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七、书面表达(满分 25 分)
假如你是某校学生李华，你们学校在本次暑假组织学生参加了各种志愿者服务活动，请你结合以下提示，用英语给笔友 Henry 写一封电子邮件，分享活动内容及感受。词数 80 左右。
要求：1. 必须包含所有提示信息，可适当发挥，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数；
2. 意思清楚，表达通顺，行文连贯，书写规范；
3. 请勿在文中使用真实的姓名、校名和地名。
Dear Henry,
How is it going? I'm glad to share my volunteer experience this summer with you.
Yours,
Li Hua
假如你是某校学生李华，你们学校在本次暑假组织学生参加了各种志愿者服务活动，请你结合以下提示，用英语给笔友 Henry 写一封电子邮件，分享活动内容及感受。词数 80 左右。
要求：1. 必须包含所有提示信息，可适当发挥，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数；
2. 意思清楚，表达通顺，行文连贯，书写规范；
3. 请勿在文中使用真实的姓名、校名和地名。
Dear Henry,
How is it going? I'm glad to share my volunteer experience this summer with you.
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
七、书面表达
Dear Henry,
How is it going? I'm glad to share my volunteer experience this summer with you. During the holidays, I took part in several volunteer activities organized by our school. First, I helped in the city library by sorting books and guiding visitors. Second, I also helped clean up the city parks with my good friends. Then, I volunteered in a hospital, offering water and showing patients the way. I also visited the old people's home to chat with them and clean their rooms. Though a bit tired, I felt really happy and proud to help others.
Yours,
Li Hua
Dear Henry,
How is it going? I'm glad to share my volunteer experience this summer with you. During the holidays, I took part in several volunteer activities organized by our school. First, I helped in the city library by sorting books and guiding visitors. Second, I also helped clean up the city parks with my good friends. Then, I volunteered in a hospital, offering water and showing patients the way. I also visited the old people's home to chat with them and clean their rooms. Though a bit tired, I felt really happy and proud to help others.
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
首先明确本次写作任务是给笔友写电子邮件，分享暑假参加的志愿活动，需包含提示的时间、所有志愿活动内容及个人感受。解题思路如下：
1. 承接开头，先总述自己参加了学校组织的多项志愿活动，引出下文具体内容；
2. 针对每个志愿活动，不能仅罗列标题，要适当补充具体行为，让内容更充实，比如在图书馆可以写整理书籍、引导访客，用first、second、then等连接词串联，使行文逻辑清晰；
3. 最后补充个人感受，结合志愿活动的付出，写出“虽累但快乐自豪”这类真实的情感，贴合活动主题；
4. 注意语言要符合邮件的口语化正式风格，控制词数在要求范围内，确保意思通顺连贯。
【解析】
1. 总起引入：用“During the holidays, I took part in several volunteer activities organized by our school.”承接开头，点明活动背景（学校组织、暑假），引出具体活动。
2. 分述活动：
图书馆志愿：用“First”引导，补充具体工作“sorting books and guiding visitors”，丰富“Help in the city library”的内容；
打扫公园：用“Second”衔接，加入“with my good friends”使场景更具体；
医院志愿：用“Then”过渡，补充“offering water and showing patients the way”说明具体服务内容；
探访敬老院：用“I also”引出，补充“chat with them and clean their rooms”的具体行为；
3. 表达感受：用“Though a bit tired, I felt really happy and proud to help others.”写出活动后的真实感受，呼应志愿活动的意义。
4. 整体语言简洁通顺，连接词的使用让行文逻辑清晰，符合邮件写作要求，词数也符合题目规定。
【答案】
Dear Henry,
How is it going? I'm glad to share my volunteer experience this summer with you. During the holidays, I took part in several volunteer activities organized by our school. First, I helped in the city library by sorting books and guiding visitors. Second, I also helped clean up the city parks with my good friends. Then, I volunteered in a hospital, offering water and showing patients the way. I also visited the old people's home to chat with them and clean their rooms. Though a bit tired, I felt really happy and proud to help others.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语邮件写作、志愿话题写作、语句连贯技巧
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求，完整覆盖所有提示信息，通过补充具体活动细节让内容更充实真实，使用first、second等连接词使行文逻辑清晰、过渡自然，情感表达真挚，符合电子邮件的写作规范，词数控制合理，是一篇合格的话题写作范文。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先明确本次写作任务是给笔友写电子邮件，分享暑假参加的志愿活动，需包含提示的时间、所有志愿活动内容及个人感受。解题思路如下：
1. 承接开头，先总述自己参加了学校组织的多项志愿活动，引出下文具体内容；
2. 针对每个志愿活动，不能仅罗列标题，要适当补充具体行为，让内容更充实，比如在图书馆可以写整理书籍、引导访客，用first、second、then等连接词串联，使行文逻辑清晰；
3. 最后补充个人感受，结合志愿活动的付出，写出“虽累但快乐自豪”这类真实的情感，贴合活动主题；
4. 注意语言要符合邮件的口语化正式风格，控制词数在要求范围内，确保意思通顺连贯。
【解析】
1. 总起引入：用“During the holidays, I took part in several volunteer activities organized by our school.”承接开头，点明活动背景（学校组织、暑假），引出具体活动。
2. 分述活动：
图书馆志愿：用“First”引导，补充具体工作“sorting books and guiding visitors”，丰富“Help in the city library”的内容；
打扫公园：用“Second”衔接，加入“with my good friends”使场景更具体；
医院志愿：用“Then”过渡，补充“offering water and showing patients the way”说明具体服务内容；
探访敬老院：用“I also”引出，补充“chat with them and clean their rooms”的具体行为；
3. 表达感受：用“Though a bit tired, I felt really happy and proud to help others.”写出活动后的真实感受，呼应志愿活动的意义。
4. 整体语言简洁通顺，连接词的使用让行文逻辑清晰，符合邮件写作要求，词数也符合题目规定。
【答案】
Dear Henry,
How is it going? I'm glad to share my volunteer experience this summer with you. During the holidays, I took part in several volunteer activities organized by our school. First, I helped in the city library by sorting books and guiding visitors. Second, I also helped clean up the city parks with my good friends. Then, I volunteered in a hospital, offering water and showing patients the way. I also visited the old people's home to chat with them and clean their rooms. Though a bit tired, I felt really happy and proud to help others.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语邮件写作、志愿话题写作、语句连贯技巧
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求，完整覆盖所有提示信息，通过补充具体活动细节让内容更充实真实，使用first、second等连接词使行文逻辑清晰、过渡自然，情感表达真挚，符合电子邮件的写作规范，词数控制合理，是一篇合格的话题写作范文。
【难度系数】
0.7
