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春赏繁花，夏聆蝉鸣，秋忙采摘，冬戏冰雪，四季流转，各有韵味。鹿鸣英语社团正在组织题为"一段与季节相关的回忆"(A Seasonal Memory)的征文比赛，请根据以下提示，写一篇英语短文参赛。
注意事项:1.文中不能出现真实的班级和姓名等信息;2.文章须包含所有要点，可适当发挥，使短文连贯、通顺;3.词数90左右(文章开头已给出，不计入总词数)。
A Seasonal Memory
The season with a special memory for me is
春赏繁花，夏聆蝉鸣，秋忙采摘，冬戏冰雪，四季流转，各有韵味。鹿鸣英语社团正在组织题为"一段与季节相关的回忆"(A Seasonal Memory)的征文比赛，请根据以下提示，写一篇英语短文参赛。
注意事项:1.文中不能出现真实的班级和姓名等信息;2.文章须包含所有要点，可适当发挥，使短文连贯、通顺;3.词数90左右(文章开头已给出，不计入总词数)。
A Seasonal Memory
The season with a special memory for me is
答案
七、
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:本文是一篇记叙文。②时态:主要为一般现在时和一般过去时。③提示:写作要点已给出,注意不要遗漏要点,行文连贯,逻辑清晰,无拼写和语法错误。
[写作步骤]
第一步,介绍你在哪个季节有特别的记忆;第二步,阐述在这个季节你做了什么以及当时的感受;第三步,阐述为什么这段记忆对你来说很特别。
[词句积累]
①wake up醒来;活跃起来 ②be filled with/be full of ...充满…… ③refreshing使人凉爽的
④When spring arrives, nature wakes up and my heart is filled with hope and joy.(when引导时间状语从句)
⑤This memory is special to me because it makes me think of the simple joy of life and the love of my family.(because引导原因状语从句)
One possible version:
A Seasonal Memory
The season with a special memory for me is spring. When spring arrives, nature wakes up and my heart is filled with hope and joy.
Last spring, my family and I went to the local park to enjoy the lovely flowers. The air was full of the sweet smell of flowers and the gentle wind was refreshing. I ran on the grass, feeling the warmth of the sun on my face. At that time, I felt truly happy and free.
This memory is special to me because it makes me think of the simple joy of life and the love of my family.
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:本文是一篇记叙文。②时态:主要为一般现在时和一般过去时。③提示:写作要点已给出,注意不要遗漏要点,行文连贯,逻辑清晰,无拼写和语法错误。
[写作步骤]
第一步,介绍你在哪个季节有特别的记忆;第二步,阐述在这个季节你做了什么以及当时的感受;第三步,阐述为什么这段记忆对你来说很特别。
[词句积累]
①wake up醒来;活跃起来 ②be filled with/be full of ...充满…… ③refreshing使人凉爽的
④When spring arrives, nature wakes up and my heart is filled with hope and joy.(when引导时间状语从句)
⑤This memory is special to me because it makes me think of the simple joy of life and the love of my family.(because引导原因状语从句)
One possible version:
A Seasonal Memory
The season with a special memory for me is spring. When spring arrives, nature wakes up and my heart is filled with hope and joy.
Last spring, my family and I went to the local park to enjoy the lovely flowers. The air was full of the sweet smell of flowers and the gentle wind was refreshing. I ran on the grass, feeling the warmth of the sun on my face. At that time, I felt truly happy and free.
This memory is special to me because it makes me think of the simple joy of life and the love of my family.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先先梳理所有要求：首先明确要覆盖的全部要点：点明有特殊回忆的季节、写出该季节你做的具体事件、写出当时的感受、说明这段记忆特殊的原因。首先第一步先选一个自己有真实经历、容易展开描写的季节，比如春天，避免选太冷门没有内容可写的方向。接下来构思内容：先顺着题目给出的开头补全，点明季节，接着选取一件具体的小事，比如和家人踏青出游，补充场景细节让内容不空洞，之后自然写出当时放松愉悦的感受，最后收尾点出记忆的特殊意义，全程注意不要出现真实姓名班级，控制总词数在90左右，描述过去发生的事件用一般过去时，介绍季节通用特点用一般现在时，保证语法正确行文连贯。
【解析】
写作按照三步完成：
1. 开篇点题：补全给定开头，直接点明承载特殊回忆的季节，简单铺垫该季节到来时的整体氛围，引出下文。
2. 主体叙事：用一般过去时叙述该季节里发生的具体事件，比如去年春天和家人去公园赏花踏青，补充花香、柔风这类细节丰富场景，接着写出自己当时的动作，自然带出当时愉悦、自由的真实感受，覆盖所有主体部分的要点。
3. 结尾升华：说明这段记忆的特殊之处，关联生活的小美好和家人的陪伴，呼应作文主题，完成全文。
【答案】
A Seasonal Memory
The season with a special memory for me is spring. When spring arrives, nature wakes up and my heart is filled with hope and joy.
Last spring, my family and I went to the local park to enjoy the lovely flowers. The air was full of the sweet smell of flowers and the gentle wind was refreshing. I ran on the grass, feeling the warmth of the sun on my face. At that time, I felt truly happy and free.
This memory is special to me because it makes me think of the simple joy of life and the love of my family.
【知识点】
提纲类作文写作，记叙文时态运用，要点整合表达
【点评】
本题话题贴近学生日常生活，给出的写作提示清晰明确，不需要学生自行构思复杂的情节，只需要结合自身真实经历，把事件、感受、特殊意义三个核心要点完整覆盖，适当补充少量场景细节就能让文章流畅生动，注意规避真实个人信息、控制词数就可以拿到不错的得分。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道写作题首先先梳理所有要求：首先明确要覆盖的全部要点：点明有特殊回忆的季节、写出该季节你做的具体事件、写出当时的感受、说明这段记忆特殊的原因。首先第一步先选一个自己有真实经历、容易展开描写的季节，比如春天，避免选太冷门没有内容可写的方向。接下来构思内容：先顺着题目给出的开头补全，点明季节，接着选取一件具体的小事，比如和家人踏青出游，补充场景细节让内容不空洞，之后自然写出当时放松愉悦的感受，最后收尾点出记忆的特殊意义，全程注意不要出现真实姓名班级，控制总词数在90左右，描述过去发生的事件用一般过去时，介绍季节通用特点用一般现在时，保证语法正确行文连贯。
【解析】
写作按照三步完成：
1. 开篇点题：补全给定开头，直接点明承载特殊回忆的季节，简单铺垫该季节到来时的整体氛围，引出下文。
2. 主体叙事：用一般过去时叙述该季节里发生的具体事件，比如去年春天和家人去公园赏花踏青，补充花香、柔风这类细节丰富场景，接着写出自己当时的动作，自然带出当时愉悦、自由的真实感受，覆盖所有主体部分的要点。
3. 结尾升华：说明这段记忆的特殊之处，关联生活的小美好和家人的陪伴，呼应作文主题，完成全文。
【答案】
A Seasonal Memory
The season with a special memory for me is spring. When spring arrives, nature wakes up and my heart is filled with hope and joy.
Last spring, my family and I went to the local park to enjoy the lovely flowers. The air was full of the sweet smell of flowers and the gentle wind was refreshing. I ran on the grass, feeling the warmth of the sun on my face. At that time, I felt truly happy and free.
This memory is special to me because it makes me think of the simple joy of life and the love of my family.
【知识点】
提纲类作文写作，记叙文时态运用，要点整合表达
【点评】
本题话题贴近学生日常生活，给出的写作提示清晰明确，不需要学生自行构思复杂的情节，只需要结合自身真实经历，把事件、感受、特殊意义三个核心要点完整覆盖，适当补充少量场景细节就能让文章流畅生动，注意规避真实个人信息、控制词数就可以拿到不错的得分。
【难度系数】
0.7
