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六、书面表达。(2025·江苏南京秦淮区外国语学校调研)
你和美国网友Peter在对"人工智能(AI)是否能替代教师"的讨论上产生了分歧,请你根据下面的提示,写一篇短文。
★We don't need teachers anymore.
★Students will learn much better. | ☆AI is not good at moral education(德育).
☆AI and teachers should work together.
☆... |
【要求】1. 语句通顺,语法正确,可适当发挥。
2. 不少于90词,开头已给出,不计入总词数。
Artificial Intelligence(AI) has played an important part in people's everyday life since it was put forward in 1956.
你和美国网友Peter在对"人工智能(AI)是否能替代教师"的讨论上产生了分歧,请你根据下面的提示,写一篇短文。
★We don't need teachers anymore.
★Students will learn much better. | ☆AI is not good at moral education(德育).
☆AI and teachers should work together.
☆... |
【要求】1. 语句通顺,语法正确,可适当发挥。
2. 不少于90词,开头已给出,不计入总词数。
Artificial Intelligence(AI) has played an important part in people's everyday life since it was put forward in 1956.
答案
One possible version
Artificial Intelligence(AI) has played an important part in people's everyday life since it was put forward in 1956. It is estimated that the artificial intelligence in the field of education will grow by 50% from 2017 to 2021 in the United States. Peter's opinion is that AI can solve all problems. And in the future, we don't need teachers anymore. Students can learn better with the help of AI.
But in my opinion, AI is not good at moral education, so we also need teachers. With the development of AI, the teachers and AI should work together in order to promote students' progress. In a word, I think the important existence of teachers is irreplaceable and there will be many changes in the practice of teachers' work.
Artificial Intelligence(AI) has played an important part in people's everyday life since it was put forward in 1956. It is estimated that the artificial intelligence in the field of education will grow by 50% from 2017 to 2021 in the United States. Peter's opinion is that AI can solve all problems. And in the future, we don't need teachers anymore. Students can learn better with the help of AI.
But in my opinion, AI is not good at moral education, so we also need teachers. With the development of AI, the teachers and AI should work together in order to promote students' progress. In a word, I think the important existence of teachers is irreplaceable and there will be many changes in the practice of teachers' work.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道题首先明确写作定位：这是一篇观点对比类议论文，需要先完整转述Peter的全部观点，再清晰阐述自己的立场。第一步先梳理所有给定要点：Peter的三个核心观点是AI能解决所有问题、未来不再需要教师、学生借助AI学习效果会更好；我方必须覆盖的要点是AI不擅长德育、AI和教师应当协同工作，还可以自行补充一个贴合主题的合理观点，比如AI没有真实情感无法给学生提供针对性的情绪关怀。第二步搭建行文逻辑：承接题目给出的开头句，先自然引出Peter的看法，把他的三个观点清晰表述出来，之后用转折过渡引出我方不同意见，逐一论证我方观点的合理性，最后总结点明核心立场，保证语句通顺，满足不少于90词的字数要求即可。
【解析】
1. 确定文章基础属性：文体为观点类议论文，时态以一般现在时为主，涉及未来展望可使用一般将来时，人称混合使用第三人称介绍Peter的观点，第一人称表述自身看法。
2. 搭建写作框架：
① 承接给定开头，先补充一句教育领域AI发展的背景，自然引出Peter的立场，完整转述他的三个观点，不要遗漏任何提示要点。
② 用转折连词But过渡，开始阐述自身观点：首先点明AI在德育上的短板，说明教师引导学生树立正确价值观的作用无法被替代，接着提出AI和教师应当协作共同促进学生进步，最后总结教师的角色是不可替代的，二者结合能优化整体教学体验。
3. 检查润色：核对所有要点是否全部覆盖，修正语法错误，调整语句连贯性，确保总词数达标。
【答案】
One possible version
Artificial Intelligence(AI) has played an important part in people's everyday life since it was put forward in 1956. It is estimated that the artificial intelligence in the field of education will grow by 50% from 2017 to 2021 in the United States. Peter's opinion is that AI can solve all problems. And in the future, we don't need teachers anymore. Students can learn better with the help of AI.
But in my opinion, AI is not good at moral education, so we also need teachers. With the development of AI, the teachers and AI should work together in order to promote students' progress. In a word, I think the important existence of teachers is irreplaceable and there will be many changes in the practice of teachers' work.
【知识点】
议论文写作，观点转述，时态运用
【点评】
本题是初中阶段非常典型的观点辨析类书面表达，核心得分点是完整覆盖所有提示要点，行文逻辑清晰。写作时要注意使用合适的过渡词衔接不同部分的内容，避免生硬逐字翻译提示内容，补充的拓展内容要贴合主题，不要脱离"AI和教师的关系"这一核心，整体难度不高，只要要点齐全、语法错误少就能拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道题首先明确写作定位：这是一篇观点对比类议论文，需要先完整转述Peter的全部观点，再清晰阐述自己的立场。第一步先梳理所有给定要点：Peter的三个核心观点是AI能解决所有问题、未来不再需要教师、学生借助AI学习效果会更好；我方必须覆盖的要点是AI不擅长德育、AI和教师应当协同工作，还可以自行补充一个贴合主题的合理观点，比如AI没有真实情感无法给学生提供针对性的情绪关怀。第二步搭建行文逻辑：承接题目给出的开头句，先自然引出Peter的看法，把他的三个观点清晰表述出来，之后用转折过渡引出我方不同意见，逐一论证我方观点的合理性，最后总结点明核心立场，保证语句通顺，满足不少于90词的字数要求即可。
【解析】
1. 确定文章基础属性：文体为观点类议论文，时态以一般现在时为主，涉及未来展望可使用一般将来时，人称混合使用第三人称介绍Peter的观点，第一人称表述自身看法。
2. 搭建写作框架：
① 承接给定开头，先补充一句教育领域AI发展的背景，自然引出Peter的立场，完整转述他的三个观点，不要遗漏任何提示要点。
② 用转折连词But过渡，开始阐述自身观点：首先点明AI在德育上的短板，说明教师引导学生树立正确价值观的作用无法被替代，接着提出AI和教师应当协作共同促进学生进步，最后总结教师的角色是不可替代的，二者结合能优化整体教学体验。
3. 检查润色：核对所有要点是否全部覆盖，修正语法错误，调整语句连贯性，确保总词数达标。
【答案】
One possible version
Artificial Intelligence(AI) has played an important part in people's everyday life since it was put forward in 1956. It is estimated that the artificial intelligence in the field of education will grow by 50% from 2017 to 2021 in the United States. Peter's opinion is that AI can solve all problems. And in the future, we don't need teachers anymore. Students can learn better with the help of AI.
But in my opinion, AI is not good at moral education, so we also need teachers. With the development of AI, the teachers and AI should work together in order to promote students' progress. In a word, I think the important existence of teachers is irreplaceable and there will be many changes in the practice of teachers' work.
【知识点】
议论文写作，观点转述，时态运用
【点评】
本题是初中阶段非常典型的观点辨析类书面表达，核心得分点是完整覆盖所有提示要点，行文逻辑清晰。写作时要注意使用合适的过渡词衔接不同部分的内容，避免生硬逐字翻译提示内容，补充的拓展内容要贴合主题，不要脱离"AI和教师的关系"这一核心，整体难度不高，只要要点齐全、语法错误少就能拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.6
