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请根据下列提示用英语写一篇短文，叙述事情的经过并谈谈自己的感受。
提示:1. 爸爸的生日快到了，我决定在书房帮他安装一个书架，因为……2. 我在网上订购了材料；我的好友弗兰克擅长 DIY 且乐于助人，他带了些工具来帮我；我们先……然后……我们只花了一小时就完成了任务。3. 弗兰克教会我如何正确使用工具；我们合作愉快；最终把书架漆成了蓝色。4. 我认为……
要求:1. 短文中必须包含所给要点，可以适当发挥。2. 词数不少于 80。
[思路点拨] 1. 文体:记叙文。2. 时态:以一般过去时为主。3. 人称:第一、三人称。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
实战练笔，夯实写作功底
请根据下列提示用英语写一篇短文，叙述事情的经过并谈谈自己的感受。
提示:1. 爸爸的生日快到了，我决定在书房帮他安装一个书架，因为……2. 我在网上订购了材料；我的好友弗兰克擅长 DIY 且乐于助人，他带了些工具来帮我；我们先……然后……我们只花了一小时就完成了任务。3. 弗兰克教会我如何正确使用工具；我们合作愉快；最终把书架漆成了蓝色。4. 我认为……
要求:1. 短文中必须包含所给要点，可以适当发挥。2. 词数不少于 80。
[思路点拨] 1. 文体:记叙文。2. 时态:以一般过去时为主。3. 人称:第一、三人称。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
My father's birthday is coming. I decided to put in a shelf on the wall of the study for him because he likes reading.
I ordered some materials on the Internet. My friend Frank is good at DIY and he is helpful. He brought some tools and helped me with the work.
We read the instructions first and then started working quickly. It took us only an hour to finish.
I made some mistakes while working. Frank taught me how to use the tools properly.
We had fun working together. At last, we painted the shelf blue.
This is the first birthday present I have made for Dad.
I hope my dad will like the present.
答案
One possible version:
My father's birthday is coming. I decided to put in a shelf on the wall of the study for him because he likes reading.
I ordered some materials on the Internet. My friend Frank is good at DIY and he is helpful. He brought some tools and helped me with the work. We read the instructions first and then started working quickly. It took us only an hour to finish.
I made some mistakes while working. Frank taught me how to use the tools properly. We had fun working together. At last, we painted the shelf blue.
This is the first birthday present I have made for Dad. I hope my dad will like the present.
My father's birthday is coming. I decided to put in a shelf on the wall of the study for him because he likes reading.
I ordered some materials on the Internet. My friend Frank is good at DIY and he is helpful. He brought some tools and helped me with the work. We read the instructions first and then started working quickly. It took us only an hour to finish.
I made some mistakes while working. Frank taught me how to use the tools properly. We had fun working together. At last, we painted the shelf blue.
This is the first birthday present I have made for Dad. I hope my dad will like the present.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题，首先明确文体是叙事类记叙文，核心主题是记录自己为父亲生日DIY书架的经历。先把题干给出的所有提示要点逐一梳理，按照思维导图的叙事逻辑排布内容：首先开篇交代背景，说明父亲生日即将到来，解释自己想要在书房为他安装书架的合理原因；接着按照事件发展的先后顺序，先写自己网购制作书架的材料，再引出擅长DIY的好友Frank前来帮忙，两人按照说明一步步操作，很快完成书架组装；之后补充制作过程的小细节，比如自己一开始操作出错，Frank教会自己正确使用工具，两人合作很愉快，最后把书架刷成蓝色；最后收尾点明这是自己第一次亲手给父亲制作生日礼物，表达希望父亲喜欢的心意。全程注意叙事以一般过去时为主，使用第一人称叙事，适当补充衔接词让行文流畅，保证字数达标，不要遗漏任何给定要点。
【解析】
我们按照写作逻辑分步完成内容搭建：
步骤1：开篇引入，对应第一个要点：直接点明父亲的生日即将到来，说明自己决定为书房安装书架的原因，比如父亲喜爱阅读，让开篇自然合理。
步骤2：主体叙事前半段，对应第二个要点：依次说明自己在线上订购了制作书架的材料，擅长DIY又热心的好友Frank带着工具前来帮忙，两人先阅读组装说明，之后快速动工，仅花费一小时就完成了书架的组装工作，把事件的推进过程交代清楚。
步骤3：补充过程细节，对应第三个要点：叙述组装过程中自己犯了一些操作错误，Frank耐心教会自己正确使用各类工具，两人协作十分愉快，最后一起把书架刷成了蓝色，让故事更真实生动。
步骤4：结尾收束升华，对应最后一个要点：点明这是自己第一次亲手为父亲制作生日礼物，表达自己希望父亲会喜欢这份礼物的心愿，完成全文的情感表达。
【答案】
One possible version:
My father's birthday is coming. I decided to put in a shelf on the wall of the study for him because he likes reading.
I ordered some materials on the Internet. My friend Frank is good at DIY and he is helpful. He brought some tools and helped me with the work. We read the instructions first and then started working quickly. It took us only an hour to finish.
I made some mistakes while working. Frank taught me how to use the tools properly. We had fun working together. At last, we painted the shelf blue.
This is the first birthday present I have made for Dad. I hope my dad will like the present.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作；一般过去时应用；DIY话题表达
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖了题干给出的所有提示要点，叙事按照事件发展的先后顺序推进，逻辑清晰连贯，时态使用准确，语句表达自然流畅，既完整还原了DIY书架的全过程，也传递出对父亲的真挚心意，符合初中英语该类写作的评分标准，是非常优质的参考习作。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道写作题，首先明确文体是叙事类记叙文，核心主题是记录自己为父亲生日DIY书架的经历。先把题干给出的所有提示要点逐一梳理，按照思维导图的叙事逻辑排布内容：首先开篇交代背景，说明父亲生日即将到来，解释自己想要在书房为他安装书架的合理原因；接着按照事件发展的先后顺序，先写自己网购制作书架的材料，再引出擅长DIY的好友Frank前来帮忙，两人按照说明一步步操作，很快完成书架组装；之后补充制作过程的小细节，比如自己一开始操作出错，Frank教会自己正确使用工具，两人合作很愉快，最后把书架刷成蓝色；最后收尾点明这是自己第一次亲手给父亲制作生日礼物，表达希望父亲喜欢的心意。全程注意叙事以一般过去时为主，使用第一人称叙事，适当补充衔接词让行文流畅，保证字数达标，不要遗漏任何给定要点。
【解析】
我们按照写作逻辑分步完成内容搭建：
步骤1：开篇引入，对应第一个要点：直接点明父亲的生日即将到来，说明自己决定为书房安装书架的原因，比如父亲喜爱阅读，让开篇自然合理。
步骤2：主体叙事前半段，对应第二个要点：依次说明自己在线上订购了制作书架的材料，擅长DIY又热心的好友Frank带着工具前来帮忙，两人先阅读组装说明，之后快速动工，仅花费一小时就完成了书架的组装工作，把事件的推进过程交代清楚。
步骤3：补充过程细节，对应第三个要点：叙述组装过程中自己犯了一些操作错误，Frank耐心教会自己正确使用各类工具，两人协作十分愉快，最后一起把书架刷成了蓝色，让故事更真实生动。
步骤4：结尾收束升华，对应最后一个要点：点明这是自己第一次亲手为父亲制作生日礼物，表达自己希望父亲会喜欢这份礼物的心愿，完成全文的情感表达。
【答案】
One possible version:
My father's birthday is coming. I decided to put in a shelf on the wall of the study for him because he likes reading.
I ordered some materials on the Internet. My friend Frank is good at DIY and he is helpful. He brought some tools and helped me with the work. We read the instructions first and then started working quickly. It took us only an hour to finish.
I made some mistakes while working. Frank taught me how to use the tools properly. We had fun working together. At last, we painted the shelf blue.
This is the first birthday present I have made for Dad. I hope my dad will like the present.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作；一般过去时应用；DIY话题表达
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖了题干给出的所有提示要点，叙事按照事件发展的先后顺序推进，逻辑清晰连贯，时态使用准确，语句表达自然流畅，既完整还原了DIY书架的全过程，也传递出对父亲的真挚心意，符合初中英语该类写作的评分标准，是非常优质的参考习作。
【难度系数】
0.6
