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假设你是丹尼尔，请你根据思维导图中提供的信息，给你的英国笔友朱迪写一封关于四季的信。
要求:1. 表达清楚，语法正确，上下文连贯。2. 必须包括思维导图中所有的信息，并适当发挥。3. 词数80左右，已给出部分不计入总词数。
[思路点拨] 1. 文体:应用文。2. 时态:一般现在时。3. 人称:以第二、三人称为主。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
Dear Judy,
I'm willing to tell you something about the four seasons in Nanjing. I'm sure you will like the seasons.
These are our four seasons. Each season has good things. I hope you will like them.
Yours,
Daniel
119
实战练笔，夯实写作功底
假设你是丹尼尔，请你根据思维导图中提供的信息，给你的英国笔友朱迪写一封关于四季的信。
要求:1. 表达清楚，语法正确，上下文连贯。2. 必须包括思维导图中所有的信息，并适当发挥。3. 词数80左右，已给出部分不计入总词数。
[思路点拨] 1. 文体:应用文。2. 时态:一般现在时。3. 人称:以第二、三人称为主。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
Dear Judy,
I'm willing to tell you something about the four seasons in Nanjing. I'm sure you will like the seasons.
In spring, you can watch bees and butterflies fly about and enjoy the beauty of nature. You can also go for an outing in the hills. Spring is the most comfortable season.
In summer, it is very hot. The temperature can reach above thirty degrees. You may feel sleepy on summer afternoons. But you can play by the stream, cool down under the trees and have a rest.
In autumn, leaves turn brown and fall into piles. Autumn is the best season to go hiking. Autumn is also a busy season for farming. The weather slowly turns cold.
There are several snowstorms in winter. We can make snowmen and have snowball fights. Winter is not only the season of snow, but also our happy season.
These are our four seasons. Each season has good things. I hope you will like them.
Yours,
Daniel
119
答案
One possible version:
Dear Judy,
I'm willing to tell you something about the four seasons in Nanjing. I'm sure you will like the seasons.
In spring, you can watch bees and butterflies fly about and enjoy the beauty of nature. You can also go for an outing in the hills. Spring is the most comfortable season.
In summer, it is very hot. The temperature can reach above thirty degrees. You may feel sleepy on summer afternoons. But you can play by the stream, cool down under the trees and have a rest.
In autumn, leaves turn brown and fall into piles. Autumn is the best season to go hiking. Autumn is also a busy season for farming. The weather slowly turns cold.
There are several snowstorms in winter. We can make snowmen and have snowball fights. Winter is not only the season of snow, but also our happy season.
These are our four seasons. Each season has good things. I hope you will like them.
Yours,
Daniel
Dear Judy,
I'm willing to tell you something about the four seasons in Nanjing. I'm sure you will like the seasons.
In spring, you can watch bees and butterflies fly about and enjoy the beauty of nature. You can also go for an outing in the hills. Spring is the most comfortable season.
In summer, it is very hot. The temperature can reach above thirty degrees. You may feel sleepy on summer afternoons. But you can play by the stream, cool down under the trees and have a rest.
In autumn, leaves turn brown and fall into piles. Autumn is the best season to go hiking. Autumn is also a busy season for farming. The weather slowly turns cold.
There are several snowstorms in winter. We can make snowmen and have snowball fights. Winter is not only the season of snow, but also our happy season.
These are our four seasons. Each season has good things. I hope you will like them.
Yours,
Daniel
解析
【分析】
这道题要求完成介绍南京四季的书信写作，解题时首先要明确核心写作逻辑：1. 先锁定文体是给笔友的应用文书信，时态统一用一般现在时来描述客观的季节特征，多用第二人称you来贴合和笔友分享的语境；2. 按照春、夏、秋、冬的时间顺序依次展开内容，每个季节先点明气候特点，再补充对应的特色景观、可开展的趣味活动，适当加入主观感受，保证所有要点都覆盖；3. 写完后检查语法正确性，调整语句让上下文衔接流畅，控制总词数符合要求，最后自然衔接题干给出的首尾内容即可。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：
1. 承接题干给出的开篇句，首先描写春季内容：介绍春日可以观赏蜂蝶飞舞、亲近自然，还能去山野踏青，点明春季体感舒适的特点。
2. 接着描写夏季内容：点明夏季炎热，气温可达30度以上，夏日午后容易犯困，同时补充可以在溪边玩耍、树下纳凉消暑的趣味活动。
3. 随后描写秋季内容：点明秋日树叶转黄堆积，是适合远足的时节，同时也是农忙的季节，气温逐渐转凉。
4. 最后描写冬季内容：点明冬季会有降雪天气，可以堆雪人、打雪仗，突出冬日的独特乐趣，之后直接衔接题干给出的结尾句即可。
完成后通读全文，确认所有要点无遗漏，语法正确，上下文连贯，符合写作要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear Judy,
I'm willing to tell you something about the four seasons in Nanjing. I'm sure you will like the seasons.
In spring, you can watch bees and butterflies fly about and enjoy the beauty of nature. You can also go for an outing in the hills. Spring is the most comfortable season.
In summer, it is very hot. The temperature can reach above thirty degrees. You may feel sleepy on summer afternoons. But you can play by the stream, cool down under the trees and have a rest.
In autumn, leaves turn brown and fall into piles. Autumn is the best season to go hiking. Autumn is also a busy season for farming. The weather slowly turns cold.
There are several snowstorms in winter. We can make snowmen and have snowball fights. Winter is not only the season of snow, but also our happy season.
These are our four seasons. Each season has good things. I hope you will like them.
Yours,
Daniel
【知识点】
英文书信写作；四季话题表达；一般现在时应用
【点评】
本篇范文完全贴合题目要求，完整覆盖了所有季节的气候、景观、活动相关要点，时态使用准确，以第二人称引导笔友代入场景，语句衔接自然流畅，细节丰富生动，符合书信的交流感，词数也符合题干要求，是一篇合格的优秀习作。
【难度系数】
0.6
这道题要求完成介绍南京四季的书信写作，解题时首先要明确核心写作逻辑：1. 先锁定文体是给笔友的应用文书信，时态统一用一般现在时来描述客观的季节特征，多用第二人称you来贴合和笔友分享的语境；2. 按照春、夏、秋、冬的时间顺序依次展开内容，每个季节先点明气候特点，再补充对应的特色景观、可开展的趣味活动，适当加入主观感受，保证所有要点都覆盖；3. 写完后检查语法正确性，调整语句让上下文衔接流畅，控制总词数符合要求，最后自然衔接题干给出的首尾内容即可。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：
1. 承接题干给出的开篇句，首先描写春季内容：介绍春日可以观赏蜂蝶飞舞、亲近自然，还能去山野踏青，点明春季体感舒适的特点。
2. 接着描写夏季内容：点明夏季炎热，气温可达30度以上，夏日午后容易犯困，同时补充可以在溪边玩耍、树下纳凉消暑的趣味活动。
3. 随后描写秋季内容：点明秋日树叶转黄堆积，是适合远足的时节，同时也是农忙的季节，气温逐渐转凉。
4. 最后描写冬季内容：点明冬季会有降雪天气，可以堆雪人、打雪仗，突出冬日的独特乐趣，之后直接衔接题干给出的结尾句即可。
完成后通读全文，确认所有要点无遗漏，语法正确，上下文连贯，符合写作要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear Judy,
I'm willing to tell you something about the four seasons in Nanjing. I'm sure you will like the seasons.
In spring, you can watch bees and butterflies fly about and enjoy the beauty of nature. You can also go for an outing in the hills. Spring is the most comfortable season.
In summer, it is very hot. The temperature can reach above thirty degrees. You may feel sleepy on summer afternoons. But you can play by the stream, cool down under the trees and have a rest.
In autumn, leaves turn brown and fall into piles. Autumn is the best season to go hiking. Autumn is also a busy season for farming. The weather slowly turns cold.
There are several snowstorms in winter. We can make snowmen and have snowball fights. Winter is not only the season of snow, but also our happy season.
These are our four seasons. Each season has good things. I hope you will like them.
Yours,
Daniel
【知识点】
英文书信写作；四季话题表达；一般现在时应用
【点评】
本篇范文完全贴合题目要求，完整覆盖了所有季节的气候、景观、活动相关要点，时态使用准确，以第二人称引导笔友代入场景，语句衔接自然流畅，细节丰富生动，符合书信的交流感，词数也符合题干要求，是一篇合格的优秀习作。
【难度系数】
0.6
