九、书面表达。(5 分)
假如你是Mike,请根据思维导图,写一篇英语小短文,描述
给妈妈过生日的场景。
要求:语句通顺,书写规范,不少于5句话。

假如你是Mike,请根据思维导图,写一篇英语小短文,描述
给妈妈过生日的场景。
要求:语句通顺,书写规范,不少于5句话。
答案
It's the third of March. It's my mother's birthday. My father buys a birthday cake for her. My sister buys a new dress for her. I buy some books for her, because she likes reading. We have a party at our house. We have a big dinner. The cake is very delicious. We also sing the birthday song for my mother. And I dance with my mother. She is very happy. We all have a good time.
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道题,先明确写作身份是Mike,写作主题是妈妈的生日,第一步先梳理思维导图给出的全部写作要点:①妈妈的生日日期 ②你和家人的生日活动 ③给妈妈准备的生日礼物 ④生日当天的饮食 ⑤妈妈和全家的感受。接下来按照逻辑顺序排布内容:开篇先点明妈妈生日的具体时间,接着依次介绍家人各自准备的礼物,再描述生日当天全家的活动、吃的食物,最后收尾点明妈妈和全家都过得很愉快,保证语句通顺,句数不少于5句,覆盖所有要点即可完成写作。
【解析】
写作步骤如下:
1. 开篇点题,直接说明妈妈生日的具体日期,回应第一个要点"When is your mother's birthday?",设定具体的生日日期,开门见山。
2. 接下来依次介绍家人分别给妈妈准备的不同礼物,回应要点"What do you buy for your mother?",还可以补充小细节说明自己选礼物的原因,让内容更真实。
3. 之后描述全家举办生日派对的相关活动,回应要点"What do you and your family do?",补充符合生日场景的常见活动丰富内容。
4. 接着介绍生日当天的饮食,回应要点"What do you eat?",说明准备的餐食和生日蛋糕的相关内容。
5. 最后收尾点明妈妈非常开心,全家都度过了愉快的一天,回应最后一个要点"Does your mother have a good time?",全文使用一般现在时叙事,逻辑连贯,符合写作要求。
【答案】
It's the third of March. It's my mother's birthday. My father buys a birthday cake for her. My sister buys a new dress for her. I buy some books for her, because she likes reading. We have a party at our house. We have a big dinner. The cake is very delicious. We also sing the birthday song for my mother. And I dance with my mother. She is very happy. We all have a good time.
【知识点】
生日话题写作,一般现在时运用,情景表达
【点评】
本篇短文完整覆盖了思维导图给出的全部写作要点,叙事逻辑清晰,从点明生日时间,到介绍礼物、家庭活动、生日饮食,最后收尾点明全家的愉悦感受,语句通顺连贯,补充的细节让内容生动自然,句数远多于要求的5句,完全符合该题的得分标准。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先拿到这道题,先明确写作身份是Mike,写作主题是妈妈的生日,第一步先梳理思维导图给出的全部写作要点:①妈妈的生日日期 ②你和家人的生日活动 ③给妈妈准备的生日礼物 ④生日当天的饮食 ⑤妈妈和全家的感受。接下来按照逻辑顺序排布内容:开篇先点明妈妈生日的具体时间,接着依次介绍家人各自准备的礼物,再描述生日当天全家的活动、吃的食物,最后收尾点明妈妈和全家都过得很愉快,保证语句通顺,句数不少于5句,覆盖所有要点即可完成写作。
【解析】
写作步骤如下:
1. 开篇点题,直接说明妈妈生日的具体日期,回应第一个要点"When is your mother's birthday?",设定具体的生日日期,开门见山。
2. 接下来依次介绍家人分别给妈妈准备的不同礼物,回应要点"What do you buy for your mother?",还可以补充小细节说明自己选礼物的原因,让内容更真实。
3. 之后描述全家举办生日派对的相关活动,回应要点"What do you and your family do?",补充符合生日场景的常见活动丰富内容。
4. 接着介绍生日当天的饮食,回应要点"What do you eat?",说明准备的餐食和生日蛋糕的相关内容。
5. 最后收尾点明妈妈非常开心,全家都度过了愉快的一天,回应最后一个要点"Does your mother have a good time?",全文使用一般现在时叙事,逻辑连贯,符合写作要求。
【答案】
It's the third of March. It's my mother's birthday. My father buys a birthday cake for her. My sister buys a new dress for her. I buy some books for her, because she likes reading. We have a party at our house. We have a big dinner. The cake is very delicious. We also sing the birthday song for my mother. And I dance with my mother. She is very happy. We all have a good time.
【知识点】
生日话题写作,一般现在时运用,情景表达
【点评】
本篇短文完整覆盖了思维导图给出的全部写作要点,叙事逻辑清晰,从点明生日时间,到介绍礼物、家庭活动、生日饮食,最后收尾点明全家的愉悦感受,语句通顺连贯,补充的细节让内容生动自然,句数远多于要求的5句,完全符合该题的得分标准。
【难度系数】
0.7
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