B写作实战
活动课上,同学们正在讨论世界各地的名胜古迹。请你写一篇80词左右的英语短文,介绍一处你了解的自然景观(如瀑布、山脉、湖泊等),描述它的美丽之处,并谈谈你对自然的感受。




请做: 单元检测(四)、(五)、(六) 勤演练,汇真知

One possible version:
One of the most amazing natural wonders I
know is the Upper Falls of the Yellowstone in
the US. It is very tall and wide. When the water
falls down, it makes a loud noise like thunder.
The white water mixes with the green trees
around, forming a beautiful picture. Last year, I
saw it in a documentary. I was shocked by its
power and beauty. Nature is like a great artist. It
gives us wonderful views and makes us feel
peaceful. We should love and protect nature.

【分析】
本题为英语写作题，要求围绕自然景观展开写作，需完成三个核心任务：介绍一处自然景观、描述其美丽之处、表达对自然的感受，且词数控制在80左右。解题思路：1. 选取知名度高、易描述的自然景观（如黄石上瀑布）；2. 按“点明景观→描述特点→结合体验→表达感受”的结构布局；3. 用生动的语言（如比喻）丰富内容，同时注意词数和语法准确性。
【解析】
1. 确定写作对象：美国黄石国家公园的上瀑布；
2. 构建文章结构：开篇点明景观名称与位置→中间描述瀑布的高度、水流声、色彩搭配等特点→结合纪录片观看的个人体验→结尾表达对自然的赞美及保护自然的呼吁；
3. 语言运用：采用简单句与复合句结合，加入“自然像伟大艺术家”的比喻，增强表达效果，控制词数符合要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
One of the most amazing natural wonders I know is the Upper Falls of the Yellowstone in the US. It is very tall and wide. When the water falls down, it makes a loud noise like thunder. The white water mixes with the green trees around, forming a beautiful picture. Last year, I saw it in a documentary. I was shocked by its power and beauty. Nature is like a great artist. It gives us wonderful views and makes us feel peaceful. We should love and protect nature.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、自然主题英语表达、观点阐述
【点评】
范文紧扣题目要求，结构清晰完整，内容具体生动，运用比喻修辞增强表达效果，既完成了景观描述，又传递了对自然的热爱与保护意识，符合80词左右的要求，是一篇优秀的参考范文，适合学生模仿学习。
【难度系数】
0.3