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随着现代科技的发展，机器人已经来到我们身边，给人们的生活带来便利。请以“Household Robots”为题，介绍家用机器人的基本情况，并就如何更好地利用机器人为我们服务提出建议。
【注意】1. 词数120左右（文章开头已给出，不计入总词数）。
2. 文中不能出现真实姓名、校名等信息。
3. 文章必须包含所提供的主要信息，并适当发挥。
参考词汇：function 功能
Household Robots
With the development of modern science and technology，robots have entered our lives，which brings great convenience to us.
随着现代科技的发展，机器人已经来到我们身边，给人们的生活带来便利。请以“Household Robots”为题，介绍家用机器人的基本情况，并就如何更好地利用机器人为我们服务提出建议。
【注意】1. 词数120左右（文章开头已给出，不计入总词数）。
2. 文中不能出现真实姓名、校名等信息。
3. 文章必须包含所提供的主要信息，并适当发挥。
参考词汇：function 功能
Household Robots
With the development of modern science and technology，robots have entered our lives，which brings great convenience to us.
答案
One possible version
Household Robots
With the development of modern science and technology, robots have entered our lives, which brings great convenience to us. Household robots are now widely used in our daily lives. Household robots, which look modern and fashionable, are very popular with people. Also, we can see many kinds of household robots.
Household robots have many functions. Firstly, they can be used to cook and clean rooms. Secondly, they can help to take care of the elderly. Moreover, they can even make calls to deal with something dangerous.
However, the technology used in household robots is not developed well enough to solve all problems. Sometimes, they may catch viruses and cause safety problems.
In my opinion, robots should be used to improve people's lives. Scientists should make robots help us better by developing the technology. Also, I think the price is expected to be low enough for common people so that they can afford one.
Household Robots
With the development of modern science and technology, robots have entered our lives, which brings great convenience to us. Household robots are now widely used in our daily lives. Household robots, which look modern and fashionable, are very popular with people. Also, we can see many kinds of household robots.
Household robots have many functions. Firstly, they can be used to cook and clean rooms. Secondly, they can help to take care of the elderly. Moreover, they can even make calls to deal with something dangerous.
However, the technology used in household robots is not developed well enough to solve all problems. Sometimes, they may catch viruses and cause safety problems.
In my opinion, robots should be used to improve people's lives. Scientists should make robots help us better by developing the technology. Also, I think the price is expected to be low enough for common people so that they can afford one.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先先完成审题：明确写作主题是“家用机器人”，需要覆盖两个核心要求：一是介绍家用机器人的基本情况，二是提出更好利用机器人服务生活的建议，词数要求120左右，给定的开头不计入总词数，也不能出现真实个人、校信息。接下来梳理写作思路：第一步先承接给定的开头，自然引出家用机器人如今在日常生活中广泛普及的现状，简单补充它的外观特点，说明它很受大众欢迎；第二步围绕提示词function，有条理列举家用机器人的实用功能，比如做家务、照料老人、协助处理危险事件等内容；第三步客观点出当前家用机器人现存的不足，比如技术不完善、可能感染病毒引发安全隐患；最后针对性给出合理化建议，从升级核心技术、降低售价让普通家庭都能负担的角度展开，行文用合适的逻辑连接词串联，保证要点齐全、逻辑通顺，符合词数要求即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：本文属于事物介绍类说明文，整体以一般现在时为主，介绍客观情况用第三人称，表达个人建议部分用第一人称，体裁清晰，要点明确。
2. 搭建行文框架：
① 承接给定开头，补充说明家用机器人如今在日常生活中应用广泛，外观时尚现代，受到大众喜爱，自然引出话题。
② 以“function”为核心，用firstly、secondly、moreover等逻辑词分层列举功能：可做饭打扫房间、帮忙照顾老人、甚至可以拨打电话处理危险状况，内容贴合生活实际。
③ 客观转折，说明当前家用机器人的技术还不够成熟，偶尔会感染病毒引发安全问题，辩证说明现存缺陷。
④ 最后以in my opinion引出建议：一方面科学家要研发更成熟的技术让机器人更好服务人类，另一方面要降低售价让普通民众都能负担得起家用机器人。
3. 润色调整：适当使用定语从句丰富句式，控制总词数在120左右，全程不出现真实姓名、校名等隐私信息，符合题目所有要求。
【答案】
One possible version
Household Robots
With the development of modern science and technology, robots have entered our lives, which brings great convenience to us. Household robots are now widely used in our daily lives. Household robots, which look modern and fashionable, are very popular with people. Also, we can see many kinds of household robots.
Household robots have many functions. Firstly, they can be used to cook and clean rooms. Secondly, they can help to take care of the elderly. Moreover, they can even make calls to deal with something dangerous.
However, the technology used in household robots is not developed well enough to solve all problems. Sometimes, they may catch viruses and cause safety problems.
In my opinion, robots should be used to improve people's lives. Scientists should make robots help us better by developing the technology. Also, I think the price is expected to be low enough for common people so that they can afford one.
【知识点】
说明文写作
逻辑连词运用
话题词汇积累
【点评】
本题是贴近科技生活的热点类书面表达，既考查学生对事物特征、功能的描述能力，也考查学生辩证思考、提出合理建议的表达能力。写作时要注意将所有要求的要点全部覆盖，合理使用衔接词让文章层次分明，避免要点遗漏，同时严格控制词数，不要出现个人隐私相关信息，就能拿到不错的得分。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道书面表达题，首先先完成审题：明确写作主题是“家用机器人”，需要覆盖两个核心要求：一是介绍家用机器人的基本情况，二是提出更好利用机器人服务生活的建议，词数要求120左右，给定的开头不计入总词数，也不能出现真实个人、校信息。接下来梳理写作思路：第一步先承接给定的开头，自然引出家用机器人如今在日常生活中广泛普及的现状，简单补充它的外观特点，说明它很受大众欢迎；第二步围绕提示词function，有条理列举家用机器人的实用功能，比如做家务、照料老人、协助处理危险事件等内容；第三步客观点出当前家用机器人现存的不足，比如技术不完善、可能感染病毒引发安全隐患；最后针对性给出合理化建议，从升级核心技术、降低售价让普通家庭都能负担的角度展开，行文用合适的逻辑连接词串联，保证要点齐全、逻辑通顺，符合词数要求即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：本文属于事物介绍类说明文，整体以一般现在时为主，介绍客观情况用第三人称，表达个人建议部分用第一人称，体裁清晰，要点明确。
2. 搭建行文框架：
① 承接给定开头，补充说明家用机器人如今在日常生活中应用广泛，外观时尚现代，受到大众喜爱，自然引出话题。
② 以“function”为核心，用firstly、secondly、moreover等逻辑词分层列举功能：可做饭打扫房间、帮忙照顾老人、甚至可以拨打电话处理危险状况，内容贴合生活实际。
③ 客观转折，说明当前家用机器人的技术还不够成熟，偶尔会感染病毒引发安全问题，辩证说明现存缺陷。
④ 最后以in my opinion引出建议：一方面科学家要研发更成熟的技术让机器人更好服务人类，另一方面要降低售价让普通民众都能负担得起家用机器人。
3. 润色调整：适当使用定语从句丰富句式，控制总词数在120左右，全程不出现真实姓名、校名等隐私信息，符合题目所有要求。
【答案】
One possible version
Household Robots
With the development of modern science and technology, robots have entered our lives, which brings great convenience to us. Household robots are now widely used in our daily lives. Household robots, which look modern and fashionable, are very popular with people. Also, we can see many kinds of household robots.
Household robots have many functions. Firstly, they can be used to cook and clean rooms. Secondly, they can help to take care of the elderly. Moreover, they can even make calls to deal with something dangerous.
However, the technology used in household robots is not developed well enough to solve all problems. Sometimes, they may catch viruses and cause safety problems.
In my opinion, robots should be used to improve people's lives. Scientists should make robots help us better by developing the technology. Also, I think the price is expected to be low enough for common people so that they can afford one.
【知识点】
说明文写作
逻辑连词运用
话题词汇积累
【点评】
本题是贴近科技生活的热点类书面表达，既考查学生对事物特征、功能的描述能力，也考查学生辩证思考、提出合理建议的表达能力。写作时要注意将所有要求的要点全部覆盖，合理使用衔接词让文章层次分明，避免要点遗漏，同时严格控制词数，不要出现个人隐私相关信息，就能拿到不错的得分。
【难度系数】
0.6
