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暑假就要到了，老师和同学们都在谈论自己的暑假计划。来自英国的 Ben 将乘飞机回到伦敦，他将在那儿待两个月。Lucy 和 Lily 将去上海看望她们的祖父母，她们还将游览外滩和上海博物馆。Mrs Black 将带她的儿子 Jack 去香港的迪士尼乐园和海洋公园。试着介绍他们的计划。
答案
My classmates' and teacher's summer plans
The summer holiday is coming. All the teachers and students are talking about their summer plans.
Ben is from the UK. He will go back to London by plane, and he will stay there for two months.
Lucy and Lily will go to Shanghai to visit their grandparents. They will also visit the Bund and the Shanghai Museum.
Mrs Black will take her son Jack to visit Disneyland and Ocean Park in Hong Kong.
All of them will have a great and happy summer holiday.
The summer holiday is coming. All the teachers and students are talking about their summer plans.
Ben is from the UK. He will go back to London by plane, and he will stay there for two months.
Lucy and Lily will go to Shanghai to visit their grandparents. They will also visit the Bund and the Shanghai Museum.
Mrs Black will take her son Jack to visit Disneyland and Ocean Park in Hong Kong.
All of them will have a great and happy summer holiday.
解析
这是一篇围绕暑假计划展开的英语话题写作，贴合译林版六年级下册一般将来时的单元核心知识点，写作注意要点如下：
1. 开篇总起，点明暑假即将到来，大家都在讨论各自的假期计划，开门见山引入主题；
2. 全文统一使用本单元核心的一般将来时结构"will+动词原形"描述还未发生的计划，保持时态一致；
3. 按照题干给出的人物顺序逐一介绍计划，完整覆盖所有关键信息，不要遗漏内容点；
4. 最后补充简单收尾表达大家会拥有愉快的假期，让短文结构更完整，全部选用六年级已学的基础词汇即可，无需使用超纲表达。
1. 开篇总起，点明暑假即将到来，大家都在讨论各自的假期计划，开门见山引入主题；
2. 全文统一使用本单元核心的一般将来时结构"will+动词原形"描述还未发生的计划，保持时态一致；
3. 按照题干给出的人物顺序逐一介绍计划，完整覆盖所有关键信息，不要遗漏内容点；
4. 最后补充简单收尾表达大家会拥有愉快的假期，让短文结构更完整，全部选用六年级已学的基础词汇即可，无需使用超纲表达。
小学最后一个暑假即将来临，你计划怎样度过有意义的假期呢？请以“My summer holiday plan”为题，根据思维导图提示写一篇英语短文，介绍你的暑假计划。要求：1. 包含导图上的要点，可适当发挥；2. 意思连贯，语句通顺，语法正确；3. 不少于 60 词。
My summer holiday plan
My summer holiday plan
The summer holiday is coming. I will stay in my city. First, I will have a healthy diet. I will eat a lot of fruit and vegetables. I will eat some meat and fish too. I will not eat much sweet food because it's bad for my teeth. Second, I will do some sport to keep healthy and strong. I like skipping and running. Third, I will read more books because reading is fun. Finally, I will visit my grandparents with my brother. I will help them do housework. I think I will have a wonderful summer holiday.
答案
写作方法提优
My summer holiday plan
The summer holiday is coming. I will stay in my city. First, I will have a healthy diet. I will eat a lot of fruit and vegetables. I will eat some meat and fish too. I will not eat much sweet food because it's bad for my teeth. Second, I will do some sport to keep healthy and strong. I like skipping and running. Third, I will read more books because reading is fun. Finally, I will visit my grandparents with my brother. I will help them do housework. I think I will have a wonderful summer holiday.
My summer holiday plan
The summer holiday is coming. I will stay in my city. First, I will have a healthy diet. I will eat a lot of fruit and vegetables. I will eat some meat and fish too. I will not eat much sweet food because it's bad for my teeth. Second, I will do some sport to keep healthy and strong. I like skipping and running. Third, I will read more books because reading is fun. Finally, I will visit my grandparents with my brother. I will help them do housework. I think I will have a wonderful summer holiday.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道题首先先明确写作要求：主题是介绍自己的暑假计划，需要覆盖思维导图给出的所有要点：假期的地点（Where）、饮食安排（Diet）、要做的事里的学习（Study）、运动（Sport），剩余的省略号部分可以自主补充符合暑假场景的合理活动。首先确定文体是计划类短文，人称用第一人称I，核心时态用一般将来时（will+动词原形）来描述还没发生的计划。接下来梳理行文逻辑：开头先引出暑假即将到来的背景，然后依次介绍自己的假期安排：先说明假期打算待的地点，接着讲自己的健康饮食计划，之后介绍运动安排，再讲学习相关的安排，最后补充其他的特色活动，结尾表达自己对这个暑假的期待，这样所有要点都能覆盖，逻辑也通顺，很容易达到不少于60词的要求。
【解析】
1. 审题梳理核心要素：
文体：计划类英语短文
人称：第一人称
时态：以一般将来时为主
必写要点：① 假期停留的地点 ② 健康饮食计划 ③ 运动安排 ④ 学习相关安排 ⑤ 补充1-2项其他假期活动
2. 搭建行文框架：
开头：点明暑假即将到来，引出下文的计划介绍
主体：按顺序依次介绍饮食、运动、学习、其他活动的安排，把思维导图的所有要点全部融入内容中
结尾：表达对假期的美好期待
3. 串联语句，检查语法和字数，确保语句连贯，没有语法错误，总词数超过60词。
【答案】
My summer holiday plan
The summer holiday is coming. I will stay in my city. First, I will have a healthy diet. I will eat a lot of fruit and vegetables. I will eat some meat and fish too. I will not eat much sweet food because it's bad for my teeth. Second, I will do some sport to keep healthy and strong. I like skipping and running. Third, I will read more books because reading is fun. Finally, I will visit my grandparents with my brother. I will help them do housework. I think I will have a wonderful summer holiday.
【知识点】
1. 一般将来时
2. 英语提纲写作
3. 假期话题表达
【点评】
本题是小学阶段常见的话题写作题，借助思维导图给学生明确了写作的核心方向，降低了写作的构思难度，既考察学生对一般将来时的掌握运用能力，也引导学生学会有条理地规划假期生活，学生只要覆盖全部提示要点、语句通顺符合语法要求即可拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道题首先先明确写作要求：主题是介绍自己的暑假计划，需要覆盖思维导图给出的所有要点：假期的地点（Where）、饮食安排（Diet）、要做的事里的学习（Study）、运动（Sport），剩余的省略号部分可以自主补充符合暑假场景的合理活动。首先确定文体是计划类短文，人称用第一人称I，核心时态用一般将来时（will+动词原形）来描述还没发生的计划。接下来梳理行文逻辑：开头先引出暑假即将到来的背景，然后依次介绍自己的假期安排：先说明假期打算待的地点，接着讲自己的健康饮食计划，之后介绍运动安排，再讲学习相关的安排，最后补充其他的特色活动，结尾表达自己对这个暑假的期待，这样所有要点都能覆盖，逻辑也通顺，很容易达到不少于60词的要求。
【解析】
1. 审题梳理核心要素：
文体：计划类英语短文
人称：第一人称
时态：以一般将来时为主
必写要点：① 假期停留的地点 ② 健康饮食计划 ③ 运动安排 ④ 学习相关安排 ⑤ 补充1-2项其他假期活动
2. 搭建行文框架：
开头：点明暑假即将到来，引出下文的计划介绍
主体：按顺序依次介绍饮食、运动、学习、其他活动的安排，把思维导图的所有要点全部融入内容中
结尾：表达对假期的美好期待
3. 串联语句，检查语法和字数，确保语句连贯，没有语法错误，总词数超过60词。
【答案】
My summer holiday plan
The summer holiday is coming. I will stay in my city. First, I will have a healthy diet. I will eat a lot of fruit and vegetables. I will eat some meat and fish too. I will not eat much sweet food because it's bad for my teeth. Second, I will do some sport to keep healthy and strong. I like skipping and running. Third, I will read more books because reading is fun. Finally, I will visit my grandparents with my brother. I will help them do housework. I think I will have a wonderful summer holiday.
【知识点】
1. 一般将来时
2. 英语提纲写作
3. 假期话题表达
【点评】
本题是小学阶段常见的话题写作题，借助思维导图给学生明确了写作的核心方向，降低了写作的构思难度，既考察学生对一般将来时的掌握运用能力，也引导学生学会有条理地规划假期生活，学生只要覆盖全部提示要点、语句通顺符合语法要求即可拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.6
