登录
C(2025·江苏徐州调研)
初中三年校园生活丰富多彩，有些活动一定令你难忘。近期，你校英文报举办“The school activity I will never forget”的主题征文活动，请你根据下图提示，写一篇短文投稿。
【要求】1. 参考下图，选择至少一次活动并详细介绍，可适当发挥.
2. 文章不少于 90 词，开头已给出，不计入总词数.
3. 文中不得出现真实的姓名、校名等信息.
The school activity I will never forget
In the past three years, there have been many colourful activities in our school. I will never forget
初中三年校园生活丰富多彩，有些活动一定令你难忘。近期，你校英文报举办“The school activity I will never forget”的主题征文活动，请你根据下图提示，写一篇短文投稿。
【要求】1. 参考下图，选择至少一次活动并详细介绍，可适当发挥.
2. 文章不少于 90 词，开头已给出，不计入总词数.
3. 文中不得出现真实的姓名、校名等信息.
The school activity I will never forget
In the past three years, there have been many colourful activities in our school. I will never forget
答案
One possible version
The school activity I will never forget
In the past three years, there have been many colourful activities in our school. I will never forget the club activity in Grade Eight.
I was a member of the English Drama Club. Every Tuesday, we got together in Room 7A and learnt to act interesting plays. It was my favourite time at school. Last year, our teacher encouraged us to perform in front of all the students. We felt nervous at first, but our teacher believed us. To make it successful, we spent several weekends practising. It was tiring but no one gave up. Finally, we performed excellently and all the teachers and students praised us. Every member was satisfied with it.
Thanks to the club activity, I not only achieved my acting dream but also made some true friends. I will never forget the experience.
The school activity I will never forget
In the past three years, there have been many colourful activities in our school. I will never forget the club activity in Grade Eight.
I was a member of the English Drama Club. Every Tuesday, we got together in Room 7A and learnt to act interesting plays. It was my favourite time at school. Last year, our teacher encouraged us to perform in front of all the students. We felt nervous at first, but our teacher believed us. To make it successful, we spent several weekends practising. It was tiring but no one gave up. Finally, we performed excellently and all the teachers and students praised us. Every member was satisfied with it.
Thanks to the club activity, I not only achieved my acting dream but also made some true friends. I will never forget the experience.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先要先明确核心要求：主题是“难忘的校园活动”，需要从给出的饼图选项里选至少一个活动，还要覆盖提示的What、When、Where、With whom、Why等核心要素。第一步先选自己容易展开细节的活动，比如参考范文选的社团活动，不需要选多个活动，把单个活动写饱满就符合要求。第二步搭建叙事逻辑：先承接题干给出的开头，直接点出你难忘的具体活动，回答清楚“是什么活动、发生在什么时候”；中间部分详细补充活动的细节，交代活动的常规开展地点、参与人员，再加入具体的事件波折比如准备演出的过程，把事件写得有画面感；最后收尾点明这次活动带给你的收获，解释为什么你会永远记住它，所有提示的要素就全部覆盖了，最后检查字数达标、没有出现真实个人信息即可。
【解析】
1. 确定文体与时态：这是一篇叙事类征文，属于记叙文，开篇沿用题干给出的现在完成时引入，主体叙事部分使用一般过去时，符合描述过去经历的语法要求。
2. 搭建三段式结构：
① 开篇承接给定开头，直接点明核心事件：我永远不会忘记八年级参加的社团活动，快速点题。
② 中间主体部分展开细节：先交代自己是英语戏剧社成员，常规活动的时间是每周二、地点在7A教室，再重点叙述后续公开演出的经历：一开始大家紧张，在老师鼓励下利用多个周末排练，没人放弃，最终演出大获好评，完整覆盖所有提示要素。
③ 结尾升华主题：说明这次活动的收获，既实现了表演的小梦想，也交到了真心的朋友，呼应“永远难忘”的主题。
3. 优化表达：适当使用not only...but also等高分句型，补充细节让叙事有真情实感，字数远超90词的要求，完全符合征文规范。
【答案】
The school activity I will never forget
In the past three years, there have been many colourful activities in our school. I will never forget the club activity in Grade Eight.
I was a member of the English Drama Club. Every Tuesday, we got together in Room 7A and learnt to act interesting plays. It was my favourite time at school. Last year, our teacher encouraged us to perform in front of all the students. We felt nervous at first, but our teacher believed us. To make it successful, we spent several weekends practising. It was tiring but no one gave up. Finally, we performed excellently and all the teachers and students praised us. Every member was satisfied with it.
Thanks to the club activity, I not only achieved my acting dream but also made some true friends. I will never forget the experience.
【知识点】
记叙文写作，一般过去时应用，要点全覆盖
【点评】
这篇范文选取社团活动作为写作对象，叙事流畅自然，完整覆盖了题目要求的所有提示要素，时间、地点、参与人员、事件经过和个人收获都交代得清晰饱满，用到了not only...but also等高分句型，情感真挚，完全符合征文的各项要求，也规避了出现真实个人信息的问题，学生写作时可以借鉴这种“开篇点题-中间叙事-结尾升华收获”的经典结构，很容易拿到写作高分。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道写作题首先要先明确核心要求：主题是“难忘的校园活动”，需要从给出的饼图选项里选至少一个活动，还要覆盖提示的What、When、Where、With whom、Why等核心要素。第一步先选自己容易展开细节的活动，比如参考范文选的社团活动，不需要选多个活动，把单个活动写饱满就符合要求。第二步搭建叙事逻辑：先承接题干给出的开头，直接点出你难忘的具体活动，回答清楚“是什么活动、发生在什么时候”；中间部分详细补充活动的细节，交代活动的常规开展地点、参与人员，再加入具体的事件波折比如准备演出的过程，把事件写得有画面感；最后收尾点明这次活动带给你的收获，解释为什么你会永远记住它，所有提示的要素就全部覆盖了，最后检查字数达标、没有出现真实个人信息即可。
【解析】
1. 确定文体与时态：这是一篇叙事类征文，属于记叙文，开篇沿用题干给出的现在完成时引入，主体叙事部分使用一般过去时，符合描述过去经历的语法要求。
2. 搭建三段式结构：
① 开篇承接给定开头，直接点明核心事件：我永远不会忘记八年级参加的社团活动，快速点题。
② 中间主体部分展开细节：先交代自己是英语戏剧社成员，常规活动的时间是每周二、地点在7A教室，再重点叙述后续公开演出的经历：一开始大家紧张，在老师鼓励下利用多个周末排练，没人放弃，最终演出大获好评，完整覆盖所有提示要素。
③ 结尾升华主题：说明这次活动的收获，既实现了表演的小梦想，也交到了真心的朋友，呼应“永远难忘”的主题。
3. 优化表达：适当使用not only...but also等高分句型，补充细节让叙事有真情实感，字数远超90词的要求，完全符合征文规范。
【答案】
The school activity I will never forget
In the past three years, there have been many colourful activities in our school. I will never forget the club activity in Grade Eight.
I was a member of the English Drama Club. Every Tuesday, we got together in Room 7A and learnt to act interesting plays. It was my favourite time at school. Last year, our teacher encouraged us to perform in front of all the students. We felt nervous at first, but our teacher believed us. To make it successful, we spent several weekends practising. It was tiring but no one gave up. Finally, we performed excellently and all the teachers and students praised us. Every member was satisfied with it.
Thanks to the club activity, I not only achieved my acting dream but also made some true friends. I will never forget the experience.
【知识点】
记叙文写作，一般过去时应用，要点全覆盖
【点评】
这篇范文选取社团活动作为写作对象，叙事流畅自然，完整覆盖了题目要求的所有提示要素，时间、地点、参与人员、事件经过和个人收获都交代得清晰饱满，用到了not only...but also等高分句型，情感真挚，完全符合征文的各项要求，也规避了出现真实个人信息的问题，学生写作时可以借鉴这种“开篇点题-中间叙事-结尾升华收获”的经典结构，很容易拿到写作高分。
【难度系数】
0.6
