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七、书面表达(满分25分)
假如你所在社区正在开展"因为有你——感动社区十大人物"评选活动,你想向社区中心推荐你的邻居Ricky,请根据下表所提示的要点,用英语写一篇短文介绍Ricky,并谈谈和这样的邻居相处的感受。
注意:1. 表达中必须包含所给的要点,可以适当发挥;2. 词数90左右。开头已经给出,不计入总词数。
Ricky is my neighbour. He lives next door to me.
假如你所在社区正在开展"因为有你——感动社区十大人物"评选活动,你想向社区中心推荐你的邻居Ricky,请根据下表所提示的要点,用英语写一篇短文介绍Ricky,并谈谈和这样的邻居相处的感受。
注意:1. 表达中必须包含所给的要点,可以适当发挥;2. 词数90左右。开头已经给出,不计入总词数。
Ricky is my neighbour. He lives next door to me.
答案
Ricky is my neighbour. He lives next door to me. He truly embodies the spirit of our community.
He is very kind and brave. Once, an elderly couple down the street was struggling to clear their driveway during a snowstorm. Ricky braved the cold and helped them dig out their driveway to ensure their safety.
Ricky also has a remarkable ability to check and fix a variety of machines, from malfunctioning lawnmowers to malfunctioning garage doors. In addition to his practical skills, Ricky was an avid reader and sports fan.
Living near Ricky is a true blessing. His presence fills our community with warmth.
One possible version:
Ricky is my neighbour. He lives next door to me. He truly embodies the spirit of our community.
He is very kind and brave. Once, an elderly couple down the street was struggling to clear their driveway during a snowstorm. Ricky braved the cold and helped them dig out their driveway to ensure their safety.
Ricky also has a remarkable ability to check and fix a variety of machines, from malfunctioning lawnmowers to malfunctioning garage doors. In addition to his practical skills, Ricky was an avid reader and sports fan.
Living near Ricky is a true blessing. His presence fills our community with warmth.
He is very kind and brave. Once, an elderly couple down the street was struggling to clear their driveway during a snowstorm. Ricky braved the cold and helped them dig out their driveway to ensure their safety.
Ricky also has a remarkable ability to check and fix a variety of machines, from malfunctioning lawnmowers to malfunctioning garage doors. In addition to his practical skills, Ricky was an avid reader and sports fan.
Living near Ricky is a true blessing. His presence fills our community with warmth.
One possible version:
Ricky is my neighbour. He lives next door to me. He truly embodies the spirit of our community.
He is very kind and brave. Once, an elderly couple down the street was struggling to clear their driveway during a snowstorm. Ricky braved the cold and helped them dig out their driveway to ensure their safety.
Ricky also has a remarkable ability to check and fix a variety of machines, from malfunctioning lawnmowers to malfunctioning garage doors. In addition to his practical skills, Ricky was an avid reader and sports fan.
Living near Ricky is a true blessing. His presence fills our community with warmth.
解析
【分析】
这是一篇人物推荐类书面表达，需围绕邻居Ricky展开，覆盖表格中“品质及举例、能力、爱好、相处感受”四个要点，开头已给出。解题思路：先承接开头点明Ricky符合社区评选的精神；再用具体事例说明他的善良、勇敢等品质；接着介绍他修理、检查物品的能力；然后提及他的阅读、运动爱好；最后表达和他相处的感受，突出他对社区的积极影响，同时控制词数在要求范围内，语言通顺自然。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，补充引出人物特质：He truly embodies the spirit of our community.
2. 描述品质并举例：He is very kind and brave. Once, an elderly couple down the street was struggling to clear their driveway during a snowstorm. Ricky braved the cold and helped them dig out their driveway to ensure their safety.
3. 介绍能力：Ricky also has a remarkable ability to check and fix a variety of machines, from malfunctioning lawnmowers to malfunctioning garage doors.
4. 提及爱好：In addition to his practical skills, Ricky was an avid reader and sports fan.
5. 表达相处感受：Living near Ricky is a true blessing. His presence fills our community with warmth.
【答案】
Ricky is my neighbour. He lives next door to me. He truly embodies the spirit of our community.
He is very kind and brave. Once, an elderly couple down the street was struggling to clear their driveway during a snowstorm. Ricky braved the cold and helped them dig out their driveway to ensure their safety.
Ricky also has a remarkable ability to check and fix a variety of machines, from malfunctioning lawnmowers to malfunctioning garage doors. In addition to his practical skills, Ricky was an avid reader and sports fan.
Living near Ricky is a true blessing. His presence fills our community with warmth.
【知识点】
英语书面表达、人物介绍
【点评】
该范文完整覆盖题目要求的所有要点，通过具体事例体现人物品质，语言流畅自然，符合初中英语书面表达的要求，恰当表达了对邻居的认可与赞美，是符合要求的参考范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
这是一篇人物推荐类书面表达，需围绕邻居Ricky展开，覆盖表格中“品质及举例、能力、爱好、相处感受”四个要点，开头已给出。解题思路：先承接开头点明Ricky符合社区评选的精神；再用具体事例说明他的善良、勇敢等品质；接着介绍他修理、检查物品的能力；然后提及他的阅读、运动爱好；最后表达和他相处的感受，突出他对社区的积极影响，同时控制词数在要求范围内，语言通顺自然。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，补充引出人物特质：He truly embodies the spirit of our community.
2. 描述品质并举例：He is very kind and brave. Once, an elderly couple down the street was struggling to clear their driveway during a snowstorm. Ricky braved the cold and helped them dig out their driveway to ensure their safety.
3. 介绍能力：Ricky also has a remarkable ability to check and fix a variety of machines, from malfunctioning lawnmowers to malfunctioning garage doors.
4. 提及爱好：In addition to his practical skills, Ricky was an avid reader and sports fan.
5. 表达相处感受：Living near Ricky is a true blessing. His presence fills our community with warmth.
【答案】
Ricky is my neighbour. He lives next door to me. He truly embodies the spirit of our community.
He is very kind and brave. Once, an elderly couple down the street was struggling to clear their driveway during a snowstorm. Ricky braved the cold and helped them dig out their driveway to ensure their safety.
Ricky also has a remarkable ability to check and fix a variety of machines, from malfunctioning lawnmowers to malfunctioning garage doors. In addition to his practical skills, Ricky was an avid reader and sports fan.
Living near Ricky is a true blessing. His presence fills our community with warmth.
【知识点】
英语书面表达、人物介绍
【点评】
该范文完整覆盖题目要求的所有要点，通过具体事例体现人物品质，语言流畅自然，符合初中英语书面表达的要求，恰当表达了对邻居的认可与赞美，是符合要求的参考范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
