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[2024 深圳宝安区七校联考改编]近些年来，用手机软件买菜的人多了。手机菜场菜品丰富、洗净配好、预约送菜上门……外国朋友对此也很感兴趣。
请你以“A new use of the mobile phone”为题，写一篇 100 词左右的英语短文介绍手机买菜的便利，让外国朋友了解我们生活中的这个新变化。
A new use of the mobile phone
[2024 深圳宝安区七校联考改编]近些年来，用手机软件买菜的人多了。手机菜场菜品丰富、洗净配好、预约送菜上门……外国朋友对此也很感兴趣。
请你以“A new use of the mobile phone”为题，写一篇 100 词左右的英语短文介绍手机买菜的便利，让外国朋友了解我们生活中的这个新变化。
A new use of the mobile phone
Preparing meals is tiring. You may have to spend hours getting everything ready for cooking. Now in China, new mobile apps are here to help.
These apps provide you with meat, fish, and vegetables, almost everything you need for a meal. You can place an order whenever you like and decide on the time for them to arrive. If you like, they can be washed, cut and packed for a certain dish. Some apps even teach you to cook step by step.
Compared with the traditional way of going to the market, mobile apps save your time and energy. With such a new use of the mobile phone, you can enjoy a more relaxing life.
These apps provide you with meat, fish, and vegetables, almost everything you need for a meal. You can place an order whenever you like and decide on the time for them to arrive. If you like, they can be washed, cut and packed for a certain dish. Some apps even teach you to cook step by step.
Compared with the traditional way of going to the market, mobile apps save your time and energy. With such a new use of the mobile phone, you can enjoy a more relaxing life.
答案
主题 人与社会——科学技术改变生活
语篇类型 说明文
时态：一般现在时
写作思路 时态和人称 人称：第二人称、第三人称
要点 1.该变化的背景/原因
2.介绍该变化：买菜新方式
3.对比传统方式，并总结全文
A new use of the mobile phone
Preparing meals is tiring. You may have to spend hours getting everything ready for cooking. Now in China, new mobile apps are here to help.
These apps provide you with meat, fish, and vegetables, almost everything you need for a meal. You can place an order whenever you like and decide on the time for them to arrive. If you like, they can be washed, cut and packed for a certain dish. Some apps even teach you to cook step by step.
Compared with the traditional way of going to the market, mobile apps save your time and energy. With such a new use of the mobile phone, you can enjoy a more relaxing life.
解析
【分析】本次写作要求以“A new use of the mobile phone”为题，向外国朋友介绍中国手机买菜的新变化。首先明确写作主题为“科学技术改变生活”，语篇类型是说明文，需使用一般现在时，人称结合第二人称（面向读者）和第三人称（介绍事物）。写作需紧扣三个核心要点：1. 铺垫背景（传统买菜的不便）；2. 说明手机买菜的具体方式（APP的功能）；3. 对比传统方式，总结优势。按照“引入—说明—总结”的逻辑结构组织内容，控制字数在100词左右，语言要简洁易懂，符合说明文的要求。
【解析】1. 开篇：用第二人称描述传统买菜的麻烦，引出手机买菜这一解决方法，点题；2. 主体：用第三人称介绍手机买菜APP的功能，包括菜品齐全、灵活预约配送、预处理食材、提供烹饪指导等，具体说明新方式的特点；3. 结尾：对比传统买菜耗时耗力的不足，总结手机买菜节省时间精力的优势，呼应主题，完成全文。全程使用一般现在时，人称切换自然，符合题目要求。
【答案】A new use of the mobile phone
Preparing meals is tiring. You may have to spend hours getting everything ready for cooking. Now in China, new mobile apps are here to help.
These apps provide you with meat, fish, and vegetables, almost everything you need for a meal. You can place an order whenever you like and decide on the time for them to arrive. If you like, they can be washed, cut and packed for a certain dish. Some apps even teach you to cook step by step.
Compared with the traditional way of going to the market, mobile apps save your time and energy. With such a new use of the mobile phone, you can enjoy a more relaxing life.
【知识点】英语说明文写作；一般现在时运用；主题写作
【点评】本文紧扣“科技改变生活”的主题，严格按照给定的写作要点展开，结构清晰，逻辑连贯，语言简洁明了，准确传达了中国手机买菜的便利，适合向外国朋友介绍，是一篇符合要求的优秀范文。
【难度系数】0.3
【解析】1. 开篇：用第二人称描述传统买菜的麻烦，引出手机买菜这一解决方法，点题；2. 主体：用第三人称介绍手机买菜APP的功能，包括菜品齐全、灵活预约配送、预处理食材、提供烹饪指导等，具体说明新方式的特点；3. 结尾：对比传统买菜耗时耗力的不足，总结手机买菜节省时间精力的优势，呼应主题，完成全文。全程使用一般现在时，人称切换自然，符合题目要求。
【答案】A new use of the mobile phone
Preparing meals is tiring. You may have to spend hours getting everything ready for cooking. Now in China, new mobile apps are here to help.
These apps provide you with meat, fish, and vegetables, almost everything you need for a meal. You can place an order whenever you like and decide on the time for them to arrive. If you like, they can be washed, cut and packed for a certain dish. Some apps even teach you to cook step by step.
Compared with the traditional way of going to the market, mobile apps save your time and energy. With such a new use of the mobile phone, you can enjoy a more relaxing life.
【知识点】英语说明文写作；一般现在时运用；主题写作
【点评】本文紧扣“科技改变生活”的主题，严格按照给定的写作要点展开，结构清晰，逻辑连贯，语言简洁明了，准确传达了中国手机买菜的便利，适合向外国朋友介绍，是一篇符合要求的优秀范文。
【难度系数】0.3
