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2018年深秋，云南昭通发生地震，17岁的林小雨在这场地震中失去了右臂，这对正在准备美术艺考的她来说无疑是致命的打击，但她的朋友以“破碎但依然绽放花朵的植物”鼓励她，消防员告诉她“即使翅膀(wing)折断、凭借着风还是能够飞翔”。在他们的帮助下，小雨重振信心，练习用左手画画，现在她成了一名画家，并为家乡建设贡献自己的力量。请你以“A heartwarming story”为题，写一篇短文。
写作要求:75词左右,行文连贯,可适当发挥,文中不得出现真实校名、人名。
A heart-warming story
2018年深秋，云南昭通发生地震，17岁的林小雨在这场地震中失去了右臂，这对正在准备美术艺考的她来说无疑是致命的打击，但她的朋友以“破碎但依然绽放花朵的植物”鼓励她，消防员告诉她“即使翅膀(wing)折断、凭借着风还是能够飞翔”。在他们的帮助下，小雨重振信心，练习用左手画画，现在她成了一名画家，并为家乡建设贡献自己的力量。请你以“A heartwarming story”为题，写一篇短文。
写作要求:75词左右,行文连贯,可适当发挥,文中不得出现真实校名、人名。
A heart-warming story
In 2018, a terrible earthquake hit Zhaotong, Yunnan. Lin Xiaoyu, a 17-year-old girl, lost her right arm in the earthquake. She felt hopeless because she liked drawing and dreamed of being an artist.
Her friends always came to cheer her up. One of them brought her a broken plant. After seeing the broken plant with flowers, Lin felt greatly encouraged.
A firefighter wrote her a sentence: "Broken wings can still fly with the wind." With their help, Lin decided to learn to draw with her left hand.
Today, Lin is an artist.
Her pictures of hope are famous online.
She even uses her money to help build a school for her hometown.
答案
Possible version:
A heart-warming story
In 2018, a terrible earthquake hit Zhaotong, Yunnan. Lin Xiaoyu, a 17-year-old girl, lost her right arm in the earthquake. She felt hopeless because she liked drawing and dreamed of being an artist.
Her friends always came to cheer her up. One of them brought her a broken plant. After seeing the broken plant with flowers, Lin felt greatly encouraged. A firefighter wrote her a sentence: "Broken wings can still fly with the wind." With their help, Lin decided to learn to draw with her left hand.
Today, Lin is an artist. Her pictures of hope are famous online. She even uses her money to help build a school for her hometown.
A heart-warming story
In 2018, a terrible earthquake hit Zhaotong, Yunnan. Lin Xiaoyu, a 17-year-old girl, lost her right arm in the earthquake. She felt hopeless because she liked drawing and dreamed of being an artist.
Her friends always came to cheer her up. One of them brought her a broken plant. After seeing the broken plant with flowers, Lin felt greatly encouraged. A firefighter wrote her a sentence: "Broken wings can still fly with the wind." With their help, Lin decided to learn to draw with her left hand.
Today, Lin is an artist. Her pictures of hope are famous online. She even uses her money to help build a school for her hometown.
解析
【分析】
首先明确题目要求：以“A heart-warming story”为题写75词左右的短文，行文连贯，不得出现真实人名、校名。接着梳理给定核心信息：2018年云南昭通地震，17岁女孩失去右臂（原本想当艺术家），朋友用破碎但开花的植物鼓励，消防员说断翅也能飞，她练左手画画，如今成艺术家并为家乡建学校。写作时按“事件起因→鼓励与转变→现在成就”的顺序组织，过去事件用一般过去时，现在情况用一般现在时，用连接词让逻辑连贯，控制词数。
【解析】
1. 开头：点明2018年云南昭通地震，女孩失去右臂，因热爱画画、梦想成为艺术家而绝望；2. 中间：叙述朋友送破碎开花的植物鼓励她，消防员的话点醒她，她决定练左手画画；3. 结尾：写现在她成为艺术家，用自己的钱为家乡建学校。全程用简单连接词（如with their help, today）衔接，确保行文连贯，词数符合要求。
【答案】
Possible version:
A heart-warming story
In 2018, a terrible earthquake hit Zhaotong, Yunnan. Lin Xiaoyu, a 17-year-old girl, lost her right arm in the earthquake. She felt hopeless because she liked drawing and dreamed of being an artist.
Her friends always came to cheer her up. One of them brought her a broken plant. After seeing the broken plant with flowers, Lin felt greatly encouraged. A firefighter wrote her a sentence: "Broken wings can still fly with the wind." With their help, Lin decided to learn to draw with her left hand.
Today, Lin is an artist. Her pictures of hope are famous online. She even uses her money to help build a school for her hometown.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，时态运用，语篇连贯
【点评】
本文紧扣“暖心故事”主题，完整叙述了女孩从遭遇不幸到重拾希望、实现自我价值的过程，情感真挚，语言流畅，符合写作要求，传递了积极向上的正能量。
【难度系数】
0.3
首先明确题目要求：以“A heart-warming story”为题写75词左右的短文，行文连贯，不得出现真实人名、校名。接着梳理给定核心信息：2018年云南昭通地震，17岁女孩失去右臂（原本想当艺术家），朋友用破碎但开花的植物鼓励，消防员说断翅也能飞，她练左手画画，如今成艺术家并为家乡建学校。写作时按“事件起因→鼓励与转变→现在成就”的顺序组织，过去事件用一般过去时，现在情况用一般现在时，用连接词让逻辑连贯，控制词数。
【解析】
1. 开头：点明2018年云南昭通地震，女孩失去右臂，因热爱画画、梦想成为艺术家而绝望；2. 中间：叙述朋友送破碎开花的植物鼓励她，消防员的话点醒她，她决定练左手画画；3. 结尾：写现在她成为艺术家，用自己的钱为家乡建学校。全程用简单连接词（如with their help, today）衔接，确保行文连贯，词数符合要求。
【答案】
Possible version:
A heart-warming story
In 2018, a terrible earthquake hit Zhaotong, Yunnan. Lin Xiaoyu, a 17-year-old girl, lost her right arm in the earthquake. She felt hopeless because she liked drawing and dreamed of being an artist.
Her friends always came to cheer her up. One of them brought her a broken plant. After seeing the broken plant with flowers, Lin felt greatly encouraged. A firefighter wrote her a sentence: "Broken wings can still fly with the wind." With their help, Lin decided to learn to draw with her left hand.
Today, Lin is an artist. Her pictures of hope are famous online. She even uses her money to help build a school for her hometown.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，时态运用，语篇连贯
【点评】
本文紧扣“暖心故事”主题，完整叙述了女孩从遭遇不幸到重拾希望、实现自我价值的过程，情感真挚，语言流畅，符合写作要求，传递了积极向上的正能量。
【难度系数】
0.3
