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Ⅶ. 书面表达。(共1小题,计15分)
96. 假如你是李华,你的社区本周末将开展中华传统民间艺术展示活动,你的英国网友 Peter 也想来参加,作为一名社区活动策划人,请你写一封邮件让他提前了解一下你的家乡、社区和中华传统民间艺术形式。
邮件内容必须包含:
(1)你的家乡与你们家的基本情况;
(2)介绍你所在的社区和一件你为了建设美好社区所做的事;
(3)本次社区活动中,请介绍一项你最喜爱的中华传统民间手工艺。
写作要求:
(1)要点齐全,可适当发挥,使短文连贯、通顺;
(2)词数80左右,开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数;
(3)条理清晰,语意连贯,字迹工整。
Dear Peter,
I'm really excited to tell you something about my hometown, community and the Chinese handicraft I love most.
Yours,
Li Hua
96. 假如你是李华,你的社区本周末将开展中华传统民间艺术展示活动,你的英国网友 Peter 也想来参加,作为一名社区活动策划人,请你写一封邮件让他提前了解一下你的家乡、社区和中华传统民间艺术形式。
邮件内容必须包含:
(1)你的家乡与你们家的基本情况;
(2)介绍你所在的社区和一件你为了建设美好社区所做的事;
(3)本次社区活动中,请介绍一项你最喜爱的中华传统民间手工艺。
写作要求:
(1)要点齐全,可适当发挥,使短文连贯、通顺;
(2)词数80左右,开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数;
(3)条理清晰,语意连贯,字迹工整。
Dear Peter,
I'm really excited to tell you something about my hometown, community and the Chinese handicraft I love most.
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
96. 【范文】
Dear Peter,
I'm really excited to tell you something about my hometown, community and the Chinese handicraft I love most.
I live in a small but beautiful city in southern China. My family has been here for generations, and we love sharing our culture with others. Our community is friendly and active. Last month, I organized a neighborhood clean-up to make our streets cleaner and greener.
At this weekend's activity, you'll see many traditional arts, but my favorite is paper-cutting. Artists use scissors to cut delicate patterns from red paper, symbolizing good luck. It's amazing to watch!
Hope you can come and experience it yourself!
Yours,
Li Hua
Dear Peter,
I'm really excited to tell you something about my hometown, community and the Chinese handicraft I love most.
I live in a small but beautiful city in southern China. My family has been here for generations, and we love sharing our culture with others. Our community is friendly and active. Last month, I organized a neighborhood clean-up to make our streets cleaner and greener.
At this weekend's activity, you'll see many traditional arts, but my favorite is paper-cutting. Artists use scissors to cut delicate patterns from red paper, symbolizing good luck. It's amazing to watch!
Hope you can come and experience it yourself!
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
首先明确写作任务：以李华的身份给英国网友Peter写一封邮件，需包含三个核心要点：①家乡与家庭的基本情况；②所在社区的情况及自己为建设美好社区所做的一件事；③本次活动中自己最喜爱的一项中华传统民间手工艺。其次，注意写作要求：词数80左右，开头和结尾已给出，需适当发挥使内容连贯，语言符合邮件的友好语气，避免复杂句式，确保所有要点齐全。思考时按“家乡家庭→社区经历→喜爱的手工艺”的逻辑顺序组织内容，符合邮件交流的自然节奏，用简单句或并列句连接各要点，保证语句通顺。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，介绍家乡与家庭：用简单句说明家乡位置（中国南方的小城市），家庭在此居住的情况及对分享文化的态度；
2. 介绍社区与自己的贡献：说明社区的特点（友好活跃），再举例自己上个月组织社区清洁活动的事，体现为建设社区做的努力；
3. 介绍喜爱的手工艺：点明最喜爱的是剪纸，说明剪纸的制作方式（剪刀剪红纸）及象征意义（好运），补充观看的感受，使内容具体；
4. 最后补充邀请的话语，完善邮件结尾，控制词数符合要求，确保所有要点覆盖，语言简洁连贯。
【答案】
Dear Peter,
I'm really excited to tell you something about my hometown, community and the Chinese handicraft I love most.
I live in a small but beautiful city in southern China. My family has been here for generations, and we love sharing our culture with others. Our community is friendly and active. Last month, I organized a neighborhood clean-up to make our streets cleaner and greener.
At this weekend's activity, you'll see many traditional arts, but my favorite is paper-cutting. Artists use scissors to cut delicate patterns from red paper, symbolizing good luck. It's amazing to watch!
Hope you can come and experience it yourself!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语邮件写作；中华传统民间艺术英语表达
【点评】
该范文完全覆盖题目要求的所有要点，语言简洁流畅，符合初中英语写作的难度要求，句式简单易懂，适当补充细节（如剪纸象征好运）使内容更丰富，语气友好自然，是一篇符合要求的优秀参考范文。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先明确写作任务：以李华的身份给英国网友Peter写一封邮件，需包含三个核心要点：①家乡与家庭的基本情况；②所在社区的情况及自己为建设美好社区所做的一件事；③本次活动中自己最喜爱的一项中华传统民间手工艺。其次，注意写作要求：词数80左右，开头和结尾已给出，需适当发挥使内容连贯，语言符合邮件的友好语气，避免复杂句式，确保所有要点齐全。思考时按“家乡家庭→社区经历→喜爱的手工艺”的逻辑顺序组织内容，符合邮件交流的自然节奏，用简单句或并列句连接各要点，保证语句通顺。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，介绍家乡与家庭：用简单句说明家乡位置（中国南方的小城市），家庭在此居住的情况及对分享文化的态度；
2. 介绍社区与自己的贡献：说明社区的特点（友好活跃），再举例自己上个月组织社区清洁活动的事，体现为建设社区做的努力；
3. 介绍喜爱的手工艺：点明最喜爱的是剪纸，说明剪纸的制作方式（剪刀剪红纸）及象征意义（好运），补充观看的感受，使内容具体；
4. 最后补充邀请的话语，完善邮件结尾，控制词数符合要求，确保所有要点覆盖，语言简洁连贯。
【答案】
Dear Peter,
I'm really excited to tell you something about my hometown, community and the Chinese handicraft I love most.
I live in a small but beautiful city in southern China. My family has been here for generations, and we love sharing our culture with others. Our community is friendly and active. Last month, I organized a neighborhood clean-up to make our streets cleaner and greener.
At this weekend's activity, you'll see many traditional arts, but my favorite is paper-cutting. Artists use scissors to cut delicate patterns from red paper, symbolizing good luck. It's amazing to watch!
Hope you can come and experience it yourself!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语邮件写作；中华传统民间艺术英语表达
【点评】
该范文完全覆盖题目要求的所有要点，语言简洁流畅，符合初中英语写作的难度要求，句式简单易懂，适当补充细节（如剪纸象征好运）使内容更丰富，语气友好自然，是一篇符合要求的优秀参考范文。
【难度系数】
0.7
