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第七课时 Reading for writing (5) 单元写作
典例分析
假如你是Simon，在八年级开始之际，你班将举行一次主题班会。请你根据下表内容写一篇80词左右的演讲稿，谈谈你过去的问题及如何做出改变。
| Problems | Did something to change | Changes |
| --- | --- | --- |
| • Had trouble in speaking English
• Shy; was afraid to talk; had few friends | • Practised; learned from mistakes 图1
• Joined the English corner; tried to talk with others | • Take part in English competitions
• Confident and outgoing |
【审题要领】
| 主题 | 人称 | 时态 |
| --- | --- | --- |
|
【写作框架】
列提纲
1. 开篇点题，点明自己曾经遇到的问题 → (1) I used to have trouble in...
(2) I thought... was poor.
2. 介绍自己解决问题的过程 → 图3
(1) I started practising...
(2) Instead of giving up...
(3)... learning from my mistakes.
3. 表达感悟 → I have become more confident...
【素材积累】
重点句子
开头句：1. It is important for us to face challenges in our lives. 面对生活中的挑战对我们来说是重要的。2. I had great difficulty in remembering new words in the past. 过去我记新单词有很大困难。
中间句：1. When I made mistakes, I wrote them down and analysed them carefully. 当我犯了错，我把它们写下来仔细分析。
结尾句：1. With continuous efforts, I have made great progress. 通过不断努力，我取得了很大进步。
Hi, everyone! I'm Simon. I used to have trouble in speaking English. I thought my pronunciation was poor. At the same time, I was too shy to make some friends and afraid of talking to people. To overcome these, I took action.
To improve my spoken English, I started practising in front of the mirror every day. At first, it was difficult and I made many mistakes. Instead of giving up, I kept practising and learning from my mistakes. To fight my fear of talking, I joined the English corner. There I tried my best to talk with people and made some friends.
Now I enjoy the school life more and I can even take part in English competitions. I have become more confident and more outgoing through these efforts. I have learned that by working hard and believing in ourselves, we can grow and improve. Never let fear hold us back.
典例分析
假如你是Simon，在八年级开始之际，你班将举行一次主题班会。请你根据下表内容写一篇80词左右的演讲稿，谈谈你过去的问题及如何做出改变。
| Problems | Did something to change | Changes |
| --- | --- | --- |
| • Had trouble in speaking English
• Shy; was afraid to talk; had few friends | • Practised; learned from mistakes 图1
• Joined the English corner; tried to talk with others | • Take part in English competitions
• Confident and outgoing |
【审题要领】
| 主题 | 人称 | 时态 |
| --- | --- | --- |
|
个人经历
| 图2 | 一般过去时和现在完成时
|【写作框架】
列提纲
1. 开篇点题，点明自己曾经遇到的问题 → (1) I used to have trouble in...
(2) I thought... was poor.
2. 介绍自己解决问题的过程 → 图3
(1) I started practising...
(2) Instead of giving up...
(3)... learning from my mistakes.
3. 表达感悟 → I have become more confident...
【素材积累】
重点句子
开头句：1. It is important for us to face challenges in our lives. 面对生活中的挑战对我们来说是重要的。2. I had great difficulty in remembering new words in the past. 过去我记新单词有很大困难。
中间句：1. When I made mistakes, I wrote them down and analysed them carefully. 当我犯了错，我把它们写下来仔细分析。
结尾句：1. With continuous efforts, I have made great progress. 通过不断努力，我取得了很大进步。
Hi, everyone! I'm Simon. I used to have trouble in speaking English. I thought my pronunciation was poor. At the same time, I was too shy to make some friends and afraid of talking to people. To overcome these, I took action.
To improve my spoken English, I started practising in front of the mirror every day. At first, it was difficult and I made many mistakes. Instead of giving up, I kept practising and learning from my mistakes. To fight my fear of talking, I joined the English corner. There I tried my best to talk with people and made some friends.
Now I enjoy the school life more and I can even take part in English competitions. I have become more confident and more outgoing through these efforts. I have learned that by working hard and believing in ourselves, we can grow and improve. Never let fear hold us back.
答案
【审题要领】
个人经历;第一人称;一般过去时和现在完成时
个人经历;第一人称;一般过去时和现在完成时
解析
【分析】
拿到写作题，首先审题确定核心要素：主题是“个人过去的问题及改变的成长经历”，人称用第一人称（以Simon的身份写作），时态需结合一般过去时（描述过去的问题与采取的改变行动）和现在完成时（描述当下的变化）；接着按照给定的写作框架分三步展开：开篇点明过去的问题，中间介绍解决问题的具体措施，结尾表达现在的变化与感悟；同时注意是班会演讲稿，语气要自然亲切，控制词数在80左右。
【解析】
1. 审题：明确主题为个人成长经历，人称第一人称，时态为一般过去时（过去的问题与行动）和现在完成时（现在的变化）；
2. 开篇：以班会问候语“Hi, everyone! I'm Simon.”引入，用“I used to...”引出过去的两个问题：说英语有困难、害羞怕交流没朋友；
3. 中间：分两点阐述改变的行动：一是坚持练习英语、从错误中学习，二是加入英语角尝试与人交流；
4. 结尾：说明现在的变化：变得自信外向，能参加英语竞赛，最后点明成长感悟；
5. 润色：调整语言使其符合演讲稿的口语化特点，确保词数合适。
【答案】
Hi, everyone! I'm Simon. I used to have trouble in speaking English. I thought my pronunciation was poor. At the same time, I was too shy to make some friends and afraid of talking to people. To overcome these, I took action.
To improve my spoken English, I started practising in front of the mirror every day. At first, it was difficult and I made many mistakes. Instead of giving up, I kept practising and learning from my mistakes. To fight my fear of talking, I joined the English corner. There I tried my best to talk with people and made some friends.
Now I enjoy the school life more and I can even take part in English competitions. I have become more confident and more outgoing through these efforts. I have learned that by working hard and believing in ourselves, we can grow and improve. Never let fear hold us back.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作（演讲稿）、一般过去时与现在完成时运用、个人经历类话题写作
【点评】
这篇范文紧扣写作要求，结构清晰完整，内容贴合主题，语言自然符合演讲稿的语境，展现了积极成长的主题，是一篇优秀的单元写作范例。
【难度系数】
0.3
拿到写作题，首先审题确定核心要素：主题是“个人过去的问题及改变的成长经历”，人称用第一人称（以Simon的身份写作），时态需结合一般过去时（描述过去的问题与采取的改变行动）和现在完成时（描述当下的变化）；接着按照给定的写作框架分三步展开：开篇点明过去的问题，中间介绍解决问题的具体措施，结尾表达现在的变化与感悟；同时注意是班会演讲稿，语气要自然亲切，控制词数在80左右。
【解析】
1. 审题：明确主题为个人成长经历，人称第一人称，时态为一般过去时（过去的问题与行动）和现在完成时（现在的变化）；
2. 开篇：以班会问候语“Hi, everyone! I'm Simon.”引入，用“I used to...”引出过去的两个问题：说英语有困难、害羞怕交流没朋友；
3. 中间：分两点阐述改变的行动：一是坚持练习英语、从错误中学习，二是加入英语角尝试与人交流；
4. 结尾：说明现在的变化：变得自信外向，能参加英语竞赛，最后点明成长感悟；
5. 润色：调整语言使其符合演讲稿的口语化特点，确保词数合适。
【答案】
Hi, everyone! I'm Simon. I used to have trouble in speaking English. I thought my pronunciation was poor. At the same time, I was too shy to make some friends and afraid of talking to people. To overcome these, I took action.
To improve my spoken English, I started practising in front of the mirror every day. At first, it was difficult and I made many mistakes. Instead of giving up, I kept practising and learning from my mistakes. To fight my fear of talking, I joined the English corner. There I tried my best to talk with people and made some friends.
Now I enjoy the school life more and I can even take part in English competitions. I have become more confident and more outgoing through these efforts. I have learned that by working hard and believing in ourselves, we can grow and improve. Never let fear hold us back.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作（演讲稿）、一般过去时与现在完成时运用、个人经历类话题写作
【点评】
这篇范文紧扣写作要求，结构清晰完整，内容贴合主题，语言自然符合演讲稿的语境，展现了积极成长的主题，是一篇优秀的单元写作范例。
【难度系数】
0.3
