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（2025·江苏盐城东台第五教育联盟调研）为了鼓励青少年亲近大自然、走进大自然，某青少年英文网站举办了主题为“Nature”的征文比赛。假如你是李明，请你根据以下思维导图中的提示写一篇英文短文投稿。
One possible version:
Nature is our home. It's a part of our life. I still remember the time when I went climbing with my family. We got up early to see the sunrise. At first, I walked without difficulties. Later, I felt tired and wanted to give up but my dad kept encouraging me. Finally, I reached the top and saw the sunrise. I was amazed by the beauty of nature.
Getting close to nature is good for us students. It helps us learn more about plants and animals. We can also relax after a week's study.
Let's get close to nature together!
Nature is our home. It's a part of our life. I still remember the time when I went climbing with my family. We got up early to see the sunrise. At first, I walked without difficulties. Later, I felt tired and wanted to give up but my dad kept encouraging me. Finally, I reached the top and saw the sunrise. I was amazed by the beauty of nature.
Getting close to nature is good for us students. It helps us learn more about plants and animals. We can also relax after a week's study.
Let's get close to nature together!
答案
One possible version:
Nature is our home. It's a part of our life. I still remember the time when I went climbing with my family. We got up early to see the sunrise. At first, I walked without difficulties. Later, I felt tired and wanted to give up but my dad kept encouraging me. Finally, I reached the top and saw the sunrise. I was amazed by the beauty of nature.
Getting close to nature is good for us students. It helps us learn more about plants and animals. We can also relax after a week's study.
Let's get close to nature together!
Nature is our home. It's a part of our life. I still remember the time when I went climbing with my family. We got up early to see the sunrise. At first, I walked without difficulties. Later, I felt tired and wanted to give up but my dad kept encouraging me. Finally, I reached the top and saw the sunrise. I was amazed by the beauty of nature.
Getting close to nature is good for us students. It helps us learn more about plants and animals. We can also relax after a week's study.
Let's get close to nature together!
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先要明确核心要求：身份是李明，投稿主题为Nature，需要完全覆盖思维导图给出的三个模块内容。首先我们先搭建清晰的三段式框架，刚好对应三个模块：第一段先引入自然和人类的关联，选取一件有真实感的个人经历，比如和家人登山看日出，把经历的起承转合写清楚，再抒发对应的直观感受；第二段围绕亲近自然的好处展开，除了题干提示的放松身心，补充符合学生身份的合理益处，比如学习课本外的动植物知识、拓宽视野；第三段直接发出呼吁，贴合征文鼓励大家亲近自然的主题。写作时注意叙事部分用一般过去时，介绍好处和发出呼吁用一般现在时，语言风格贴合青少年投稿的轻松自然调性，不需要堆砌过难词汇。
【解析】
1. 谋篇布局：全文分三个段落，完全匹配思维导图的所有提示要素：
第一段：开篇点明自然是我们的家园，是生活的组成部分，随后叙述个人亲身经历：和家人一同早起登山看日出，起初行进顺利，中途疲惫想要放弃，在父亲的鼓励下坚持登顶，最终亲眼见到日出盛景，抒发自己被自然之美震撼的感受，完成“经历+感受”的模块要求。
第二段：点明亲近自然对学生的益处，首先对应提示的“放松身心”，说明可以在一周的课业学习后舒缓压力，补充第二点好处：可以实地认识各类动植物，收获课本之外的知识，完成好处模块的内容。
第三段：用简短有力的语句发出号召，呼吁大家一同亲近自然，完成呼吁模块的要求。
2. 语言表达：叙事部分准确使用一般过去时，逻辑连贯，细节充实，没有遗漏要点，符合英文网站征文的投稿语境。
【答案】
One possible version:
Nature is our home. It's a part of our life. I still remember the time when I went climbing with my family. We got up early to see the sunrise. At first, I walked without difficulties. Later, I felt tired and wanted to give up but my dad kept encouraging me. Finally, I reached the top and saw the sunrise. I was amazed by the beauty of nature.
Getting close to nature is good for us students. It helps us learn more about plants and animals. We can also relax after a week's study.
Let's get close to nature together!
【知识点】
英语夹叙夹议写作，动词时态运用，征文要点覆盖
【点评】
这篇习作完全覆盖题干给出的所有提示要点，结构清晰逻辑顺畅，个人经历的叙述有细节有起伏，避免了空泛套话，好处部分贴合中学生的实际生活，结尾呼吁简洁有力，整体语言自然流畅，符合青少年英文投稿的定位。同学们完成这类提示类写作时，把个人经历具象化、加入小细节能大幅提升文章的感染力。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道写作题首先要明确核心要求：身份是李明，投稿主题为Nature，需要完全覆盖思维导图给出的三个模块内容。首先我们先搭建清晰的三段式框架，刚好对应三个模块：第一段先引入自然和人类的关联，选取一件有真实感的个人经历，比如和家人登山看日出，把经历的起承转合写清楚，再抒发对应的直观感受；第二段围绕亲近自然的好处展开，除了题干提示的放松身心，补充符合学生身份的合理益处，比如学习课本外的动植物知识、拓宽视野；第三段直接发出呼吁，贴合征文鼓励大家亲近自然的主题。写作时注意叙事部分用一般过去时，介绍好处和发出呼吁用一般现在时，语言风格贴合青少年投稿的轻松自然调性，不需要堆砌过难词汇。
【解析】
1. 谋篇布局：全文分三个段落，完全匹配思维导图的所有提示要素：
第一段：开篇点明自然是我们的家园，是生活的组成部分，随后叙述个人亲身经历：和家人一同早起登山看日出，起初行进顺利，中途疲惫想要放弃，在父亲的鼓励下坚持登顶，最终亲眼见到日出盛景，抒发自己被自然之美震撼的感受，完成“经历+感受”的模块要求。
第二段：点明亲近自然对学生的益处，首先对应提示的“放松身心”，说明可以在一周的课业学习后舒缓压力，补充第二点好处：可以实地认识各类动植物，收获课本之外的知识，完成好处模块的内容。
第三段：用简短有力的语句发出号召，呼吁大家一同亲近自然，完成呼吁模块的要求。
2. 语言表达：叙事部分准确使用一般过去时，逻辑连贯，细节充实，没有遗漏要点，符合英文网站征文的投稿语境。
【答案】
One possible version:
Nature is our home. It's a part of our life. I still remember the time when I went climbing with my family. We got up early to see the sunrise. At first, I walked without difficulties. Later, I felt tired and wanted to give up but my dad kept encouraging me. Finally, I reached the top and saw the sunrise. I was amazed by the beauty of nature.
Getting close to nature is good for us students. It helps us learn more about plants and animals. We can also relax after a week's study.
Let's get close to nature together!
【知识点】
英语夹叙夹议写作，动词时态运用，征文要点覆盖
【点评】
这篇习作完全覆盖题干给出的所有提示要点，结构清晰逻辑顺畅，个人经历的叙述有细节有起伏，避免了空泛套话，好处部分贴合中学生的实际生活，结尾呼吁简洁有力，整体语言自然流畅，符合青少年英文投稿的定位。同学们完成这类提示类写作时，把个人经历具象化、加入小细节能大幅提升文章的感染力。
【难度系数】
0.6
