心要点。首先，开头已给出，第一步要结合提示词描述机器人外观，突出其友好易被老人接受的特点；第二步分点介绍功能，覆盖给药、做家务、交流等提示内容，适当补充细节让内容更具体；第三步表达看法，强调机器人无法替代对老人的关爱，传递“借助机器人同时要给予老人真实关怀”的理念。写作时需注意逻辑清晰，语言通顺，确保所有要点都被覆盖，词数达标。
【解析】
1. 确定文章结构：分为三段，分别对应外观、功能、看法。
2. 外观部分：结合提示词tall、cute，描述机器人外形，如“The robot is tall and looks very cute, like a friendly companion, which makes the elderly willing to get close to it.”
3. 功能部分：分点阐述，首先说明给药功能（按时给老人递药）；其次说明做家务功能（做饭、扫地等）；最后说明交流功能（讲故事、讲笑话），让老人生活更愉悦。
4. 看法部分：结合提示not replace、care，表达“机器人虽有帮助，但无法替代人类对老人的关爱，应借助机器人辅助老人，同时给予真实照顾”。
5. 检查所有要点是否覆盖，调整语句使文章流畅，确保词数符合要求。
【答案】
Li Hua, a student from Ningde, has won a prize in the Science Popularization and Innovation Competition with a creative elderly assistant robot. Here is a report about this robot.
The robot is tall and looks very cute. He looks like a friendly person, making it easier for the elderly to accept him.
The robot is of great use. First, he can give the elderly medicine on time when they are ill. He will also call for help at once if they meet danger. Besides, the robot can do some cooking and sweep the floor for the elderly, which makes their life easier. Last but not least, he is good at communicating with the elderly. He can tell stories and jokes, bringing joy and laughter into old people’s life.
Although robots can help us a lot, our love for the elderly can’t be replaced. Let’s take good care of the elderly with the help of robots, making sure they live happily.
【知识点】
英语写作、要点表达、新闻报道
【点评】
本题考查学生的英语综合写作能力，要求学生根据给定提示完成新闻报道，需覆盖所有要点，适当发挥，语言通顺，符合初中英语写作要求，能体现学生对话题的理解和语言运用能力。
【难度系数】
0.6
这是一篇英语新闻报道写作题，需围绕获奖的老年人助手机器人，按要求包含外观、功能、看法三个核心要点。首先，开头已给出，第一步要结合提示词描述机器人外观，突出其友好易被老人接受的特点；第二步分点介绍功能，覆盖给药、做家务、交流等提示内容，适当补充细节让内容更具体；第三步表达看法，强调机器人无法替代对老人的关爱，传递“借助机器人同时要给予老人真实关怀”的理念。写作时需注意逻辑清晰，语言通顺，确保所有要点都被覆盖，词数达标。
【解析】
1. 确定文章结构：分为三段，分别对应外观、功能、看法。
2. 外观部分：结合提示词tall、cute，描述机器人外形，如“The robot is tall and looks very cute, like a friendly companion, which makes the elderly willing to get close to it.”
3. 功能部分：分点阐述，首先说明给药功能（按时给老人递药）；其次说明做家务功能（做饭、扫地等）；最后说明交流功能（讲故事、讲笑话），让老人生活更愉悦。
4. 看法部分：结合提示not replace、care，表达“机器人虽有帮助，但无法替代人类对老人的关爱，应借助机器人辅助老人，同时给予真实照顾”。
5. 检查所有要点是否覆盖，调整语句使文章流畅，确保词数符合要求。
【答案】
Li Hua, a student from Ningde, has won a prize in the Science Popularization and Innovation Competition with a creative elderly assistant robot. Here is a report about this robot.
The robot is tall and looks very cute. He looks like a friendly person, making it easier for the elderly to accept him.
The robot is of great use. First, he can give the elderly medicine on time when they are ill. He will also call for help at once if they meet danger. Besides, the robot can do some cooking and sweep the floor for the elderly, which makes their life easier. Last but not least, he is good at communicating with the elderly. He can tell stories and jokes, bringing joy and laughter into old people’s life.
Although robots can help us a lot, our love for the elderly can’t be replaced. Let’s take good care of the elderly with the help of robots, making sure they live happily.
【知识点】
英语写作、要点表达、新闻报道
【点评】
本题考查学生的英语综合写作能力，要求学生根据给定提示完成新闻报道，需覆盖所有要点，适当发挥，语言通顺，符合初中英语写作要求，能体现学生对话题的理解和语言运用能力。
【难度系数】
0.6
