七、书面表达。
为了号召更多的学生积极参与户外运动,强身健体,你校英语周刊以“My favourite outdoor activity”为题向同学们征稿。请你用英语写一篇短文投稿。
内容包括:
1. 你最喜欢的一项户外运动及理由;
2. 你平时如何开展这项运动(如运动时间、地点等);
3. 这项运动给你带来的变化(如身体、学习等方面);
4. 号召大家多进行户外运动。
要求:
1. 词数90左右;
2. 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
My favourite outdoor activity
为了号召更多的学生积极参与户外运动,强身健体,你校英语周刊以“My favourite outdoor activity”为题向同学们征稿。请你用英语写一篇短文投稿。
内容包括:
1. 你最喜欢的一项户外运动及理由;
2. 你平时如何开展这项运动(如运动时间、地点等);
3. 这项运动给你带来的变化(如身体、学习等方面);
4. 号召大家多进行户外运动。
要求:
1. 词数90左右;
2. 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
My favourite outdoor activity
答案
One possible version:
My favourite outdoor activity
My favourite outdoor activity is jogging. I go for a jog in the park near my home every day. I like jogging very much because it makes me happy and gives me many good things.
First, it can make me healthier and stronger. After jogging, I can sleep well at night. For example, before I started jogging, I was always tired easily. But now I have more energy all day long. Second, jogging teaches me not to give up. When I feel tired while jogging, I always tell myself to keep going. It helps me have the courage to face difficulties in my studies and life. Finally, jogging can make me full of energy again. If I am sad or worried, a good jog can make me feel better.
In short, jogging is really good for me. Outdoor activities are very important for us. Let's do outdoor activities together.
My favourite outdoor activity
My favourite outdoor activity is jogging. I go for a jog in the park near my home every day. I like jogging very much because it makes me happy and gives me many good things.
First, it can make me healthier and stronger. After jogging, I can sleep well at night. For example, before I started jogging, I was always tired easily. But now I have more energy all day long. Second, jogging teaches me not to give up. When I feel tired while jogging, I always tell myself to keep going. It helps me have the courage to face difficulties in my studies and life. Finally, jogging can make me full of energy again. If I am sad or worried, a good jog can make me feel better.
In short, jogging is really good for me. Outdoor activities are very important for us. Let's do outdoor activities together.
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道书面表达题,第一步先审题,明确写作主题是“My favourite outdoor activity”,属于向校英语周刊投稿的征文,必须覆盖题干给出的4项核心内容:点明最爱的户外运动及喜爱理由、说明日常开展该运动的时间地点等安排、介绍运动给自己身体和学习等方面带来的变化、最后号召大家多参与户外运动。第二步确定写作的基本要素:使用第一人称,以一般现在时为主要时态,词数控制在90左右,可适当补充个人经历类的细节让行文更连贯真实。第三步搭建写作框架:开篇直接点出核心运动,中间部分依次介绍日常运动安排、运动带来的多方面改变,结尾总结益处并发出号召,避免遗漏要点。
【解析】
1. 审题定位:明确文体为校园征文,核心要点不能缺失,人称用第一人称I,主时态为一般现在时,符合日常介绍类写作的时态要求。
2. 搭建行文逻辑:
① 开篇:直接点明自己最爱的户外运动是慢跑,说明日常会每天在家附近的公园慢跑,开门见山点出喜爱慢跑的核心基调。
② 主体部分:先对比运动前后的身体状态,说明慢跑让自己身体素质提升、精力更充沛、睡眠质量变好;再延伸到意志和学习层面,说明慢跑培养了自己坚持不放弃的品质,面对学习和生活里的困难更有勇气,还能舒缓负面情绪。
③ 结尾:总结慢跑对自己的诸多益处,顺势发出倡议,号召所有同学一起多参与户外运动。
3. 润色调整:保证语句通顺,语法正确,适当用连接词让行文衔接自然,最终词数符合题干要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
My favourite outdoor activity
My favourite outdoor activity is jogging. I go for a jog in the park near my home every day. I like jogging very much because it makes me happy and gives me many good things.
First, it can make me healthier and stronger. After jogging, I can sleep well at night. For example, before I started jogging, I was always tired easily. But now I have more energy all day long. Second, jogging teaches me not to give up. When I feel tired while jogging, I always tell myself to keep going. It helps me have the courage to face difficulties in my studies and life. Finally, jogging can make me full of energy again. If I am sad or worried, a good jog can make me feel better.
In short, jogging is really good for me. Outdoor activities are very important for us. Let's do outdoor activities together.
【知识点】
书面表达审题,一般现在时应用,征文写作规范
【点评】
本篇参考范文完整覆盖了题干要求的全部要点,加入了运动前后个人状态对比的细节,内容真实有说服力,行文逻辑清晰,衔接词的使用让段落层次分明,兼顾了身体状态、学习意志、情绪调节多个维度的变化,最终的号召自然不生硬,句式搭配合理,符合初中英语写作的能力要求,完全符合投稿的内容和词数要求。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先拿到这道书面表达题,第一步先审题,明确写作主题是“My favourite outdoor activity”,属于向校英语周刊投稿的征文,必须覆盖题干给出的4项核心内容:点明最爱的户外运动及喜爱理由、说明日常开展该运动的时间地点等安排、介绍运动给自己身体和学习等方面带来的变化、最后号召大家多参与户外运动。第二步确定写作的基本要素:使用第一人称,以一般现在时为主要时态,词数控制在90左右,可适当补充个人经历类的细节让行文更连贯真实。第三步搭建写作框架:开篇直接点出核心运动,中间部分依次介绍日常运动安排、运动带来的多方面改变,结尾总结益处并发出号召,避免遗漏要点。
【解析】
1. 审题定位:明确文体为校园征文,核心要点不能缺失,人称用第一人称I,主时态为一般现在时,符合日常介绍类写作的时态要求。
2. 搭建行文逻辑:
① 开篇:直接点明自己最爱的户外运动是慢跑,说明日常会每天在家附近的公园慢跑,开门见山点出喜爱慢跑的核心基调。
② 主体部分:先对比运动前后的身体状态,说明慢跑让自己身体素质提升、精力更充沛、睡眠质量变好;再延伸到意志和学习层面,说明慢跑培养了自己坚持不放弃的品质,面对学习和生活里的困难更有勇气,还能舒缓负面情绪。
③ 结尾:总结慢跑对自己的诸多益处,顺势发出倡议,号召所有同学一起多参与户外运动。
3. 润色调整:保证语句通顺,语法正确,适当用连接词让行文衔接自然,最终词数符合题干要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
My favourite outdoor activity
My favourite outdoor activity is jogging. I go for a jog in the park near my home every day. I like jogging very much because it makes me happy and gives me many good things.
First, it can make me healthier and stronger. After jogging, I can sleep well at night. For example, before I started jogging, I was always tired easily. But now I have more energy all day long. Second, jogging teaches me not to give up. When I feel tired while jogging, I always tell myself to keep going. It helps me have the courage to face difficulties in my studies and life. Finally, jogging can make me full of energy again. If I am sad or worried, a good jog can make me feel better.
In short, jogging is really good for me. Outdoor activities are very important for us. Let's do outdoor activities together.
【知识点】
书面表达审题,一般现在时应用,征文写作规范
【点评】
本篇参考范文完整覆盖了题干要求的全部要点,加入了运动前后个人状态对比的细节,内容真实有说服力,行文逻辑清晰,衔接词的使用让段落层次分明,兼顾了身体状态、学习意志、情绪调节多个维度的变化,最终的号召自然不生硬,句式搭配合理,符合初中英语写作的能力要求,完全符合投稿的内容和词数要求。
【难度系数】
0.6
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