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介绍一项你感兴趣的现代科技发明(如智能手机、共享单车、高铁等)，包括它的发明背景、发明者/团队、发明初衷、带来的变化，以及你对它的看法。
要求:内容需包含以上所有要点，可适当发挥。词数:80－120。
请你简单描述自己作品的亮点和不足：
介绍一项你感兴趣的现代科技发明(如智能手机、共享单车、高铁等)，包括它的发明背景、发明者/团队、发明初衷、带来的变化，以及你对它的看法。
要求:内容需包含以上所有要点，可适当发挥。词数:80－120。
请你简单描述自己作品的亮点和不足：
答案
One possible version:
My favourite Invention—High-speed Train
Among all the great inventions, I like the high-speed train best. It is a great Chinese invention.
It was created by Chinese scientists. It was invented to make long-distance travel faster and easier. Scientists worked hard and overcame many difficulties to make it. Now it is widely used all over China. It takes us less time to go to faraway cities. It is safe,comfortable and eco-friendly.
I think it is such a great invention. It makes our life more convenient and shows our country's strong science and technology.
My favourite Invention—High-speed Train
Among all the great inventions, I like the high-speed train best. It is a great Chinese invention.
It was created by Chinese scientists. It was invented to make long-distance travel faster and easier. Scientists worked hard and overcame many difficulties to make it. Now it is widely used all over China. It takes us less time to go to faraway cities. It is safe,comfortable and eco-friendly.
I think it is such a great invention. It makes our life more convenient and shows our country's strong science and technology.
解析
【分析】写作时首先选定要介绍的现代科技发明（如高铁），接着梳理题目要求的全部要点：发明背景（过去长途旅行耗时久、不便）、发明者/团队（中国科学家）、发明初衷（缩短长途出行时间，让出行更便捷）、带来的变化（广泛应用、节省时间、安全舒适环保）、个人看法（方便生活、体现国家科技实力）；再用恰当的连词串联内容，确保语法正确、拼写无误，控制词数在80-120之间，结构清晰。
【解析】1. 确定主题：选择高铁作为介绍对象，契合“现代科技发明”的要求；2. 依次落实所有要点：①点明高铁是中国科学家的发明；②说明发明初衷是让长途旅行更快更易；③阐述其带来的变化：广泛应用于全国，节省出行时间，兼具安全、舒适、环保的特点；④表达个人看法：认为高铁方便生活，体现国家科技实力；3. 运用合适的连词（如among, now等）使语句连贯，严格控制词数符合要求。
【答案】One possible version:
My favourite Invention—High-speed Train
Among all the great inventions, I like the high-speed train best. It is a great Chinese invention.
It was created by Chinese scientists. It was invented to make long-distance travel faster and easier. Scientists worked hard and overcame many difficulties to make it. Now it is widely used all over China. It takes us less time to go to faraway cities. It is safe,comfortable and eco-friendly.
I think it is such a great invention. It makes our life more convenient and shows our country's strong science and technology.
【知识点】英语写作、现代科技话题
【点评】该习作完整覆盖题目要求的所有要点，语言通顺流畅，结构清晰，运用了恰当的连词，符合词数要求，准确表达了对高铁的正面看法，是一篇符合要求的优秀写作。
【难度系数】0.6
【解析】1. 确定主题：选择高铁作为介绍对象，契合“现代科技发明”的要求；2. 依次落实所有要点：①点明高铁是中国科学家的发明；②说明发明初衷是让长途旅行更快更易；③阐述其带来的变化：广泛应用于全国，节省出行时间，兼具安全、舒适、环保的特点；④表达个人看法：认为高铁方便生活，体现国家科技实力；3. 运用合适的连词（如among, now等）使语句连贯，严格控制词数符合要求。
【答案】One possible version:
My favourite Invention—High-speed Train
Among all the great inventions, I like the high-speed train best. It is a great Chinese invention.
It was created by Chinese scientists. It was invented to make long-distance travel faster and easier. Scientists worked hard and overcame many difficulties to make it. Now it is widely used all over China. It takes us less time to go to faraway cities. It is safe,comfortable and eco-friendly.
I think it is such a great invention. It makes our life more convenient and shows our country's strong science and technology.
【知识点】英语写作、现代科技话题
【点评】该习作完整覆盖题目要求的所有要点，语言通顺流畅，结构清晰，运用了恰当的连词，符合词数要求，准确表达了对高铁的正面看法，是一篇符合要求的优秀写作。
【难度系数】0.6
