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每个人心中都有一位英雄。他/她可能是养育我们的亲人，教导我们的老师，也可能是历史上的伟人或身边的榜样。请根据以下提示，以“My hero”为题用英语写一篇短文来介绍这位人物。
提示:1. Who is your hero? 2. What does/did he/she do? 3. Why is/was he/she your hero?
4. What can you learn from him/her?
My hero
提示:1. Who is your hero? 2. What does/did he/she do? 3. Why is/was he/she your hero?
4. What can you learn from him/her?
My hero
My hero is not a famous person, but my mother. She always cares about me.
When it is rainy, she takes an umbrella to pick me up at school. She always holds the umbrella over me, but her clothes get wet.
At home, she often cooks delicious meals for our family. She also does a great job at work. She is a writer. She writes stories for children. She makes a lot of children happy.
My mother works hard every day to make our life better. Not only does she take good care of our family, but she also brings joy to others.
I am so proud of her!
答案
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参考范文：
My hero
My hero is not a famous person, but my mother. She always cares about me.
When it is rainy, she takes an umbrella to pick me up at school. She always holds the umbrella over me, but her clothes get wet. At home, she often cooks delicious meals for our family. She also does a great job at work. She is a writer. She writes stories for children. She makes a lot of children happy.
My mother works hard every day to make our life better. Not only does she take good care of our family, but she also brings joy to others. I am so proud of her!
参考范文：
My hero
My hero is not a famous person, but my mother. She always cares about me.
When it is rainy, she takes an umbrella to pick me up at school. She always holds the umbrella over me, but her clothes get wet. At home, she often cooks delicious meals for our family. She also does a great job at work. She is a writer. She writes stories for children. She makes a lot of children happy.
My mother works hard every day to make our life better. Not only does she take good care of our family, but she also brings joy to others. I am so proud of her!
解析
【分析】首先明确写作主题为“My hero”，需紧扣提示的四个问题展开：第一步确定贴近生活的英雄人物（如范文中的母亲，易选取具体事例）；第二步围绕人物的日常行为列举具体事例（雨天撑伞接“我”、做饭、作为作家写儿童故事）；第三步说明人物成为英雄的原因（努力照顾家庭、给他人带来快乐）；最后点明从人物身上学到的品质，确保内容具体、情感真实，符合英语短文的表达逻辑。
【解析】按照提示的四个要点组织英语表达：1. 点明英雄身份（My hero is my mother, not a famous person.）；2. 列举具体事迹（雨天撑伞接“我”、做饭、当作家写儿童故事）；3. 说明成为英雄的原因（努力改善生活、兼顾家庭与他人）；4. 表达自身感受与收获（为母亲骄傲，学到努力与关爱他人），使用恰当句式（如not only...but also...）使语句流畅自然。
【答案】My hero
My hero is not a famous person, but my mother. She always cares about me.
When it is rainy, she takes an umbrella to pick me up at school. She always holds the umbrella over me, but her clothes get wet. At home, she often cooks delicious meals for our family. She also does a great job at work. She is a writer. She writes stories for children. She makes a lot of children happy.
My mother works hard every day to make our life better. Not only does she take good care of our family, but she also brings joy to others. I am so proud of her!
【知识点】英语记叙文写作、英语话题作文
【点评】本文紧扣题目要求，围绕提示的四个问题展开，内容具体充实，通过具体事例展现母亲的优秀品质，情感真挚自然，句式运用恰当，符合初中英语写作的规范要求。
【难度系数】0.6
【解析】按照提示的四个要点组织英语表达：1. 点明英雄身份（My hero is my mother, not a famous person.）；2. 列举具体事迹（雨天撑伞接“我”、做饭、当作家写儿童故事）；3. 说明成为英雄的原因（努力改善生活、兼顾家庭与他人）；4. 表达自身感受与收获（为母亲骄傲，学到努力与关爱他人），使用恰当句式（如not only...but also...）使语句流畅自然。
【答案】My hero
My hero is not a famous person, but my mother. She always cares about me.
When it is rainy, she takes an umbrella to pick me up at school. She always holds the umbrella over me, but her clothes get wet. At home, she often cooks delicious meals for our family. She also does a great job at work. She is a writer. She writes stories for children. She makes a lot of children happy.
My mother works hard every day to make our life better. Not only does she take good care of our family, but she also brings joy to others. I am so proud of her!
【知识点】英语记叙文写作、英语话题作文
【点评】本文紧扣题目要求，围绕提示的四个问题展开，内容具体充实，通过具体事例展现母亲的优秀品质，情感真挚自然，句式运用恰当，符合初中英语写作的规范要求。
【难度系数】0.6
