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七、书面表达
你接受过别人的帮助或你曾帮助过别人吗？你那时的感受如何呢？请以 “The Experience I’ll Never Forget” 为题写一篇英语短文，谈谈你接受帮助或帮助别人的一次经历。
要求：
1. 书写规范，行文流畅，语法正确；
2. 70 个词左右。
The Experience I’ll Never Forget
你接受过别人的帮助或你曾帮助过别人吗？你那时的感受如何呢？请以 “The Experience I’ll Never Forget” 为题写一篇英语短文，谈谈你接受帮助或帮助别人的一次经历。
要求：
1. 书写规范，行文流畅，语法正确；
2. 70 个词左右。
The Experience I’ll Never Forget
答案
参考范文
Last Sunday, my father drove us to a farm to pick apples. It was very hot. On the country road, I saw a little girl carrying a big basket of apples. It was so heavy for her. I decided to help her. After talking, I knew her parents were ill and she would go to the near market to sell apples. I used my lucky money to buy all of her apples. She said thanks to me.
I didn't have fun in picking apples on that day, but I enjoyed the time — helping others very much.
Last Sunday, my father drove us to a farm to pick apples. It was very hot. On the country road, I saw a little girl carrying a big basket of apples. It was so heavy for her. I decided to help her. After talking, I knew her parents were ill and she would go to the near market to sell apples. I used my lucky money to buy all of her apples. She said thanks to me.
I didn't have fun in picking apples on that day, but I enjoyed the time — helping others very much.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道题首先要审题，明确核心要求是写一次帮助他人或者接受他人帮助的难忘经历，词数控制在70左右。第一步先选贴近日常的熟悉素材，降低写作难度；第二步确定叙事时态为一般过去时，因为描述的是已经发生的过往事件；第三步搭建写作逻辑：先交代事件发生的时间背景，再讲事件的起因、具体行为，最后收尾抒发个人感受，保证行文连贯，覆盖所有题目要求，避免出现基础语法错误。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：本题属于叙事类话题书面表达，主题为难忘的助人/受助经历，要求词数70左右，以第一人称为叙事主体，统一用一般过去时描述过往事件。
2. 框架搭建：
① 开篇交代事件发生的时间和初始场景：比如上周日和家人驱车去农场摘苹果的背景；
② 中间叙述事件经过：路上遇到拎不动苹果的小女孩，得知她家中的难处后，用自己的压岁钱买下她全部的苹果；
③ 结尾抒发个人感受：点明虽然当天没好好摘苹果，但是收获了助人的快乐，点出“难忘”的核心主题。
3. 润色调整：核对语法错误，调整语句流畅度，控制总词数符合要求，保证行文自然通顺。
【答案】
Last Sunday, my father drove us to a farm to pick apples. It was very hot. On the country road, I saw a little girl carrying a big basket of apples. It was so heavy for her. I decided to help her. After talking, I knew her parents were ill and she would go to the near market to sell apples. I used my lucky money to buy all of her apples. She said thanks to me.
I didn't have fun in picking apples on that day, but I enjoyed the time — helping others very much.
【知识点】
1. 一般过去时应用
2. 记叙文写作
3. 话题作文谋篇
【点评】
本篇参考范文完全贴合题目要求，叙事完整逻辑清晰，准确使用一般过去时描述过往经历，素材贴近学生日常生活，细节充实，既完整交代了事件的起因、经过、结果，也自然抒发了助人的愉悦感受，词数符合70词左右的要求，没有语法错误，是符合七年级英语水平的优秀写作范例。学生也可以选取自己被他人帮助的日常素材，比如雨天忘带伞被同学送回家等，更容易写出真情实感。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道题首先要审题，明确核心要求是写一次帮助他人或者接受他人帮助的难忘经历，词数控制在70左右。第一步先选贴近日常的熟悉素材，降低写作难度；第二步确定叙事时态为一般过去时，因为描述的是已经发生的过往事件；第三步搭建写作逻辑：先交代事件发生的时间背景，再讲事件的起因、具体行为，最后收尾抒发个人感受，保证行文连贯，覆盖所有题目要求，避免出现基础语法错误。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：本题属于叙事类话题书面表达，主题为难忘的助人/受助经历，要求词数70左右，以第一人称为叙事主体，统一用一般过去时描述过往事件。
2. 框架搭建：
① 开篇交代事件发生的时间和初始场景：比如上周日和家人驱车去农场摘苹果的背景；
② 中间叙述事件经过：路上遇到拎不动苹果的小女孩，得知她家中的难处后，用自己的压岁钱买下她全部的苹果；
③ 结尾抒发个人感受：点明虽然当天没好好摘苹果，但是收获了助人的快乐，点出“难忘”的核心主题。
3. 润色调整：核对语法错误，调整语句流畅度，控制总词数符合要求，保证行文自然通顺。
【答案】
Last Sunday, my father drove us to a farm to pick apples. It was very hot. On the country road, I saw a little girl carrying a big basket of apples. It was so heavy for her. I decided to help her. After talking, I knew her parents were ill and she would go to the near market to sell apples. I used my lucky money to buy all of her apples. She said thanks to me.
I didn't have fun in picking apples on that day, but I enjoyed the time — helping others very much.
【知识点】
1. 一般过去时应用
2. 记叙文写作
3. 话题作文谋篇
【点评】
本篇参考范文完全贴合题目要求，叙事完整逻辑清晰，准确使用一般过去时描述过往经历，素材贴近学生日常生活，细节充实，既完整交代了事件的起因、经过、结果，也自然抒发了助人的愉悦感受，词数符合70词左右的要求，没有语法错误，是符合七年级英语水平的优秀写作范例。学生也可以选取自己被他人帮助的日常素材，比如雨天忘带伞被同学送回家等，更容易写出真情实感。
【难度系数】
0.6
