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第3步 典例分析
保持善良，传播爱心。我们都曾帮助过别人或接受过别人的帮助。假设你校英文报正在开展以“The spread of love”为主题的征文活动，请你用英语写一篇短文，讲述一次你帮助别人或别人帮助你的经历，并谈谈你的感悟及今后的打算，向校报投稿。
注意：1. 词数80左右（开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）；
2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
The spread of love
As the saying goes, "A helping hand is often needed at the darkest hour."
Let's make the world a more beautiful place together.
【审题思路】
1. 体裁：记叙文。
2. 主题：讲述一次你帮助别人或别人帮助你的经历、感悟和未来打算。
3. 人称：以第一人称和第三人称为主。
4. 时态：以一般过去时和一般现在时为主。
保持善良，传播爱心。我们都曾帮助过别人或接受过别人的帮助。假设你校英文报正在开展以“The spread of love”为主题的征文活动，请你用英语写一篇短文，讲述一次你帮助别人或别人帮助你的经历，并谈谈你的感悟及今后的打算，向校报投稿。
注意：1. 词数80左右（开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）；
2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
The spread of love
As the saying goes, "A helping hand is often needed at the darkest hour."
Let's make the world a more beautiful place together.
【审题思路】
1. 体裁：记叙文。
2. 主题：讲述一次你帮助别人或别人帮助你的经历、感悟和未来打算。
3. 人称：以第一人称和第三人称为主。
4. 时态：以一般过去时和一般现在时为主。
答案
The spread of love
As the saying goes, "A helping hand is often needed at the darkest hour." And I am going to share my experience of helping others with you.
This term, a new student named Lily joined our class. When Lily first came to our class, everything was new and strange to her. She felt very lonely and had trouble learning Chinese.
As the monitor, I noticed her situation and decided to help her. I taught Lily Chinese after class and introduced some friendly classmates to her. Gradually, Lily became more active. Now, she has made many friends and is making progress in Chinese.
I'm so glad that we could help Lily. As Plato said, "Happiness springs from doing good and helping others." I believe if everyone can help others, love will be around us forever.
Let's make the world a more beautiful place together.
As the saying goes, "A helping hand is often needed at the darkest hour." And I am going to share my experience of helping others with you.
This term, a new student named Lily joined our class. When Lily first came to our class, everything was new and strange to her. She felt very lonely and had trouble learning Chinese.
As the monitor, I noticed her situation and decided to help her. I taught Lily Chinese after class and introduced some friendly classmates to her. Gradually, Lily became more active. Now, she has made many friends and is making progress in Chinese.
I'm so glad that we could help Lily. As Plato said, "Happiness springs from doing good and helping others." I believe if everyone can help others, love will be around us forever.
Let's make the world a more beautiful place together.
解析
本题是一篇主题为“The spread of love”的记叙文写作题，需以第一人称和第三人称为主，用一般过去时讲述帮助他人或被帮助的经历，用一般现在时表达感悟与打算，要补充细节使行文连贯，词数控制在80左右（给定开头结尾不计入词数）。
第4步 实战演练
赠人玫瑰，手有余香。帮助别人自己会感到快乐，得到别人的帮助更是一种幸运。假设你校正举办以“我身边的好人好事”为主题的英语征文比赛，请你以“An unforgettable day”为题用英语写一篇记叙文投稿。
要求：1. 文中不能出现真实姓名、校名和地名；
2. 词数80左右（题目不计入总词数）。
An unforgettable day
赠人玫瑰，手有余香。帮助别人自己会感到快乐，得到别人的帮助更是一种幸运。假设你校正举办以“我身边的好人好事”为主题的英语征文比赛，请你以“An unforgettable day”为题用英语写一篇记叙文投稿。
要求：1. 文中不能出现真实姓名、校名和地名；
2. 词数80左右（题目不计入总词数）。
An unforgettable day
答案
【实战演练】
An unforgettable day
It was a rainy Monday morning. I was rushing to school when I suddenly fell off my bike and hurt my leg badly. I sat on the roadside, feeling helpless and close to tears. At that moment, a young doctor, who was passing by, stopped his car. He carefully examined my leg and bandaged it. Then he drove me to school, refusing any payment. Later, I learnt he was a volunteer doctor who often helped people in need.
This act of kindness made me realise there are always good people around us. I'll never forget that day and pass on the kindness.
An unforgettable day
It was a rainy Monday morning. I was rushing to school when I suddenly fell off my bike and hurt my leg badly. I sat on the roadside, feeling helpless and close to tears. At that moment, a young doctor, who was passing by, stopped his car. He carefully examined my leg and bandaged it. Then he drove me to school, refusing any payment. Later, I learnt he was a volunteer doctor who often helped people in need.
This act of kindness made me realise there are always good people around us. I'll never forget that day and pass on the kindness.
解析
【分析】
本题为英语记叙文写作题，主题是“我身边的好人好事”，题目固定为An unforgettable day。解题思路：1. 审题：明确文体为记叙文，需围绕“身边的好人好事”展开，要求无真实姓名/校名/地名、词数80左右，时态用一般过去时；2. 选材：选取一件具体、能体现善意的难忘小事（如陌生路人的帮助）；3. 结构：按“事件起因→经过→结果→感悟”的逻辑安排内容，确保叙事清晰，情感真挚；4. 语言：用简单准确的词汇，适当使用衔接词（如when、at that moment）使语句连贯。
【解析】
范文遵循记叙文写作规范：1. 开头点明事件背景（雨天周一早上，骑车摔腿），交代起因；2. 中间叙述经过（陌生医生路过帮忙包扎、送上学，拒绝报酬），用定语从句丰富细节；3. 结尾升华主题，表达感悟（善意传递），符合征文要求；4. 全文无真实信息，词数约80，时态正确，语言流畅，紧扣“好人好事”主题。
【答案】
An unforgettable day
It was a rainy Monday morning. I was rushing to school when I suddenly fell off my bike and hurt my leg badly. I sat on the roadside, feeling helpless and close to tears. At that moment, a young doctor, who was passing by, stopped his car. He carefully examined my leg and bandaged it. Then he drove me to school, refusing any payment. Later, I learnt he was a volunteer doctor who often helped people in need.
This act of kindness made me realise there are always good people around us. I'll never forget that day and pass on the kindness.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作；主题式英语写作；一般过去时的运用
【点评】
范文选材贴近生活，紧扣“好人好事”主题，结构完整清晰，语言简洁规范，符合词数要求，传递了积极向上的价值观，是一篇符合要求的优秀参考范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
本题为英语记叙文写作题，主题是“我身边的好人好事”，题目固定为An unforgettable day。解题思路：1. 审题：明确文体为记叙文，需围绕“身边的好人好事”展开，要求无真实姓名/校名/地名、词数80左右，时态用一般过去时；2. 选材：选取一件具体、能体现善意的难忘小事（如陌生路人的帮助）；3. 结构：按“事件起因→经过→结果→感悟”的逻辑安排内容，确保叙事清晰，情感真挚；4. 语言：用简单准确的词汇，适当使用衔接词（如when、at that moment）使语句连贯。
【解析】
范文遵循记叙文写作规范：1. 开头点明事件背景（雨天周一早上，骑车摔腿），交代起因；2. 中间叙述经过（陌生医生路过帮忙包扎、送上学，拒绝报酬），用定语从句丰富细节；3. 结尾升华主题，表达感悟（善意传递），符合征文要求；4. 全文无真实信息，词数约80，时态正确，语言流畅，紧扣“好人好事”主题。
【答案】
An unforgettable day
It was a rainy Monday morning. I was rushing to school when I suddenly fell off my bike and hurt my leg badly. I sat on the roadside, feeling helpless and close to tears. At that moment, a young doctor, who was passing by, stopped his car. He carefully examined my leg and bandaged it. Then he drove me to school, refusing any payment. Later, I learnt he was a volunteer doctor who often helped people in need.
This act of kindness made me realise there are always good people around us. I'll never forget that day and pass on the kindness.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作；主题式英语写作；一般过去时的运用
【点评】
范文选材贴近生活，紧扣“好人好事”主题，结构完整清晰，语言简洁规范，符合词数要求，传递了积极向上的价值观，是一篇符合要求的优秀参考范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
