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Ⅷ. 书面表达(共19分)
(2025·苏州一模)让我们的校园更美好!无论是食堂排队、教室设备,还是课外活动管理等,你的声音值得被听见。我校英文周报English Weekly的“建言台(Voice Up)”栏目向全体同学征集改进建议,请用英语写一篇短文,聚焦一个具体改进点,内容包括:
1. What change would you suggest?
2. Why is the change needed?
3. How will the change help students?
注意:词数100左右。
Dear Voice Up Team,
Yours truly,
A Grade 8 Student
(2025·苏州一模)让我们的校园更美好!无论是食堂排队、教室设备,还是课外活动管理等,你的声音值得被听见。我校英文周报English Weekly的“建言台(Voice Up)”栏目向全体同学征集改进建议,请用英语写一篇短文,聚焦一个具体改进点,内容包括:
1. What change would you suggest?
2. Why is the change needed?
3. How will the change help students?
注意:词数100左右。
Dear Voice Up Team,
Yours truly,
A Grade 8 Student
答案
Ⅷ. One possible version:
Dear Voice Up Team,
I suggest giving each grade a different lunchtime. Now, the dining hall is too crowded at noon. Students wait in long lines and have little time to eat. Some even leave without finishing their meals.
This change is needed because too many students in the dining hall make it noisy and messy. If students eat at different times, there will be more seats and shorter lines.
Shorter waiting time means students can sit down, enjoy their food, and chat with friends. They will also have energy for afternoon classes. This plan can make the dining hall a better place for everyone.
Yours truly,
A Grade 8 Student
思路梳理
【总体分析】
①题材:本文是一篇材料作文;
②时态:主要采用“一般现在时”和“一般将来时”;
③提示:根据三个问题展开写作,适当补充,注意条理清晰和语法正确。
【写作步骤】
第一步,介绍建议:每个年级有不同的午餐时间;
第二步,介绍提出此建议的原因;
第三步,介绍此建议的好处。
Dear Voice Up Team,
I suggest giving each grade a different lunchtime. Now, the dining hall is too crowded at noon. Students wait in long lines and have little time to eat. Some even leave without finishing their meals.
This change is needed because too many students in the dining hall make it noisy and messy. If students eat at different times, there will be more seats and shorter lines.
Shorter waiting time means students can sit down, enjoy their food, and chat with friends. They will also have energy for afternoon classes. This plan can make the dining hall a better place for everyone.
Yours truly,
A Grade 8 Student
思路梳理
【总体分析】
①题材:本文是一篇材料作文;
②时态:主要采用“一般现在时”和“一般将来时”;
③提示:根据三个问题展开写作,适当补充,注意条理清晰和语法正确。
【写作步骤】
第一步,介绍建议:每个年级有不同的午餐时间;
第二步,介绍提出此建议的原因;
第三步,介绍此建议的好处。
解析
【分析】本题为英语书信类书面表达，需围绕“校园改进建议”主题，聚焦一个具体改进点，按要求的三个要点（建议内容、原因、对学生的帮助）展开写作，采用一般现在时和一般将来时，词数控制在100左右，格式为标准书信格式。
【解析】第一步，明确建议：提出各年级设置不同午餐时间；第二步，说明原因：当前食堂拥挤，学生排队久、用餐时间短，部分学生未吃完；第三步，阐述好处：缩短等待时间，学生可安心用餐、交流，为下午课程储备精力，让食堂更舒适。写作时注意语言通顺，要点齐全，符合书信格式。
【答案】One possible version:
Dear Voice Up Team,
I suggest giving each grade a different lunchtime. Now, the dining hall is too crowded at noon. Students wait in long lines and have little time to eat. Some even leave without finishing their meals.
This change is needed because too many students in the dining hall make it noisy and messy. If students eat at different times, there will be more seats and shorter lines.
Shorter waiting time means students can sit down, enjoy their food, and chat with friends. They will also have energy for afternoon classes. This plan can make the dining hall a better place for everyone.
Yours truly,
A Grade 8 Student
【知识点】英语应用文写作、校园话题英语表达
【点评】本文紧扣题目要求，聚焦食堂午餐时间调整这一具体改进点，按“建议内容-原因-好处”的逻辑展开，结构清晰，语言通顺，符合书信格式，要点齐全，词数达标。
【难度系数】0.6
【解析】第一步，明确建议：提出各年级设置不同午餐时间；第二步，说明原因：当前食堂拥挤，学生排队久、用餐时间短，部分学生未吃完；第三步，阐述好处：缩短等待时间，学生可安心用餐、交流，为下午课程储备精力，让食堂更舒适。写作时注意语言通顺，要点齐全，符合书信格式。
【答案】One possible version:
Dear Voice Up Team,
I suggest giving each grade a different lunchtime. Now, the dining hall is too crowded at noon. Students wait in long lines and have little time to eat. Some even leave without finishing their meals.
This change is needed because too many students in the dining hall make it noisy and messy. If students eat at different times, there will be more seats and shorter lines.
Shorter waiting time means students can sit down, enjoy their food, and chat with friends. They will also have energy for afternoon classes. This plan can make the dining hall a better place for everyone.
Yours truly,
A Grade 8 Student
【知识点】英语应用文写作、校园话题英语表达
【点评】本文紧扣题目要求，聚焦食堂午餐时间调整这一具体改进点，按“建议内容-原因-好处”的逻辑展开，结构清晰，语言通顺，符合书信格式，要点齐全，词数达标。
【难度系数】0.6
