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你校英语报正在举行征文比赛,主题是介绍北京令人惊叹的景点。以"Amazing Beijing"为题,写一篇英语短文参赛,词数不少于90。内容包含以下要点:
1. the Great Wall: a big Chinese loong, enjoy the natural beauty, ...
2. the Palace Museum: see so many beautiful works, ...
3. the Summer Palace: beautiful, go boating on Kunming Lake, relaxed
Amazing Beijing
你校英语报正在举行征文比赛,主题是介绍北京令人惊叹的景点。以"Amazing Beijing"为题,写一篇英语短文参赛,词数不少于90。内容包含以下要点:
1. the Great Wall: a big Chinese loong, enjoy the natural beauty, ...
2. the Palace Museum: see so many beautiful works, ...
3. the Summer Palace: beautiful, go boating on Kunming Lake, relaxed
Amazing Beijing
One possible version:
Amazing Beijing
Beijing is an amazing city with many great places. Today I will introduce three famous places.
The Great Wall is wonderful. It is long and great. It's like a big Chinese loong on the mountains. Climbing it, you can enjoy the natural beauty and feel its history.
The Palace Museum is cool too. It has many old, beautiful buildings. You can also see so many beautiful works that you have never seen before.
The Summer Palace is a lovely garden. It's great to walk around and enjoy the view. There are many beautiful flowers
and trees and green lawns. You can play happily on the lawn.
→there be句型遵循"就近"原则,be动词的形式由离它最近的名词(短语)的数决定。
You can go boating on Kunming Lake. By travelling, you maybe feel happy and relaxed.
Beijing's history and beauty make it really amazing!
Amazing Beijing
Beijing is an amazing city with many great places. Today I will introduce three famous places.
The Great Wall is wonderful. It is long and great. It's like a big Chinese loong on the mountains. Climbing it, you can enjoy the natural beauty and feel its history.
The Palace Museum is cool too. It has many old, beautiful buildings. You can also see so many beautiful works that you have never seen before.
The Summer Palace is a lovely garden. It's great to walk around and enjoy the view. There are many beautiful flowers
and trees and green lawns. You can play happily on the lawn.
→there be句型遵循"就近"原则,be动词的形式由离它最近的名词(短语)的数决定。
You can go boating on Kunming Lake. By travelling, you maybe feel happy and relaxed.
Beijing's history and beauty make it really amazing!
答案
One possible version:
Amazing Beijing
Beijing is an amazing city with many great places. Today I will introduce three famous places.
The Great Wall is wonderful. It is long and great. It's like a big Chinese loong on the mountains. Climbing it, you can enjoy the natural beauty and feel its history.
The Palace Museum is cool too. It has many old, beautiful buildings. You can also see so many beautiful works that you have never seen before.
The Summer Palace is a lovely garden. It's great to walk around and enjoy the view. There are many beautiful flowers
and trees and green lawns. You can play happily on the lawn.
→there be句型遵循"就近"原则,be动词的形式由离它最近的名词(短语)的数决定。
You can go boating on Kunming Lake. By travelling, you maybe feel happy and relaxed.
Beijing's history and beauty make it really amazing!
思路引导 [总体分析]
①题材:本文是一篇材料作文。②时态:以一般现在时为主。③提示:所给内容不得遗漏,可适当发挥,语义通顺,无拼写和语法错误。
[写作步骤]
第一步,介绍北京令人惊叹的三个地方;第二步,详细介绍这三个地方的特色以及可以进行的活动;第三步,总结北京令人惊叹的原因。
[亮点词汇]
①an amazing city with many great places一个有诸多好处的令人惊叹的城市 ②feel happy and relaxed感到快乐且放松 ③make it really amazing让它令人叹为观止
[高分句型]
①Climbing it, you can enjoy the natural beauty and feel its history.
②You can also see so many beautiful works that you have never seen before.
③It's great to walk around and enjoy the view.
Amazing Beijing
Beijing is an amazing city with many great places. Today I will introduce three famous places.
The Great Wall is wonderful. It is long and great. It's like a big Chinese loong on the mountains. Climbing it, you can enjoy the natural beauty and feel its history.
The Palace Museum is cool too. It has many old, beautiful buildings. You can also see so many beautiful works that you have never seen before.
The Summer Palace is a lovely garden. It's great to walk around and enjoy the view. There are many beautiful flowers
and trees and green lawns. You can play happily on the lawn.
→there be句型遵循"就近"原则,be动词的形式由离它最近的名词(短语)的数决定。
You can go boating on Kunming Lake. By travelling, you maybe feel happy and relaxed.
Beijing's history and beauty make it really amazing!
思路引导 [总体分析]
①题材:本文是一篇材料作文。②时态:以一般现在时为主。③提示:所给内容不得遗漏,可适当发挥,语义通顺,无拼写和语法错误。
[写作步骤]
第一步,介绍北京令人惊叹的三个地方;第二步,详细介绍这三个地方的特色以及可以进行的活动;第三步,总结北京令人惊叹的原因。
[亮点词汇]
①an amazing city with many great places一个有诸多好处的令人惊叹的城市 ②feel happy and relaxed感到快乐且放松 ③make it really amazing让它令人叹为观止
[高分句型]
①Climbing it, you can enjoy the natural beauty and feel its history.
②You can also see so many beautiful works that you have never seen before.
③It's great to walk around and enjoy the view.
解析
【分析】
本题为英语材料征文，主题是介绍北京令人惊叹的景点。解题思路需采用“总-分-总”结构：第一步开篇总起，点明北京是令人惊叹的城市，引出要介绍的三个核心景点；第二步分述景点，分别围绕长城（形似中国巨龙、可欣赏自然美）、故宫（有众多精美作品）、颐和园（景色优美、可在昆明湖划船、让人放松）三个给定要点展开，可适当补充细节丰富内容；第三步结尾总结，呼应主题，点明北京的历史与美景使其令人惊叹。写作时以一般现在时为主，确保语义通顺、无语法错误，词数达标。
【解析】
按照以下步骤完成写作：
1. 开篇：点明北京是令人惊叹的城市，引出要介绍的三个著名景点。
2. 分述景点：
长城：描述其形态如中国巨龙，说明攀爬时可欣赏自然美、感受历史底蕴；
故宫：介绍其拥有众多古老建筑和从未见过的精美作品；
颐和园：描述其景色优美，提及可在昆明湖划船，漫步其中能放松身心，补充花草树木等细节。
3. 结尾：总结北京的历史与美景使其令人惊叹，呼应主题。
写作中运用亮点词汇与高分句型，确保符合征文要求。
【答案】
Amazing Beijing
Beijing is an amazing city with many great places. Today I will introduce three famous places.
The Great Wall is wonderful. It is long and great. It's like a big Chinese loong on the mountains. Climbing it, you can enjoy the natural beauty and feel its history.
The Palace Museum is cool too. It has many old, beautiful buildings. You can also see so many beautiful works that you have never seen before.
The Summer Palace is a lovely garden. It's great to walk around and enjoy the view. There are many beautiful flowers and trees and green lawns. You can play happily on the lawn. You can go boating on Kunming Lake. By travelling, you maybe feel happy and relaxed.
Beijing's history and beauty make it really amazing!
【知识点】
英语材料作文写作、一般现在时运用、英语常用句型
【点评】
本文紧扣征文主题，完整覆盖所有给定要点，采用“总-分-总”结构，逻辑清晰；语言流畅自然，运用了亮点词汇与高分句型，符合书面表达的参赛要求，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
本题为英语材料征文，主题是介绍北京令人惊叹的景点。解题思路需采用“总-分-总”结构：第一步开篇总起，点明北京是令人惊叹的城市，引出要介绍的三个核心景点；第二步分述景点，分别围绕长城（形似中国巨龙、可欣赏自然美）、故宫（有众多精美作品）、颐和园（景色优美、可在昆明湖划船、让人放松）三个给定要点展开，可适当补充细节丰富内容；第三步结尾总结，呼应主题，点明北京的历史与美景使其令人惊叹。写作时以一般现在时为主，确保语义通顺、无语法错误，词数达标。
【解析】
按照以下步骤完成写作：
1. 开篇：点明北京是令人惊叹的城市，引出要介绍的三个著名景点。
2. 分述景点：
长城：描述其形态如中国巨龙，说明攀爬时可欣赏自然美、感受历史底蕴；
故宫：介绍其拥有众多古老建筑和从未见过的精美作品；
颐和园：描述其景色优美，提及可在昆明湖划船，漫步其中能放松身心，补充花草树木等细节。
3. 结尾：总结北京的历史与美景使其令人惊叹，呼应主题。
写作中运用亮点词汇与高分句型，确保符合征文要求。
【答案】
Amazing Beijing
Beijing is an amazing city with many great places. Today I will introduce three famous places.
The Great Wall is wonderful. It is long and great. It's like a big Chinese loong on the mountains. Climbing it, you can enjoy the natural beauty and feel its history.
The Palace Museum is cool too. It has many old, beautiful buildings. You can also see so many beautiful works that you have never seen before.
The Summer Palace is a lovely garden. It's great to walk around and enjoy the view. There are many beautiful flowers and trees and green lawns. You can play happily on the lawn. You can go boating on Kunming Lake. By travelling, you maybe feel happy and relaxed.
Beijing's history and beauty make it really amazing!
【知识点】
英语材料作文写作、一般现在时运用、英语常用句型
【点评】
本文紧扣征文主题，完整覆盖所有给定要点，采用“总-分-总”结构，逻辑清晰；语言流畅自然，运用了亮点词汇与高分句型，符合书面表达的参赛要求，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
