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Ⅴ. 写作指导
英语课上，老师要求同学们写一篇短文，介绍自己的生活与上小学的时候相比发生了哪些变化。词数80个左右。
英语课上，老师要求同学们写一篇短文，介绍自己的生活与上小学的时候相比发生了哪些变化。词数80个左右。
My life is different from when I was in primary school. For example, at home, I used to depend on my parents for everything, but now I can make my bed and help with some housework.
My school has also changed. My new school is bigger and more beautiful. I have more subjects and study much harder than before.
I used to walk to school, and it took me a lot of time, but now I ride a bike to school every day.
Although my life has changed a lot, one thing stays the same: my deep love for my family.
答案
范文:
My life is different from when I was in primary school. For example, at home, I used to depend on my parents for everything, but now I can make my bed and help with some housework. My school has also changed. My new school is bigger and more beautiful. I have more subjects and study much harder than before. I used to walk to school, and it took me a lot of time, but now I ride a bike to school every day.
Although my life has changed a lot, one thing stays the same: my deep love for my family.
My life is different from when I was in primary school. For example, at home, I used to depend on my parents for everything, but now I can make my bed and help with some housework. My school has also changed. My new school is bigger and more beautiful. I have more subjects and study much harder than before. I used to walk to school, and it took me a lot of time, but now I ride a bike to school every day.
Although my life has changed a lot, one thing stays the same: my deep love for my family.
解析
【分析】
本次写作主题为对比小学与现在的生活变化，需选取家庭、学校、出行等贴近生活的具体事例，运用“used to（过去常常）”与一般现在时的对比时态，结构上开头点题，中间分述变化，结尾补充不变的情感让内容更饱满，同时控制词数在80左右，符合题目要求。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：1. 开头点明现在的生活与小学时不同；2. 从家庭（过去依赖父母，现在会整理床铺、做家务）、学校（新学校更大更美，科目更多、学习更努力）、出行（过去步行上学耗时久，现在骑车上学）三个方面举具体变化例子；3. 结尾点出唯一不变的是对家人的爱，时态上正确使用used to表过去状态，一般现在时表现在情况，确保语句通顺，符合词数要求。
【答案】
范文:
My life is different from when I was in primary school. For example, at home, I used to depend on my parents for everything, but now I can make my bed and help with some housework. My school has also changed. My new school is bigger and more beautiful. I have more subjects and study much harder than before. I used to walk to school, and it took me a lot of time, but now I ride a bike to school every day.
Although my life has changed a lot, one thing stays the same: my deep love for my family.
【知识点】
英语写作（对比类）、used to的用法、形容词比较级
【点评】
范文紧扣主题，通过具体事例清晰展现生活变化，时态运用准确，结构完整，结尾升华情感，符合题目要求的词数，是优秀的参考范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
本次写作主题为对比小学与现在的生活变化，需选取家庭、学校、出行等贴近生活的具体事例，运用“used to（过去常常）”与一般现在时的对比时态，结构上开头点题，中间分述变化，结尾补充不变的情感让内容更饱满，同时控制词数在80左右，符合题目要求。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：1. 开头点明现在的生活与小学时不同；2. 从家庭（过去依赖父母，现在会整理床铺、做家务）、学校（新学校更大更美，科目更多、学习更努力）、出行（过去步行上学耗时久，现在骑车上学）三个方面举具体变化例子；3. 结尾点出唯一不变的是对家人的爱，时态上正确使用used to表过去状态，一般现在时表现在情况，确保语句通顺，符合词数要求。
【答案】
范文:
My life is different from when I was in primary school. For example, at home, I used to depend on my parents for everything, but now I can make my bed and help with some housework. My school has also changed. My new school is bigger and more beautiful. I have more subjects and study much harder than before. I used to walk to school, and it took me a lot of time, but now I ride a bike to school every day.
Although my life has changed a lot, one thing stays the same: my deep love for my family.
【知识点】
英语写作（对比类）、used to的用法、形容词比较级
【点评】
范文紧扣主题，通过具体事例清晰展现生活变化，时态运用准确，结构完整，结尾升华情感，符合题目要求的词数，是优秀的参考范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
一、审清题
1. 体裁：
2. 人称：以
3. 时态：
4. 要点：
（1）选择三个方面的变化，如家庭、学校和交通；
（2）写出一件始终不变的事情。
1. 体裁：
描述性短文
。2. 人称：以
第一人称
为主。3. 时态：
一般过去时
、一般现在时
、现在完成时
。4. 要点：
（1）选择三个方面的变化，如家庭、学校和交通；
（2）写出一件始终不变的事情。
答案
1. 描述性短文 2. 第一人称 3. 一般过去时 一般现在时 现在完成时
解析
【分析】这是英语写作的审题类题目，需明确写作的体裁、人称、时态及要点要求。结合常见的“描述身边变化”类写作题的常规要求，依次确定对应空的内容即可。
【解析】1. 该写作任务是描述变化，属于描述性短文；2. 通常以第一人称视角叙述自身经历的变化，故人称以第一人称为主；3. 描述过去发生的变化用一般过去时，描述现在的状态用一般现在时，体现从过去到现在的变化用现在完成时。
【答案】1. 描述性短文 2. 第一人称 3. 一般过去时 一般现在时 现在完成时
【知识点】英语写作审题、英语短文体裁、英语时态
【点评】本题考查英语写作的基础审题能力，明确写作核心要素是完成写作的前提，属于写作题的基础考点。
【难度系数】0.4
【解析】1. 该写作任务是描述变化，属于描述性短文；2. 通常以第一人称视角叙述自身经历的变化，故人称以第一人称为主；3. 描述过去发生的变化用一般过去时，描述现在的状态用一般现在时，体现从过去到现在的变化用现在完成时。
【答案】1. 描述性短文 2. 第一人称 3. 一般过去时 一般现在时 现在完成时
【知识点】英语写作审题、英语短文体裁、英语时态
【点评】本题考查英语写作的基础审题能力，明确写作核心要素是完成写作的前提，属于写作题的基础考点。
【难度系数】0.4
