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Tom、Simon 和 Daniel 是第一中学的三名学生，他们根据各自的兴趣，每周参加不同的志愿者工作。请以“Being a volunteer is great”为题，写一篇不少于 80 词的短文。
提示：1. 帮助地震中幸存下来的人；2. 让座给老年人；3. 捐款给慈善机构……
Tom、Simon 和 Daniel 是第一中学的三名学生，他们根据各自的兴趣，每周参加不同的志愿者工作。请以“Being a volunteer is great”为题，写一篇不少于 80 词的短文。
提示：1. 帮助地震中幸存下来的人；2. 让座给老年人；3. 捐款给慈善机构……
答案
Being a volunteer is great
Tom, Simon and Daniel are students from No.1 Middle School. All of them are volunteers and they do different volunteer work every week according to their own interests.
Tom is very warm-hearted. He often spends his free time helping the people who survived from the earthquake. He helps them tidy up their new homes and tells interesting stories to cheer them up. Simon is a polite boy. He always gives his seat to the old people on the bus, and he also helps the elderly in the nearby community carry heavy things. Daniel often donates his pocket money to the charity to help people in need.
They all feel very happy when they help others. They all agree that being a volunteer is really great.
Tom, Simon and Daniel are students from No.1 Middle School. All of them are volunteers and they do different volunteer work every week according to their own interests.
Tom is very warm-hearted. He often spends his free time helping the people who survived from the earthquake. He helps them tidy up their new homes and tells interesting stories to cheer them up. Simon is a polite boy. He always gives his seat to the old people on the bus, and he also helps the elderly in the nearby community carry heavy things. Daniel often donates his pocket money to the charity to help people in need.
They all feel very happy when they help others. They all agree that being a volunteer is really great.
解析
【分析】
首先明确作文主题为“Being a volunteer is great”，需围绕Tom、Simon、Daniel三名学生的不同志愿活动展开。第一步，开头点明三人的身份（第一中学学生）及志愿身份，引出主题；第二步，分别对应提示的三个志愿方向：Tom帮助地震幸存者，Simon给老人让座及帮助社区老人，Daniel捐款给慈善机构，补充具体细节丰富内容；第三步，结尾表达三人的感受，升华主题，确保词数达标。
【解析】
1. 开头：介绍Tom、Simon和Daniel是第一中学的学生，均为志愿者，每周根据兴趣做不同志愿工作，点题。
2. 主体：分别描述三人的志愿活动：Tom热心帮助地震幸存者，帮他们整理新家、讲故事打气；Simon礼貌，在公交让座给老人，还帮社区老人搬重物；Daniel把零花钱捐给慈善机构帮助有需要的人。
3. 结尾：总结三人帮助他人时都很开心，认同做志愿者很棒，呼应主题。
【答案】
Being a volunteer is great
Tom, Simon and Daniel are students from No.1 Middle School. All of them are volunteers and they do different volunteer work every week according to their own interests.
Tom is very warm-hearted. He often spends his free time helping the people who survived from the earthquake. He helps them tidy up their new homes and tells interesting stories to cheer them up. Simon is a polite boy. He always gives his seat to the old people on the bus, and he also helps the elderly in the nearby community carry heavy things. Daniel often donates his pocket money to the charity to help people in need.
They all feel very happy when they help others. They all agree that being a volunteer is really great.
【知识点】
英语话题作文写作、英语志愿词汇运用
【点评】
本文紧扣主题，结构清晰，按“引入人物-分述志愿行为-总结升华”逻辑展开，结合提示要求补充具体细节，语言通顺，情感真挚，符合词数要求，是一篇优秀范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先明确作文主题为“Being a volunteer is great”，需围绕Tom、Simon、Daniel三名学生的不同志愿活动展开。第一步，开头点明三人的身份（第一中学学生）及志愿身份，引出主题；第二步，分别对应提示的三个志愿方向：Tom帮助地震幸存者，Simon给老人让座及帮助社区老人，Daniel捐款给慈善机构，补充具体细节丰富内容；第三步，结尾表达三人的感受，升华主题，确保词数达标。
【解析】
1. 开头：介绍Tom、Simon和Daniel是第一中学的学生，均为志愿者，每周根据兴趣做不同志愿工作，点题。
2. 主体：分别描述三人的志愿活动：Tom热心帮助地震幸存者，帮他们整理新家、讲故事打气；Simon礼貌，在公交让座给老人，还帮社区老人搬重物；Daniel把零花钱捐给慈善机构帮助有需要的人。
3. 结尾：总结三人帮助他人时都很开心，认同做志愿者很棒，呼应主题。
【答案】
Being a volunteer is great
Tom, Simon and Daniel are students from No.1 Middle School. All of them are volunteers and they do different volunteer work every week according to their own interests.
Tom is very warm-hearted. He often spends his free time helping the people who survived from the earthquake. He helps them tidy up their new homes and tells interesting stories to cheer them up. Simon is a polite boy. He always gives his seat to the old people on the bus, and he also helps the elderly in the nearby community carry heavy things. Daniel often donates his pocket money to the charity to help people in need.
They all feel very happy when they help others. They all agree that being a volunteer is really great.
【知识点】
英语话题作文写作、英语志愿词汇运用
【点评】
本文紧扣主题，结构清晰，按“引入人物-分述志愿行为-总结升华”逻辑展开，结合提示要求补充具体细节，语言通顺，情感真挚，符合词数要求，是一篇优秀范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
素材积累»
[开头句]
1. A strong rainstorm hit my home town. It happened on June 25th last year. （背景）
2. Earthquakes always happen suddenly, so it is difficult to warn people. （现象）
[中间句]
1. I was so worried that I couldn't say a word. （心理）
2. We should close the windows when a typhoon comes. （做法）
[结尾句]
No matter how many difficulties we have, I believe all of the problems will be solved in the end. （展望）
[名言警句]
There is no rainbow without the rain and wind.
不经历风雨，怎能见彩虹。
写作演练»
地球是我们人类共同的家园，“低碳、环保”已成为当今时代的主题。目前，我市英语协会准备在全市中学生中开展以“Save our earth”为主题的英文征文活动，请你写一篇80～100词的短文参评(开头已给出，不计入总词数)。
[思路点拨]
1. 时态：以一般现在时为主。2. 人称：介绍灾害时要用第三人称；介绍措施时应用第一人称。3. 写作时，应先写地球的重要性，再写目前存在的问题，最后写人类应该采取的措施。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
We all live on the earth. The earth is our home.
(更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”)
[开头句]
1. A strong rainstorm hit my home town. It happened on June 25th last year. （背景）
2. Earthquakes always happen suddenly, so it is difficult to warn people. （现象）
[中间句]
1. I was so worried that I couldn't say a word. （心理）
2. We should close the windows when a typhoon comes. （做法）
[结尾句]
No matter how many difficulties we have, I believe all of the problems will be solved in the end. （展望）
[名言警句]
There is no rainbow without the rain and wind.
不经历风雨，怎能见彩虹。
写作演练»
地球是我们人类共同的家园，“低碳、环保”已成为当今时代的主题。目前，我市英语协会准备在全市中学生中开展以“Save our earth”为主题的英文征文活动，请你写一篇80～100词的短文参评(开头已给出，不计入总词数)。
[思路点拨]
1. 时态：以一般现在时为主。2. 人称：介绍灾害时要用第三人称；介绍措施时应用第一人称。3. 写作时，应先写地球的重要性，再写目前存在的问题，最后写人类应该采取的措施。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
We all live on the earth. The earth is our home.
We have only one earth. We must take care of it. If we harm it, it will be angry. And then we will have a terrible end.
There are three main problems on our earth. They are pollution, disasters and illness.
It's our duty to protect our environment. So we must plant more trees, protect the flowers and the trees and reduce the pollution.
Protecting nature is very important. It's our duty to keep our environment clean and tidy. If everyone makes a contribution to protecting the environment, the earth will become much more beautiful.
(更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”)
答案
One possible version:
We all live on the earth. The earth is our home. We have only one earth. We must take care of it. If we harm it, it will be angry. And then we will have a terrible end.
There are three main problems on our earth. They are pollution, disasters and illness. It's our duty to protect our environment. So we must plant more trees, protect the flowers and the trees and reduce the pollution.
Protecting nature is very important. It's our duty to keep our environment clean and tidy. If everyone makes a contribution to protecting the environment, the earth will become much more beautiful.
We all live on the earth. The earth is our home. We have only one earth. We must take care of it. If we harm it, it will be angry. And then we will have a terrible end.
There are three main problems on our earth. They are pollution, disasters and illness. It's our duty to protect our environment. So we must plant more trees, protect the flowers and the trees and reduce the pollution.
Protecting nature is very important. It's our duty to keep our environment clean and tidy. If everyone makes a contribution to protecting the environment, the earth will become much more beautiful.
解析
【分析】
本题是英语话题写作题，主题为“Save our earth”，要求写80～100词的短文，开头已给出。解题思路需遵循给定的思路点拨：先承接开头阐述地球的重要性，再说明地球存在的主要问题，最后提出保护地球的措施及展望。写作时要注意时态以一般现在时为主，人称使用正确，紧扣主题，结构清晰。
【解析】
根据写作要求，首先承接开头补充地球的唯一性及需爱护的原因；接着列举地球存在的三个主要问题；然后提出具体的保护措施；最后表达对未来的展望，确保内容完整、紧扣主题，符合字数要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
We all live on the earth. The earth is our home. We have only one earth. We must take care of it. If we harm it, it will be angry. And then we will have a terrible end.
There are three main problems on our earth. They are pollution, disasters and illness. It's our duty to protect our environment. So we must plant more trees, protect the flowers and the trees and reduce the pollution.
Protecting nature is very important. It's our duty to keep our environment clean and tidy. If everyone makes a contribution to protecting the environment, the earth will become much more beautiful.
【知识点】
英语话题写作；一般现在时运用；环境保护话题词汇
【点评】
本文紧扣“Save our earth”主题，结构清晰，按照“地球重要性-存在问题-保护措施”的思路展开，用词准确，符合初中英语写作要求，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
本题是英语话题写作题，主题为“Save our earth”，要求写80～100词的短文，开头已给出。解题思路需遵循给定的思路点拨：先承接开头阐述地球的重要性，再说明地球存在的主要问题，最后提出保护地球的措施及展望。写作时要注意时态以一般现在时为主，人称使用正确，紧扣主题，结构清晰。
【解析】
根据写作要求，首先承接开头补充地球的唯一性及需爱护的原因；接着列举地球存在的三个主要问题；然后提出具体的保护措施；最后表达对未来的展望，确保内容完整、紧扣主题，符合字数要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
We all live on the earth. The earth is our home. We have only one earth. We must take care of it. If we harm it, it will be angry. And then we will have a terrible end.
There are three main problems on our earth. They are pollution, disasters and illness. It's our duty to protect our environment. So we must plant more trees, protect the flowers and the trees and reduce the pollution.
Protecting nature is very important. It's our duty to keep our environment clean and tidy. If everyone makes a contribution to protecting the environment, the earth will become much more beautiful.
【知识点】
英语话题写作；一般现在时运用；环境保护话题词汇
【点评】
本文紧扣“Save our earth”主题，结构清晰，按照“地球重要性-存在问题-保护措施”的思路展开，用词准确，符合初中英语写作要求，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
