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在成长的过程中，来自长辈、朋友甚至陌生人的鼓励对我们都很重要。请以“The best encouragement I have ever received”为题，选择一次来自他人对你的鼓励，结合你的经历，介绍事情经过并谈谈你的感受。
要求：
1. 词数100左右。短文的开头已给出，不计入总词数。
2. 不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息。
The best encouragement I have ever received
Life is full of difficulties, so we need to receive encouragement from others.
在成长的过程中，来自长辈、朋友甚至陌生人的鼓励对我们都很重要。请以“The best encouragement I have ever received”为题，选择一次来自他人对你的鼓励，结合你的经历，介绍事情经过并谈谈你的感受。
要求：
1. 词数100左右。短文的开头已给出，不计入总词数。
2. 不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息。
The best encouragement I have ever received
Life is full of difficulties, so we need to receive encouragement from others.
Once, I made a speech at school. I tried hard to say every word clearly. Unluckily, I was so nervous
that I forgot one part of my speech. My face turned red and my mind went blank. I was about to give up
and leave the stage when I heard someone shout, "You are great. You can do it!" I suddenly became
powerful and regained the courage. I calmed down and completed my speech. Since then, I have realized
that we need encouragement from others.
This is the best encouragement I have ever received.
that I forgot one part of my speech. My face turned red and my mind went blank. I was about to give up
and leave the stage when I heard someone shout, "You are great. You can do it!" I suddenly became
powerful and regained the courage. I calmed down and completed my speech. Since then, I have realized
that we need encouragement from others.
This is the best encouragement I have ever received.
答案
(四) The best encouragement I have ever received
Life is full of difficulties, so we need to receive encouragement from others.
Once, I made a speech at school. I tried hard to say every word clearly. Unluckily, I was so nervous
that I forgot one part of my speech. My face turned red and my mind went blank. I was about to give up
and leave the stage when I heard someone shout, "You are great. You can do it!" I suddenly became
powerful and regained the courage. I calmed down and completed my speech. Since then, I have realized
that we need encouragement from others.
This is the best encouragement I have ever received.
Life is full of difficulties, so we need to receive encouragement from others.
Once, I made a speech at school. I tried hard to say every word clearly. Unluckily, I was so nervous
that I forgot one part of my speech. My face turned red and my mind went blank. I was about to give up
and leave the stage when I heard someone shout, "You are great. You can do it!" I suddenly became
powerful and regained the courage. I calmed down and completed my speech. Since then, I have realized
that we need encouragement from others.
This is the best encouragement I have ever received.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道题首先要明确写作要求：主题是介绍自己收到过的最棒的一次鼓励，属于叙事类英语短文，词数控制在100左右，开头已经给出，不能泄露个人姓名、学校等隐私信息。接下来我们可以优先选择贴近日常校园生活的、多数学生有共鸣的常见经历，降低写作难度。随后梳理行文逻辑：先承接开头引出具体事件，再描述事件中自己遇到的困境，接着写出他人给出鼓励的瞬间，再写鼓励给自己带来的改变，最后收尾点明这件事就是自己收到过的最好的鼓励，全程规避个人专属隐私信息即可顺理成章完成全文。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：本题属于叙事类话题作文，核心要覆盖“事件经过、鼓励的内容、个人感受”三个核心要素，叙事部分使用一般过去时，收尾点题部分可结合现在完成时呼应标题。
2. 行文展开：
① 承接给定开头，直接引入具体事件：自己曾经在学校参加演讲，原本努力准备想要清晰表达每一个词。
② 制造冲突：上台后过度紧张，遗忘了部分演讲内容，窘迫到想要直接放弃离场。
③ 核心情节推进：就在自己即将放弃的时候收到了他人的鼓励喊话，瞬间重拾力量，冷静下来顺利完成了演讲。
④ 收尾升华：点明这次经历让自己意识到鼓励的重要性，点题说明这就是自己收到过的最好的鼓励。
3. 全文词数符合要求，没有出现任何个人隐私信息，完全满足题目的所有规则。
【答案】
The best encouragement I have ever received
Life is full of difficulties, so we need to receive encouragement from others.
Once, I made a speech at school. I tried hard to say every word clearly. Unluckily, I was so nervous that I forgot one part of my speech. My face turned red and my mind went blank. I was about to give up and leave the stage when I heard someone shout, "You are great. You can do it!" I suddenly became powerful and regained the courage. I calmed down and completed my speech. Since then, I have realized that we need encouragement from others.
This is the best encouragement I have ever received.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，一般过去时应用，话题作文审题
【点评】
这篇范文选取的校园演讲场景非常贴近学生日常，叙事脉络清晰流畅，用词地道简单，没有冗余的复杂表达，完整覆盖了题目要求的所有写作要点，情节有起伏有真情实感，是一篇非常适合学生模仿学习的同话题范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道题首先要明确写作要求：主题是介绍自己收到过的最棒的一次鼓励，属于叙事类英语短文，词数控制在100左右，开头已经给出，不能泄露个人姓名、学校等隐私信息。接下来我们可以优先选择贴近日常校园生活的、多数学生有共鸣的常见经历，降低写作难度。随后梳理行文逻辑：先承接开头引出具体事件，再描述事件中自己遇到的困境，接着写出他人给出鼓励的瞬间，再写鼓励给自己带来的改变，最后收尾点明这件事就是自己收到过的最好的鼓励，全程规避个人专属隐私信息即可顺理成章完成全文。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：本题属于叙事类话题作文，核心要覆盖“事件经过、鼓励的内容、个人感受”三个核心要素，叙事部分使用一般过去时，收尾点题部分可结合现在完成时呼应标题。
2. 行文展开：
① 承接给定开头，直接引入具体事件：自己曾经在学校参加演讲，原本努力准备想要清晰表达每一个词。
② 制造冲突：上台后过度紧张，遗忘了部分演讲内容，窘迫到想要直接放弃离场。
③ 核心情节推进：就在自己即将放弃的时候收到了他人的鼓励喊话，瞬间重拾力量，冷静下来顺利完成了演讲。
④ 收尾升华：点明这次经历让自己意识到鼓励的重要性，点题说明这就是自己收到过的最好的鼓励。
3. 全文词数符合要求，没有出现任何个人隐私信息，完全满足题目的所有规则。
【答案】
The best encouragement I have ever received
Life is full of difficulties, so we need to receive encouragement from others.
Once, I made a speech at school. I tried hard to say every word clearly. Unluckily, I was so nervous that I forgot one part of my speech. My face turned red and my mind went blank. I was about to give up and leave the stage when I heard someone shout, "You are great. You can do it!" I suddenly became powerful and regained the courage. I calmed down and completed my speech. Since then, I have realized that we need encouragement from others.
This is the best encouragement I have ever received.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，一般过去时应用，话题作文审题
【点评】
这篇范文选取的校园演讲场景非常贴近学生日常，叙事脉络清晰流畅，用词地道简单，没有冗余的复杂表达，完整覆盖了题目要求的所有写作要点，情节有起伏有真情实感，是一篇非常适合学生模仿学习的同话题范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
