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八、书面表达。(5 分)
今天是 Nancy 的生日,家人们都在忙碌。请根据思维导图,描述一下大家正在做的事情吧!
要求:语句通顺,书写规范,不少于5句话。
今天是 Nancy 的生日,家人们都在忙碌。请根据思维导图,描述一下大家正在做的事情吧!
要求:语句通顺,书写规范,不少于5句话。
答案
参考范文:
Hello! I'm Nancy. Today is my birthday.
My family are very busy now. My dad is
cleaning the living room. My mum is making
a big birthday cake in the kitchen. My sister
Lily is buying a present at the supermarket.
My brother David is good at drawing. He's
making a card. What about me? I'm playing
a ball with my brother Peter. I'm going to
have a birthday party this evening.
Hello! I'm Nancy. Today is my birthday.
My family are very busy now. My dad is
cleaning the living room. My mum is making
a big birthday cake in the kitchen. My sister
Lily is buying a present at the supermarket.
My brother David is good at drawing. He's
making a card. What about me? I'm playing
a ball with my brother Peter. I'm going to
have a birthday party this evening.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道题首先明确写作要求：以Nancy的视角，描述生日当天全家人正在忙碌的活动，需使用现在进行时，语句通顺且不少于5句话。接下来先梳理思维导图里的全部信息点：爸爸对应拖地打扫客厅的动作、妈妈对应制作生日蛋糕的动作、姐姐Lily对应在超市购物的动作、哥哥David对应手绘生日卡片的动作、Nancy和小弟弟Peter对应一起玩球的动作。之后搭建写作框架：开头先自我介绍点明今天是自己的生日，总起说明全家都在为生日忙碌，再按照长辈到同辈的顺序逐个介绍家人正在做的事，最后收尾表达对生日派对的期待，注意每句都符合现在进行时"主语+be动词+动词现在分词"的结构，不要遗漏信息点，保证句数达标即可。
【解析】
写作可按以下步骤完成：
1. 开篇点题：先介绍自身身份，点明今天的特殊属性，引出下文场景，写出开篇句：Hello! I'm Nancy. Today is my birthday. My family are all busy now.
2. 按顺序逐一描述每位家人的活动，全程使用现在进行时贴合场景：
① 对应爸爸拖地的画面，写出：My dad is cleaning the living room.
② 对应妈妈做蛋糕的画面，写出：My mum is making a big birthday cake in the kitchen.
③ 对应Lily在超市的画面，写出：My sister Lily is buying a present at the supermarket.
④ 对应David做卡片的画面，写出：My brother David is good at drawing. He's making a card.
⑤ 对应Nancy和Peter玩球的画面，写出：What about me? I'm playing a ball with my brother Peter.
3. 收尾补充一句对派对的期待，让短文更完整：I'm going to have a birthday party this evening.
最后通读全文，检查时态是否正确、无语法错误，所有图中信息点都覆盖，句数满足要求即可。
【答案】
参考范文:
Hello! I'm Nancy. Today is my birthday.
My family are very busy now. My dad is
cleaning the living room. My mum is making
a big birthday cake in the kitchen. My sister
Lily is buying a present at the supermarket.
My brother David is good at drawing. He's
making a card. What about me? I'm playing
a ball with my brother Peter. I'm going to
have a birthday party this evening.
【知识点】
现在进行时，情景写作
【点评】
本题是小学阶段典型的看图情景写作题，核心考查现在进行时的实际运用，难度较低，学生只需要准确提取思维导图里所有人物对应的活动信息，按照逻辑顺序串联语句，正确使用现在进行时的基础结构，保证语句通顺就可以顺利完成写作，能够帮助学生巩固时态用法，锻炼信息整合和基础书面表达能力。
【难度系数】
0.5
拿到这道题首先明确写作要求：以Nancy的视角，描述生日当天全家人正在忙碌的活动，需使用现在进行时，语句通顺且不少于5句话。接下来先梳理思维导图里的全部信息点：爸爸对应拖地打扫客厅的动作、妈妈对应制作生日蛋糕的动作、姐姐Lily对应在超市购物的动作、哥哥David对应手绘生日卡片的动作、Nancy和小弟弟Peter对应一起玩球的动作。之后搭建写作框架：开头先自我介绍点明今天是自己的生日，总起说明全家都在为生日忙碌，再按照长辈到同辈的顺序逐个介绍家人正在做的事，最后收尾表达对生日派对的期待，注意每句都符合现在进行时"主语+be动词+动词现在分词"的结构，不要遗漏信息点，保证句数达标即可。
【解析】
写作可按以下步骤完成：
1. 开篇点题：先介绍自身身份，点明今天的特殊属性，引出下文场景，写出开篇句：Hello! I'm Nancy. Today is my birthday. My family are all busy now.
2. 按顺序逐一描述每位家人的活动，全程使用现在进行时贴合场景：
① 对应爸爸拖地的画面，写出：My dad is cleaning the living room.
② 对应妈妈做蛋糕的画面，写出：My mum is making a big birthday cake in the kitchen.
③ 对应Lily在超市的画面，写出：My sister Lily is buying a present at the supermarket.
④ 对应David做卡片的画面，写出：My brother David is good at drawing. He's making a card.
⑤ 对应Nancy和Peter玩球的画面，写出：What about me? I'm playing a ball with my brother Peter.
3. 收尾补充一句对派对的期待，让短文更完整：I'm going to have a birthday party this evening.
最后通读全文，检查时态是否正确、无语法错误，所有图中信息点都覆盖，句数满足要求即可。
【答案】
参考范文:
Hello! I'm Nancy. Today is my birthday.
My family are very busy now. My dad is
cleaning the living room. My mum is making
a big birthday cake in the kitchen. My sister
Lily is buying a present at the supermarket.
My brother David is good at drawing. He's
making a card. What about me? I'm playing
a ball with my brother Peter. I'm going to
have a birthday party this evening.
【知识点】
现在进行时，情景写作
【点评】
本题是小学阶段典型的看图情景写作题，核心考查现在进行时的实际运用，难度较低，学生只需要准确提取思维导图里所有人物对应的活动信息，按照逻辑顺序串联语句，正确使用现在进行时的基础结构，保证语句通顺就可以顺利完成写作，能够帮助学生巩固时态用法，锻炼信息整合和基础书面表达能力。
【难度系数】
0.5
