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写作实战 答案（含基础版范文和进阶版范文）D4
假如你是阳光中学的一名新生，经过一周的学习，你交到了一个名叫李娜的好朋友，她的英文名叫Anna。现在Teens杂志正在举办征文活动。请根据以下提示，以“My Friend Anna”为题，用英语写一篇短文投稿。
要求:(1)短文应包含思维导图中的全部内容,可适当发挥；
(2)词数不少于80,开头已给出,不计入总词数。
My Friend Anna
This is my new friend Anna. I am glad to tell you something about her.
假如你是阳光中学的一名新生，经过一周的学习，你交到了一个名叫李娜的好朋友，她的英文名叫Anna。现在Teens杂志正在举办征文活动。请根据以下提示，以“My Friend Anna”为题，用英语写一篇短文投稿。
要求:(1)短文应包含思维导图中的全部内容,可适当发挥；
(2)词数不少于80,开头已给出,不计入总词数。
My Friend Anna
This is my new friend Anna. I am glad to tell you something about her.
Her Chinese name is Li Na. She is 13 years old, the same age as me. We are both in Class 5, Grade 7 at Sunshine Middle School. Anna looks very kind. She has big eyes and long black hair. She always wears a warm smile.
Anna is quiet but very friendly. She likes reading books and drawing pictures. Her drawings are really beautiful. In class, she listens carefully and often helps others.
I think Anna is a wonderful friend. She is helpful and patient. When I have problems, she is always there for me. I am very happy to have such a good friend. I hope our friendship lasts forever.
答案
主题写作专项
基础版范文
My Friend Anna
This is my new friend Anna. I am glad to tell you something about her.
Her Chinese name is Li Na. She is 13 years old, the same age as me. We are both in Class 5, Grade 7 at Sunshine Middle School. Anna looks very kind. She has big eyes and long black hair. She always wears a warm smile.
Anna is quiet but very friendly. She likes reading books and drawing pictures. Her drawings are really beautiful. In class, she listens carefully and often helps others.
I think Anna is a wonderful friend. She is helpful and patient. When I have problems, she is always there for me. I am very happy to have such a good friend. I hope our friendship lasts forever.
进阶版范文
My Friend Anna
This is my new friend Anna. I am glad to tell you something about her.
Anna, whose Chinese name is Li Na, is a 13-year-old girl in Class 5, Grade 7. With her bright eyes and long black hair often tied in a ponytail, she gives others a neat and lively impression.
Not only is she pleasant in appearance, but she also has a heart of gold. She is a thoughtful and gentle person, always ready to lend a hand. Her hobbies include reading, which broadens her mind, and sketching, at which she shows great talent.
What I admire most about Anna is her positive attitude. She faces challenges with a smile and encourages everyone around her. In my eyes, she is not just a friend but also a role model. I feel fortunate to meet her and believe our friendship will grow stronger day by day.
基础版范文
My Friend Anna
This is my new friend Anna. I am glad to tell you something about her.
Her Chinese name is Li Na. She is 13 years old, the same age as me. We are both in Class 5, Grade 7 at Sunshine Middle School. Anna looks very kind. She has big eyes and long black hair. She always wears a warm smile.
Anna is quiet but very friendly. She likes reading books and drawing pictures. Her drawings are really beautiful. In class, she listens carefully and often helps others.
I think Anna is a wonderful friend. She is helpful and patient. When I have problems, she is always there for me. I am very happy to have such a good friend. I hope our friendship lasts forever.
进阶版范文
My Friend Anna
This is my new friend Anna. I am glad to tell you something about her.
Anna, whose Chinese name is Li Na, is a 13-year-old girl in Class 5, Grade 7. With her bright eyes and long black hair often tied in a ponytail, she gives others a neat and lively impression.
Not only is she pleasant in appearance, but she also has a heart of gold. She is a thoughtful and gentle person, always ready to lend a hand. Her hobbies include reading, which broadens her mind, and sketching, at which she shows great talent.
What I admire most about Anna is her positive attitude. She faces challenges with a smile and encourages everyone around her. In my eyes, she is not just a friend but also a role model. I feel fortunate to meet her and believe our friendship will grow stronger day by day.
解析
【分析】首先明确写作任务：以“My Friend Anna”为题，需覆盖思维导图的全部要点（年龄、班级年级、外貌、爱好、性格、对她的看法），结合给定开头完成一篇不少于80词的英语短文。解题思路：1. 梳理思维导图的6个核心要点，确保无遗漏；2. 按“基本信息→外貌→爱好→性格→个人看法”的逻辑组织内容；3. 适当添加细节让文章流畅自然，符合英语表达习惯；4. 注意时态（一般现在时）和词数要求。
【解析】写作时，先承接开头介绍Anna的基本信息：年龄（如13岁）、所在班级年级（阳光中学七年级五班）；接着描写外貌：大眼睛、长黑发，常带微笑；然后写爱好：读书、画画；再写性格：安静但友好，乐于助人；最后表达个人看法：她是很棒的朋友，希望友谊长久。确保所有要点都包含，语句通顺，符合初中英语写作规范。
【答案】My Friend Anna
This is my new friend Anna. I am glad to tell you something about her.
Her Chinese name is Li Na. She is 13 years old, the same age as me. We are both in Class 5, Grade 7 at Sunshine Middle School. Anna looks very kind. She has big eyes and long black hair. She always wears a warm smile.
Anna is quiet but very friendly. She likes reading books and drawing pictures. Her drawings are really beautiful. In class, she listens carefully and often helps others.
I think Anna is a wonderful friend. She is helpful and patient. When I have problems, she is always there for me. I am very happy to have such a good friend. I hope our friendship lasts forever.
【知识点】英语写作、要点整合、记叙文写作
【点评】本题是要点式英语写作题，要求结合思维导图信息创作，既考察信息梳理整合能力，又考察英语语言组织表达能力，贴近学生生活，是初中英语写作常见题型。
【难度系数】0.6
【解析】写作时，先承接开头介绍Anna的基本信息：年龄（如13岁）、所在班级年级（阳光中学七年级五班）；接着描写外貌：大眼睛、长黑发，常带微笑；然后写爱好：读书、画画；再写性格：安静但友好，乐于助人；最后表达个人看法：她是很棒的朋友，希望友谊长久。确保所有要点都包含，语句通顺，符合初中英语写作规范。
【答案】My Friend Anna
This is my new friend Anna. I am glad to tell you something about her.
Her Chinese name is Li Na. She is 13 years old, the same age as me. We are both in Class 5, Grade 7 at Sunshine Middle School. Anna looks very kind. She has big eyes and long black hair. She always wears a warm smile.
Anna is quiet but very friendly. She likes reading books and drawing pictures. Her drawings are really beautiful. In class, she listens carefully and often helps others.
I think Anna is a wonderful friend. She is helpful and patient. When I have problems, she is always there for me. I am very happy to have such a good friend. I hope our friendship lasts forever.
【知识点】英语写作、要点整合、记叙文写作
【点评】本题是要点式英语写作题，要求结合思维导图信息创作，既考察信息梳理整合能力，又考察英语语言组织表达能力，贴近学生生活，是初中英语写作常见题型。
【难度系数】0.6
