假设你是李华,你在校园论坛看到了来自初一新生 Simon 的帖子,请你根据帖子的内容给他写回复。内容包括:
→审主题 审时态:以一般现在时为主 审人称:以第二人称为主
1.表达你的安慰。
2.对相关的两点问题给出看法并分别提出建议,内容可适当拓展;给予恰当的鼓励。
要求:词数80左右,不得透露真实的学校名称、个人姓名等。→审词数
Hello, everyone!
My name is Simon. I am a new student in this school. I ran into some problems recently. Firstly, there are more subjects now and they are much more difficult. Sometimes I can't understand what the teachers say in class. Secondly, it seems the students here do not have the same interest as me, so I can hardly find a friend to talk with. I feel lonely.
These two problems make me worried. I need your advice. Thank you!
Yours,
Simon
Dear Simon,
I've read your post on the Internet.
Yours,
Li Hua
写作支架
开头 引出话题 — I've read your post on the Internet. You must and I really . Here is .
中间 给出建议 — Firstly, . Spend . Secondly, you should . If you , you should ask your teachers and lassmates for help.（高分句式1）If you can't find friends, try . You should . I'm sure .
结尾 总结全文 — I hope my advice and you will feel much better soon.（高分句式2）
优秀范文
Dear Simon,
I've read your post on the Internet. You must feel bad and I really want to help you. Here is my advice.
Firstly, you should plan your time reasonably. Spend more time on your weak subjects.① Secondly, you should take notes carefully in class and review carefully after class. If you encounter problems②, you should ask your teachers and classmates for help. If you can't find friends, try doing the same activities as others③. You should take the opportunity③ to join them. I'm sure you will find friends.
I hope my advice can help you and you will feel much better soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
亮点评析
①使用了 spend time on sth. 这一高级表达。
②条件状语从句及 encounter 的使用提升了文章档次。
③try doing sth.、the same... as、take the opportunity 的使用使文章表达更加丰富。

优秀范文
Dear Simon,
I've read your post on the Internet. You must feel bad and I really want to help you. Here is my advice.
Firstly, you should plan your time reasonably. Spend more time on your weak subjects.① Secondly, you should take notes carefully in class and review carefully after class. If you encounter problems②, you should ask your teachers and classmates for help. If you can't find friends, try doing the same activities as others③. You should take the opportunity③ to join them. I'm sure you will find friends.
I hope my advice can help you and you will feel much better soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
亮点评析
①使用了 spend time on sth. 这一高级表达。
②条件状语从句及 encounter 的使用提升了文章档次。
③try doing sth.、the same... as、take the opportunity 的使用使文章表达更加丰富。

【分析】
首先审题明确写作任务：给初一新生Simon写回信，需完成表达安慰、针对“学科难”“找不到朋友”两个问题提建议的要求，时态以一般现在时为主，人称以第二人称为主，词数80左右。解题思路：利用给定写作支架搭建结构，开头引出话题（安慰+提供帮助），中间分两点对应两个问题提具体建议，运用高分句式（条件状语从句），结尾总结鼓励，确保内容完整、符合要求。
【解析】
1. 开头部分：根据支架，第一空填feel bad（表达安慰），第二空填want to help you（表达提供帮助），第三空填my advice（引出下文建议）；
2. 中间第一点对应学科难问题：第一空填you should plan your time reasonably（给出时间规划建议），第二空填more time on your weak subjects（对应spend的搭配，补充具体做法）；
3. 中间第二点对应学科问题后续及朋友问题：第一空填take notes carefully in class and review carefully after class（课堂课后学习建议），第二空填encounter problems（对应条件状语从句触发条件），第三空填doing the same activities as others（对应找朋友的建议），第四空填take the opportunity to join them（补充具体行动），第五空填you will find friends（表达鼓励）；
4. 结尾部分：填can help you（总结希望建议有用）。同时运用条件状语从句和高级短语提升表达档次。
【答案】
优秀范文
Dear Simon,
I've read your post on the Internet. You must feel bad and I really want to help you. Here is my advice.
Firstly, you should plan your time reasonably. Spend more time on your weak subjects.① Secondly, you should take notes carefully in class and review carefully after class. If you encounter problems②, you should ask your teachers and classmates for help. If you can't find friends, try doing the same activities as others③. You should take the opportunity③ to join them. I'm sure you will find friends.
I hope my advice can help you and you will feel much better soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
亮点评析
①使用了 spend time on sth. 这一高级表达。
②条件状语从句及 encounter 的使用提升了文章档次。
③try doing sth.、the same... as、take the opportunity 的使用使文章表达更加丰富。
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、建议类书信、条件状语从句
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求，结构清晰，逻辑连贯，针对Simon的两个问题给出了具体可行的建议，运用了高级表达和高分句式，符合书信格式，词数合适，能有效安慰和鼓励对方，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.6