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假设你是李雷，是建华中学一名九年级学生。市里将举行一年一度的中学生英语演讲比赛，今年演讲题目为“My Dream”。请你根据以下提示，写一篇英语演讲稿为此做准备。
【提示】1.What do you want to be?
2.Why do you want to be a/an...?
3.How are you going to be a/an...?
【要求】1.需包含上述三个要点，可适当发挥。
2.语句通顺，意思连贯，语法正确，书写规范。
3.词数80左右，开头已给出，但不计入总词数。
4.文中不能出现“李雷”和“建华中学”以外的人名、
My Dream
Hello，everyone! I'm glad to be here to share my dream with you.
假设你是李雷，是建华中学一名九年级学生。市里将举行一年一度的中学生英语演讲比赛，今年演讲题目为“My Dream”。请你根据以下提示，写一篇英语演讲稿为此做准备。
【提示】1.What do you want to be?
2.Why do you want to be a/an...?
3.How are you going to be a/an...?
【要求】1.需包含上述三个要点，可适当发挥。
2.语句通顺，意思连贯，语法正确，书写规范。
3.词数80左右，开头已给出，但不计入总词数。
4.文中不能出现“李雷”和“建华中学”以外的人名、
校
名或地名。My Dream
Hello，everyone! I'm glad to be here to share my dream with you.
答案
One possible version
My Dream
Hello, everyone! I'm glad to be here to share my dream with you. I want to be an English teacher, and I am going to work and live in the city of Beijing.
First, English is becoming more and more useful and important and being an English teacher is exciting too. If I am an English teacher, I can help my students with their English study. Second, I like being with children because it makes me feel young. Last, Beijing is the capital of China. I can meet many English speakers and I can improve my English by communicating with them.
To make my dream come true, I will study English hard every day and speak English as often as possible. I will do more listening in the morning. I'm sure I'll love my job and students and be a friend of them.
No pain, no gain. I believe as long as I try my best, my dream will come true some day.
Thank you.
My Dream
Hello, everyone! I'm glad to be here to share my dream with you. I want to be an English teacher, and I am going to work and live in the city of Beijing.
First, English is becoming more and more useful and important and being an English teacher is exciting too. If I am an English teacher, I can help my students with their English study. Second, I like being with children because it makes me feel young. Last, Beijing is the capital of China. I can meet many English speakers and I can improve my English by communicating with them.
To make my dream come true, I will study English hard every day and speak English as often as possible. I will do more listening in the morning. I'm sure I'll love my job and students and be a friend of them.
No pain, no gain. I believe as long as I try my best, my dream will come true some day.
Thank you.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道题首先要明确这是一篇主题为"My Dream"的英语演讲参赛稿，首先要紧扣题干给出的三个必写要点展开思考：第一步，先确定自己想要从事的职业，选择贴合中学生身份的职业比如英语老师会更容易展开内容；第二步，围绕选定的职业梳理2-3个合理的理由，比如职业的社会价值、自身的兴趣偏好等，让内容有说服力；第三步，列出具体可落地的实现计划，不能空泛喊口号，要写出日常学习生活里的实际行动。同时要注意遵守题干的规则：不能出现规定外的人名、校名、地名，整体语气要符合公开演讲的亲切、积极的风格，时态以一般现在时和一般将来时为主，保证语句通顺连贯，控制好词数。
【解析】
1. 承接题干给出的开头句，直接点明核心梦想：想要成为一名英语老师，补充合理的相关设定，让开篇自然清晰。
2. 对应第二个要点，分层阐述想当英语老师的原因：首先点明英语的重要性，说明当英语老师可以帮助学生提升英语能力，其次说明自己喜欢和孩子相处，能获得愉悦感，最后补充想在北京生活，可以接触大量母语使用者提升自身英语水平，理由层层递进逻辑通顺。
3. 对应第三个要点，写明实现梦想的具体行动：每天刻苦学习英语，尽可能多地开口练习英语，坚持晨听，同时表态未来会关爱学生、和学生做朋友，内容具体不空洞。
4. 结尾用谚语"No pain, no gain"升华主题，表达只要尽全力就能实现梦想的信心，最后礼貌致谢，符合演讲稿的完整格式，全程检查没有出现题干禁止的额外人名、校名、地名，语法准确，符合写作要求。
【答案】
One possible version
My Dream
Hello, everyone! I'm glad to be here to share my dream with you. I want to be an English teacher, and I am going to work and live in the city of Beijing.
First, English is becoming more and more useful and important and being an English teacher is exciting too. If I am an English teacher, I can help my students with their English study. Second, I like being with children because it makes me feel young. Last, Beijing is the capital of China. I can meet many English speakers and I can improve my English by communicating with them.
To make my dream come true, I will study English hard every day and speak English as often as possible. I will do more listening in the morning. I'm sure I'll love my job and students and be a friend of them.
No pain, no gain. I believe as long as I try my best, my dream will come true some day.
Thank you.
【知识点】
英语演讲稿写作，一般将来时运用，要点类作文写作
【点评】
这篇范文完全覆盖题干所有要求的核心要点，结构完整清晰，从点明梦想、阐释动因到规划行动层层递进，加入的经典谚语有效提升了文章的文采和感染力，语气积极贴合中学生演讲的场景，用词地道准确，没有出现违规信息，是一篇非常规范的参赛演讲稿，学生可以参考这类主题作文的谋篇布局思路，学习把抽象的梦想主题拆分成具体可写内容的方法。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道题首先要明确这是一篇主题为"My Dream"的英语演讲参赛稿，首先要紧扣题干给出的三个必写要点展开思考：第一步，先确定自己想要从事的职业，选择贴合中学生身份的职业比如英语老师会更容易展开内容；第二步，围绕选定的职业梳理2-3个合理的理由，比如职业的社会价值、自身的兴趣偏好等，让内容有说服力；第三步，列出具体可落地的实现计划，不能空泛喊口号，要写出日常学习生活里的实际行动。同时要注意遵守题干的规则：不能出现规定外的人名、校名、地名，整体语气要符合公开演讲的亲切、积极的风格，时态以一般现在时和一般将来时为主，保证语句通顺连贯，控制好词数。
【解析】
1. 承接题干给出的开头句，直接点明核心梦想：想要成为一名英语老师，补充合理的相关设定，让开篇自然清晰。
2. 对应第二个要点，分层阐述想当英语老师的原因：首先点明英语的重要性，说明当英语老师可以帮助学生提升英语能力，其次说明自己喜欢和孩子相处，能获得愉悦感，最后补充想在北京生活，可以接触大量母语使用者提升自身英语水平，理由层层递进逻辑通顺。
3. 对应第三个要点，写明实现梦想的具体行动：每天刻苦学习英语，尽可能多地开口练习英语，坚持晨听，同时表态未来会关爱学生、和学生做朋友，内容具体不空洞。
4. 结尾用谚语"No pain, no gain"升华主题，表达只要尽全力就能实现梦想的信心，最后礼貌致谢，符合演讲稿的完整格式，全程检查没有出现题干禁止的额外人名、校名、地名，语法准确，符合写作要求。
【答案】
One possible version
My Dream
Hello, everyone! I'm glad to be here to share my dream with you. I want to be an English teacher, and I am going to work and live in the city of Beijing.
First, English is becoming more and more useful and important and being an English teacher is exciting too. If I am an English teacher, I can help my students with their English study. Second, I like being with children because it makes me feel young. Last, Beijing is the capital of China. I can meet many English speakers and I can improve my English by communicating with them.
To make my dream come true, I will study English hard every day and speak English as often as possible. I will do more listening in the morning. I'm sure I'll love my job and students and be a friend of them.
No pain, no gain. I believe as long as I try my best, my dream will come true some day.
Thank you.
【知识点】
英语演讲稿写作，一般将来时运用，要点类作文写作
【点评】
这篇范文完全覆盖题干所有要求的核心要点，结构完整清晰，从点明梦想、阐释动因到规划行动层层递进，加入的经典谚语有效提升了文章的文采和感染力，语气积极贴合中学生演讲的场景，用词地道准确，没有出现违规信息，是一篇非常规范的参赛演讲稿，学生可以参考这类主题作文的谋篇布局思路，学习把抽象的梦想主题拆分成具体可写内容的方法。
【难度系数】
0.6
