(二)
假如你是阳光中学的英国交流学生西蒙(Simon)，回英国后，老师请你做了一个关于中国的介绍。此前，你在阳光中学的同学林红为你提供了中国礼仪、节日、名胜和教育等方面的信息。请你用英语给林红写一封邮件，邮件应包括以下内容。
➢ thank her for her help
➢ say what your teacher thinks about your report
➢ explain which information is the most useful and why
要求：
1. 内容涵盖所有要点，可适当发挥。
2. 词数100左右。邮件的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
3. 不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息。
Dear Lin Hong,

Yours sincerely,
Simon

(二) Dear Lin Hong,
I'd like to thank you for providing me with so many materials. I can finish my report with your
information about Chinese manners, festivals, education, and places of interest.
I feel so excited when Mr Green, my teacher, thinks highly of my report. What's more, he wants me
to say more about Chinese education.
I think the information about the places of interest in China is the most useful because, thanks to my
introduction, many of my classmates hope to visit China very soon.
I still miss the happy days we spent together! I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Simon

【分析】
拿到这道题首先明确核心任务：以刚返回英国的交流生Simon的身份，给中国好友林红写一封答谢邮件。第一步先把题干要求的三个必写要点全部标记出来，避免后续写作遗漏：① 向林红致谢，感谢她此前提供的中国相关信息的帮助；② 说明自己的老师对这次中国主题介绍报告的评价；③ 选出你认为最有用的一类信息，说明对应的原因。接下来搭建写作框架：开篇直接致谢，点明她提供的礼仪、节日、名胜、教育几类信息帮自己顺利完成了报告；接着自然过渡到老师对报告的正面评价，补充小细节让内容更真实；之后说明哪类信息最有用，给出符合逻辑的原因，最后补充符合好友语境的收尾内容，控制总词数在100左右，注意不泄露任何私人信息即可。
【解析】
1. 文体与人称确定：本题属于私人交际类英语邮件，使用第一人称叙事，语气要亲切自然，符合同龄好友交流的轻松语境，不要使用过于生硬的正式书面语。
2. 逐一覆盖指定要点：
① 致谢部分：直接点明感谢林红提供的中国礼仪、节日、名胜、教育相关的各类资料，说明这些资料是自己完成主题报告的重要支撑；
② 老师评价部分：设定老师高度认可这份报告，还可以补充老师提出想要进一步了解中国相关内容的细节，让内容更真实饱满；
③ 最有用信息部分：选择名胜相关的信息作为最有用的内容，解释原因是自己介绍完中国的知名景点后，很多英国同班同学都对中国产生了强烈的兴趣，非常希望能来中国游览，逻辑通顺合理。
3. 最后补充少量自然的收尾内容，比如怀念之前一起在阳光中学度过的时光，期待收到林红的回信，调整语句让全文连贯流畅，控制词数符合100左右的要求，全程不出现真实校名、人名等隐私信息即可。
【答案】
Dear Lin Hong,
I'd like to thank you for providing me with so many materials. I can finish my report with your information about Chinese manners, festivals, education, and places of interest.
I feel so excited when Mr Green, my teacher, thinks highly of my report. What's more, he wants me to say more about Chinese education.
I think the information about the places of interest in China is the most useful because, thanks to my introduction, many of my classmates hope to visit China very soon.
I still miss the happy days we spent together! I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Simon
【知识点】
英语邮件写作，应用文写作，要点作文审题
【点评】
本题是初中阶段非常典型的交际类应用文写作题，考点清晰明确，核心要求是学生能完整覆盖题干给出的所有指定写作要点，同时保证语句通顺、逻辑连贯，符合私人邮件的亲切语气。学生写作时可以先把所有要求的要点逐一列出来，写完后对照检查有没有遗漏，再补充少量合理的生活化细节，避免出现基础语法错误，就可以拿到较高的分数。
【难度系数】
0.7

(三)
萨姆(Sam)在学校的英语学习论坛里发了一个帖子寻求帮助，请阅读他的帖子，并针对他提出的问题写英语回帖为他提供帮助。
|Sam,
Posted
(2 days ago)|My problem
I'm very worried about the coming English oral test(口语测试). I'm not good at speaking English. I've no idea about how to practise oral English. My parents are angry with me because I haven't made much progress. What should I do? Can you give me some advice?|
| ---- | ---- |
要求：
1. 词数100左右。短文的开头已给出，不计入总词数。
2. 不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息。
Re: Sam
Don't lose heart.

(三) Re: Sam
Don't lose heart. Confidence will solve many problems. There are some ways to improve your oral
English.
First of all, recite the words and be patient. This is because the sentences are composed of words, and
you will be more fluent when you are familiar with them. Secondly, you should read after recordings and
get a basic sense about what the language sounds like. Keep practising so that you can speak fluently.
Thirdly, you should find more classmates to communicate with you in your classroom. Finally, have a talk
with your parents and explain to them that you are trying your best.
I hope my advice will be helpful to you.

【分析】
首先第一步先审题，梳理Sam提出的全部诉求：一是对即将到来的口语测试很焦虑，不知道怎么练习英语口语；二是自己进步小导致父母生气，不知道怎么处理。接下来构思行文逻辑：首先承接题目给出的开头句，先安抚Sam的情绪，点明自信的重要性，打消他的自我否定；然后给出多条可落地、符合学生日常场景的口语练习方法，让建议有实操性；之后还要回应他和父母的矛盾点，给出简单的沟通建议，不要遗漏题干给出的信息点；最后收尾送上祝福，全程控制词数在100左右，不出现任何个人隐私信息，保证语气是友好的同辈回帖的感觉即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定要点：需要覆盖三个核心内容：① 鼓励焦虑的Sam，帮他建立信心；② 给出实用的口语提升方法，帮助他应对口语测试；③ 给出和父母沟通的小建议，化解他和父母的矛盾，同时满足词数100左右、不泄露个人信息的要求。
2. 搭建行文结构：
第一部分：承接给定开头，点明自信的作用，引出下文的建议；
第二部分：用逻辑连接词（first of all, secondly, thirdly, finally）串联不同的建议，先讲口语练习的具体方法，最后补充和父母沟通的建议，逻辑清晰层次分明；
第三部分：收尾送上祝福，完成回帖。
3. 遣词造句保证表达地道、语法正确，符合校园论坛回帖的轻松友好的语境。
完整参考回帖如下：
Re: Sam
Don't lose heart. Confidence will solve many problems. There are some ways to improve your oral English.
First of all, recite the words and be patient. This is because the sentences are composed of words, and you will be more fluent when you are familiar with them. Secondly, you should read after recordings and get a basic sense about what the language sounds like. Keep practising so that you can speak fluently. Thirdly, you should find more classmates to communicate with you in your classroom. Finally, have a talk with your parents and explain to them that you are trying your best.
I hope my advice will be helpful to you.
【答案】
Re: Sam
Don't lose heart. Confidence will solve many problems. There are some ways to improve your oral English.
First of all, recite the words and be patient. This is because the sentences are composed of words, and you will be more fluent when you are familiar with them. Secondly, you should read after recordings and get a basic sense about what the language sounds like. Keep practising so that you can speak fluently. Thirdly, you should find more classmates to communicate with you in your classroom. Finally, have a talk with your parents and explain to them that you are trying your best.
I hope my advice will be helpful to you.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作；建议类表达；情景交际写作
【点评】
本题属于校园场景的应用文写作，核心考察学生用英语输出实用建议的能力，需要注意不能遗漏题干给出的所有问题点，除了练习口语的方法之外，也要回应Sam和父母的矛盾，合理使用逻辑连接词可以让行文条理更清晰，语气贴合论坛同辈互助的语境即可拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.6