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雏鹰在不断的尝试中才能学会飞翔；毛毛虫在一次次的努力后方可破茧成蝶。在学习技能增长本领的道路上，谁都不会一帆风顺。在日常的学习和生活中，你都做过哪些尝试，学到了什么本领？请用英语写一篇作文讲讲自己的故事。
【要点】1.Have you ever tried to do something new?
2.What skills did you learn from the experience?
3.What do you think about it?
【注意】1.词数100左右(文章开头已给出，不计入总词数)。
2.文中不能出现真实姓名、校名等信息。
3.文章必须包含所有要点，可适当发挥，使短文连贯、通顺。
I Try，I Succeed
There are many things waiting for us to explore.
雏鹰在不断的尝试中才能学会飞翔；毛毛虫在一次次的努力后方可破茧成蝶。在学习技能增长本领的道路上，谁都不会一帆风顺。在日常的学习和生活中，你都做过哪些尝试，学到了什么本领？请用英语写一篇作文讲讲自己的故事。
【要点】1.Have you ever tried to do something new?
2.What skills did you learn from the experience?
3.What do you think about it?
【注意】1.词数100左右(文章开头已给出，不计入总词数)。
2.文中不能出现真实姓名、校名等信息。
3.文章必须包含所有要点，可适当发挥，使短文连贯、通顺。
I Try，I Succeed
There are many things waiting for us to explore.
Everyone has some unforgettable experiences. I had a very unforgettable experience when I was 11 years old. I had some training with my classmates.
We went to Fengxian and we needed to live in a small dormitory for five days. We did everything ourselves. Our parents couldn't help us, because they didn't stay with us.
We got up very early in the morning. We had to clean ourselves quickly. And then we stood in a line. We learnt a lot of things there, such as making the bed, washing clothes and even cooking.
Every day, we had to practise for more than five hours. Now I think it was very hard for everyone but it was very good for us.
We are looked after by our parents, but in fact we should learn how to look after ourselves. What an unforgettable experience it is!
答案
One possible version
I Try, I Succeed
There are many things waiting for us to explore. Everyone has some unforgettable experiences. I had a very unforgettable experience when I was 11 years old. I had some training with my classmates. We went to Fengxian and we needed to live in a small dormitory for five days. We did everything ourselves. Our parents couldn't help us, because they didn't stay with us. We got up very early in the morning. We had to clean ourselves quickly. And then we stood in a line. We learnt a lot of things there, such as making the bed, washing clothes and even cooking. Every day, we had to practise for more than five hours. Now I think it was very hard for everyone but it was very good for us. We are looked after by our parents, but in fact we should learn how to look after ourselves. What an unforgettable experience it is!
I Try, I Succeed
There are many things waiting for us to explore. Everyone has some unforgettable experiences. I had a very unforgettable experience when I was 11 years old. I had some training with my classmates. We went to Fengxian and we needed to live in a small dormitory for five days. We did everything ourselves. Our parents couldn't help us, because they didn't stay with us. We got up very early in the morning. We had to clean ourselves quickly. And then we stood in a line. We learnt a lot of things there, such as making the bed, washing clothes and even cooking. Every day, we had to practise for more than five hours. Now I think it was very hard for everyone but it was very good for us. We are looked after by our parents, but in fact we should learn how to look after ourselves. What an unforgettable experience it is!
解析
【分析】
拿到这道题首先要明确写作要求：这是一篇夹叙夹议的个人经历类英语作文，需要完整覆盖题干给出的三个要点。第一步先承接题目已经给出的开头句，接下来首先回应第一个要点，选取真实感强的全新尝试经历，比如校外独立训练这类学生常见的体验，把尝试的背景、过程交代清楚；第二步对应第二个要点，梳理这次尝试中自己学到的具体技能，比如生活自理相关的能力，内容要具体不空洞；第三步对应第三个要点，写出自己从这次经历中得到的感悟，点明尝试带来的成长意义。最后调整语句让行文连贯，控制总词数在100左右，全程注意不要出现真实姓名、校名等隐私信息即可完成写作。
【解析】
1. 审题定调：确定文体为记叙文，叙事部分使用一般过去时，表达个人观点部分使用一般现在时，明确必须覆盖的三个核心要点：介绍自己的全新尝试、说明学到的技能、阐述个人感悟。
2. 搭建框架：
① 承接给定开头，引出自己11岁时和同学参加校外独立训练的难忘经历，交代背景：离开父母，集体在外独自生活5天，所有事务自行处理，完成第一个要点的表述。
② 叙述训练过程，点明自己学会了快速自理、整理床铺、洗衣服、基础烹饪等多项独立生活技能，完成第二个要点的表述。
③ 最后抒发感想，说明这次尝试让自己意识到不能一直依赖父母，要主动学会照顾自己，点明尝试的价值，完成第三个要点的表述。
3. 润色调整：梳理语句逻辑，补充少量细节让内容更通顺自然，控制词数符合要求，规避所有真实个人信息，得到完整作文。
【答案】
One possible version
I Try, I Succeed
There are many things waiting for us to explore. Everyone has some unforgettable experiences. I had a very unforgettable experience when I was 11 years old. I had some training with my classmates. We went to Fengxian and we needed to live in a small dormitory for five days. We did everything ourselves. Our parents couldn't help us, because they didn't stay with us. We got up very early in the morning. We had to clean ourselves quickly. And then we stood in a line. We learnt a lot of things there, such as making the bed, washing clothes and even cooking. Every day, we had to practise for more than five hours. Now I think it was very hard for everyone but it was very good for us. We are looked after by our parents, but in fact we should learn how to look after ourselves. What an unforgettable experience it is!
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，英语时态运用，要点类作文谋篇
【点评】
本题属于贴近学生日常生活的话题作文，写作门槛较低，学生很容易结合自身真实经历展开内容，写作时只需要注意完整覆盖所有题干给定的要点，把控好叙事和议论的篇幅占比，规避真实个人信息，减少基础语法错误，就可以得到不错的得分，适当加入细节描写还能让文章更生动有感染力。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道题首先要明确写作要求：这是一篇夹叙夹议的个人经历类英语作文，需要完整覆盖题干给出的三个要点。第一步先承接题目已经给出的开头句，接下来首先回应第一个要点，选取真实感强的全新尝试经历，比如校外独立训练这类学生常见的体验，把尝试的背景、过程交代清楚；第二步对应第二个要点，梳理这次尝试中自己学到的具体技能，比如生活自理相关的能力，内容要具体不空洞；第三步对应第三个要点，写出自己从这次经历中得到的感悟，点明尝试带来的成长意义。最后调整语句让行文连贯，控制总词数在100左右，全程注意不要出现真实姓名、校名等隐私信息即可完成写作。
【解析】
1. 审题定调：确定文体为记叙文，叙事部分使用一般过去时，表达个人观点部分使用一般现在时，明确必须覆盖的三个核心要点：介绍自己的全新尝试、说明学到的技能、阐述个人感悟。
2. 搭建框架：
① 承接给定开头，引出自己11岁时和同学参加校外独立训练的难忘经历，交代背景：离开父母，集体在外独自生活5天，所有事务自行处理，完成第一个要点的表述。
② 叙述训练过程，点明自己学会了快速自理、整理床铺、洗衣服、基础烹饪等多项独立生活技能，完成第二个要点的表述。
③ 最后抒发感想，说明这次尝试让自己意识到不能一直依赖父母，要主动学会照顾自己，点明尝试的价值，完成第三个要点的表述。
3. 润色调整：梳理语句逻辑，补充少量细节让内容更通顺自然，控制词数符合要求，规避所有真实个人信息，得到完整作文。
【答案】
One possible version
I Try, I Succeed
There are many things waiting for us to explore. Everyone has some unforgettable experiences. I had a very unforgettable experience when I was 11 years old. I had some training with my classmates. We went to Fengxian and we needed to live in a small dormitory for five days. We did everything ourselves. Our parents couldn't help us, because they didn't stay with us. We got up very early in the morning. We had to clean ourselves quickly. And then we stood in a line. We learnt a lot of things there, such as making the bed, washing clothes and even cooking. Every day, we had to practise for more than five hours. Now I think it was very hard for everyone but it was very good for us. We are looked after by our parents, but in fact we should learn how to look after ourselves. What an unforgettable experience it is!
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，英语时态运用，要点类作文谋篇
【点评】
本题属于贴近学生日常生活的话题作文，写作门槛较低，学生很容易结合自身真实经历展开内容，写作时只需要注意完整覆盖所有题干给定的要点，把控好叙事和议论的篇幅占比，规避真实个人信息，减少基础语法错误，就可以得到不错的得分，适当加入细节描写还能让文章更生动有感染力。
【难度系数】
0.7
F
家是以爱为圆心、幸福为半径的圆；家是人生的起点，更是幸福的源泉。在你的日常生活中，有哪些与家人共度的快乐时光呢？请以“The Happiest Time with My Family”为题，根据下面的写作要点和要求，用英语写一篇短文，分享你的幸福故事。
【要点】1.When is your happiest time?
2.What do you usually do with your family at that time?
3.Why is it your happiest time?
【要求】1.词数100左右(文章开头已给出，不计入总词数)。
2.文中不得出现任何真实人名、校名等相关信息。
3.文章必须包含所有要点，可适当发挥，使短文连贯、通顺。
The Happiest Time with My Family
As a famous saying goes，“East or west，home is best.”
家是以爱为圆心、幸福为半径的圆；家是人生的起点，更是幸福的源泉。在你的日常生活中，有哪些与家人共度的快乐时光呢？请以“The Happiest Time with My Family”为题，根据下面的写作要点和要求，用英语写一篇短文，分享你的幸福故事。
【要点】1.When is your happiest time?
2.What do you usually do with your family at that time?
3.Why is it your happiest time?
【要求】1.词数100左右(文章开头已给出，不计入总词数)。
2.文中不得出现任何真实人名、校名等相关信息。
3.文章必须包含所有要点，可适当发挥，使短文连贯、通顺。
The Happiest Time with My Family
As a famous saying goes，“East or west，home is best.”
This is true for me. When I'm at home, I always feel happy and relaxed with my family.
My happiest time with my family is the weekend. It's a time when all my family stay together. My parents and I can have meals together. I have a chance to talk about what interesting things happened at school.
Besides, I help my parents do some chores such as taking out the rubbish and watering the flowers. Also, I would like to do something relaxing with them.
For example, we may go to the movies or do shopping together. Taking a short trip in the countryside always brings us great fun too.
In short, the weekend is the happiest time with my family. It helps me understand my parents better and show my love to them.
答案
One possible version
The Happiest Time with My Family
As a famous saying goes, "East or west, home is best." This is true for me. When I'm at home, I always feel happy and relaxed with my family.
My happiest time with my family is the weekend. It's a time when all my family stay together. My parents and I can have meals together. I have a chance to talk about what interesting things happened at school. Besides, I help my parents do some chores such as taking out the rubbish and watering the flowers. Also, I would like to do something relaxing with them. For example, we may go to the movies or do shopping together. Taking a short trip in the countryside always brings us great fun too. In short, the weekend is the happiest time with my family. It helps me understand my parents better and show my love to them.
The Happiest Time with My Family
As a famous saying goes, "East or west, home is best." This is true for me. When I'm at home, I always feel happy and relaxed with my family.
My happiest time with my family is the weekend. It's a time when all my family stay together. My parents and I can have meals together. I have a chance to talk about what interesting things happened at school. Besides, I help my parents do some chores such as taking out the rubbish and watering the flowers. Also, I would like to do something relaxing with them. For example, we may go to the movies or do shopping together. Taking a short trip in the countryside always brings us great fun too. In short, the weekend is the happiest time with my family. It helps me understand my parents better and show my love to them.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先要明确三个必须覆盖的核心要点，避免漏点：第一步先确定要写的最幸福的时光的具体时间，选大家都熟悉的周末作为写作素材非常好上手，不容易出错；第二步围绕选定的时间，列举几个和家人共同完成的真实日常活动，不用设计太夸张的内容，贴近生活的细节比如一起吃饭、聊日常、做家务、出门休闲都很合适；第三步要解释清楚这段时光让你觉得幸福的原因，比如能增进和家人的感情，感受到家的温暖。写作时注意衔接好题目给出的开头，用上合适的过渡词让语句连贯，控制总词数在100左右，全程不要出现真实的人名校名即可。
【解析】
1. 开篇衔接给定的开头句，先简单表达自己对家的感受，直接点出自己和家人最开心的时光是周末，完成第一个要点的表述。
2. 主体部分展开描述周末和家人的共同活动：先写日常的相处细节，比如一起用餐、分享校园里的趣事、帮忙分担家务，再补充共同的休闲安排，比如看电影、购物、近郊短途出游，内容充实自然，完全覆盖第二个要点。
3. 结尾部分总结，点明这段共处的时光能让自己更理解父母、向家人表达爱意，解释清楚为什么这段时光是最幸福的，完成第三个要点的表述。最后通读全文，检查语法错误，确认没有出现真实个人信息，词数符合要求即可。
【答案】
The Happiest Time with My Family
As a famous saying goes, "East or west, home is best." This is true for me. When I'm at home, I always feel happy and relaxed with my family.
My happiest time with my family is the weekend. It's a time when all my family stay together. My parents and I can have meals together. I have a chance to talk about what interesting things happened at school. Besides, I help my parents do some chores such as taking out the rubbish and watering the flowers. Also, I would like to do something relaxing with them. For example, we may go to the movies or do shopping together. Taking a short trip in the countryside always brings us great fun too. In short, the weekend is the happiest time with my family. It helps me understand my parents better and show my love to them.
【知识点】
提纲类英语写作，家庭话题表达，过渡词运用
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖题干给出的全部三个写作要点，选取周末和家人共处的日常作为素材，非常贴合学生真实生活，内容真挚不空洞。行文使用了besides、for example等过渡词衔接内容，逻辑流畅，句式搭配合理，既有简单句也有定语从句等复合句提升表达质量，词数符合要求，没有出现任何违规的真实个人信息，是一篇非常标准的初中英语话题写作参考范文，学生可以借鉴这类从日常小事切入的写作思路，避免内容假大空。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道写作题首先要明确三个必须覆盖的核心要点，避免漏点：第一步先确定要写的最幸福的时光的具体时间，选大家都熟悉的周末作为写作素材非常好上手，不容易出错；第二步围绕选定的时间，列举几个和家人共同完成的真实日常活动，不用设计太夸张的内容，贴近生活的细节比如一起吃饭、聊日常、做家务、出门休闲都很合适；第三步要解释清楚这段时光让你觉得幸福的原因，比如能增进和家人的感情，感受到家的温暖。写作时注意衔接好题目给出的开头，用上合适的过渡词让语句连贯，控制总词数在100左右，全程不要出现真实的人名校名即可。
【解析】
1. 开篇衔接给定的开头句，先简单表达自己对家的感受，直接点出自己和家人最开心的时光是周末，完成第一个要点的表述。
2. 主体部分展开描述周末和家人的共同活动：先写日常的相处细节，比如一起用餐、分享校园里的趣事、帮忙分担家务，再补充共同的休闲安排，比如看电影、购物、近郊短途出游，内容充实自然，完全覆盖第二个要点。
3. 结尾部分总结，点明这段共处的时光能让自己更理解父母、向家人表达爱意，解释清楚为什么这段时光是最幸福的，完成第三个要点的表述。最后通读全文，检查语法错误，确认没有出现真实个人信息，词数符合要求即可。
【答案】
The Happiest Time with My Family
As a famous saying goes, "East or west, home is best." This is true for me. When I'm at home, I always feel happy and relaxed with my family.
My happiest time with my family is the weekend. It's a time when all my family stay together. My parents and I can have meals together. I have a chance to talk about what interesting things happened at school. Besides, I help my parents do some chores such as taking out the rubbish and watering the flowers. Also, I would like to do something relaxing with them. For example, we may go to the movies or do shopping together. Taking a short trip in the countryside always brings us great fun too. In short, the weekend is the happiest time with my family. It helps me understand my parents better and show my love to them.
【知识点】
提纲类英语写作，家庭话题表达，过渡词运用
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖题干给出的全部三个写作要点，选取周末和家人共处的日常作为素材，非常贴合学生真实生活，内容真挚不空洞。行文使用了besides、for example等过渡词衔接内容，逻辑流畅，句式搭配合理，既有简单句也有定语从句等复合句提升表达质量，词数符合要求，没有出现任何违规的真实个人信息，是一篇非常标准的初中英语话题写作参考范文，学生可以借鉴这类从日常小事切入的写作思路，避免内容假大空。
【难度系数】
0.7
