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Ⅶ.书面表达(共15分)
校园英语报刊正在进行以“在成长中塑造小我,在奉献中展现大我”为主题的征文活动,请你围绕如何使空闲时间更有意义,从“个人成长”和“奉献担当”中任选其一,以“How to make free time meaningful”为题,结合以下要点写一篇英语短文。
写作要求:1. 语句通顺,逻辑清晰,书写规范;
2. 可根据要点,适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;3.词数100左右。作文开头已给出,不计入总词数。
How to make free time meaningful
As a middle school student, I love my free time and usually do something meaningful.
校园英语报刊正在进行以“在成长中塑造小我,在奉献中展现大我”为主题的征文活动,请你围绕如何使空闲时间更有意义,从“个人成长”和“奉献担当”中任选其一,以“How to make free time meaningful”为题,结合以下要点写一篇英语短文。
写作要求:1. 语句通顺,逻辑清晰,书写规范;
2. 可根据要点,适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;3.词数100左右。作文开头已给出,不计入总词数。
How to make free time meaningful
As a middle school student, I love my free time and usually do something meaningful.
答案
Ⅶ. One possible version:
How to make free time meaningful
As a middle school student, I love my free time and usually do something meaningful. As for me, I'd like to spend my free time doing something that can improve myself.
To start with, I will keep reading for knowledge. Books are like engines of growth. Furthermore, I will offer to help around my house and get on well with my family. Meanwhile, I'm going to make more friends who are positive and can bring out the best of me. It's great to share youth problems with friends. Last but not least, I'll make future plans which remind me to keep on trying.
I dream of being a scientist when I grow up. Thanks to the meaningful self-improvement activities, I believe I will not only achieve my own dream one day, but also make valuable contributions to society in the future.
I believe small things like planting a tree can make a big difference.
思路梳理 总体分析:①题材:本文是一篇材料作文。②时态:时态主要为"一般现在时"。③提示:写作要点已明确给出,可适当补充个人感受或具体例子。写作步骤:第一步,表明写作意图。用"作为一个中学生"来引出下文,说明作者作为中学生对空闲时间的态度和利用方式。第二步,具体阐述写作内容。从阅读方面、家庭方面、交友方面和未来规划方面具体描述。第三步,书写结语。表达对未来的梦想、信念,以及个人行动对社会的影响,进行情感升华。
How to make free time meaningful
As a middle school student, I love my free time and usually do something meaningful. As for me, I'd like to spend my free time doing something that can improve myself.
To start with, I will keep reading for knowledge. Books are like engines of growth. Furthermore, I will offer to help around my house and get on well with my family. Meanwhile, I'm going to make more friends who are positive and can bring out the best of me. It's great to share youth problems with friends. Last but not least, I'll make future plans which remind me to keep on trying.
I dream of being a scientist when I grow up. Thanks to the meaningful self-improvement activities, I believe I will not only achieve my own dream one day, but also make valuable contributions to society in the future.
I believe small things like planting a tree can make a big difference.
思路梳理 总体分析:①题材:本文是一篇材料作文。②时态:时态主要为"一般现在时"。③提示:写作要点已明确给出,可适当补充个人感受或具体例子。写作步骤:第一步,表明写作意图。用"作为一个中学生"来引出下文,说明作者作为中学生对空闲时间的态度和利用方式。第二步,具体阐述写作内容。从阅读方面、家庭方面、交友方面和未来规划方面具体描述。第三步,书写结语。表达对未来的梦想、信念,以及个人行动对社会的影响,进行情感升华。
解析
【分析】
拿到这道题首先要完成审题步骤：明确写作主题是“如何让空闲时间更有意义”，要求从“个人成长”和“奉献担当”两个方向二选一创作，词数100左右，给定的开头不计入总词数。接下来梳理写作思路：第一，承接给定开头，直接点明自己的核心选择，比如选个人成长方向就说明打算把空闲时间用于自我提升；第二，用逻辑连接词把对应方向的所有题干给出要点串联起来，每个要点补充少量细节，比如写多读书可以说明书能帮我们获取成长所需的知识，让内容不空洞生硬；第三，最后收尾升华，把当下的行动和征文“小我成长、大我奉献”的核心主题结合，说明当下的成长未来也能为社会创造价值，提升作文立意。最后检查要点是否遗漏、语句是否通顺、词数是否符合要求即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：本题属于材料类征文写作，核心要求是围绕空闲时间的意义展开，二选一确定写作方向，整体时态以一般现在时、一般将来时为主，词数控制在100词左右。
2. 搭建行文结构：
① 开篇承接给定开头，直接亮明核心观点：选择把空闲时间用于自我提升，走个人成长的写作方向。
② 主体部分用To start with、furthermore、meanwhile、last but not least等逻辑连接词，依次串联多读书、和家人友好相处、结交益友、制定个人规划四个要点，每个要点补充细节让内容连贯自然。
③ 结尾部分升华主题，将个人成长的目标和未来为社会做贡献的愿景结合，呼应本次征文的核心立意。
3. 优化表达：适当使用地道短语和定语从句丰富句式，避免表达单一，检查语法错误，调整内容让总词数符合要求。
【答案】
How to make free time meaningful
As a middle school student, I love my free time and usually do something meaningful. As for me, I'd like to spend my free time doing something that can improve myself.
To start with, I will keep reading for knowledge. Books are like engines of growth. Furthermore, I will offer to help around my house and get on well with my family. Meanwhile, I'm going to make more friends who are positive and can bring out the best of me. It's great to share youth problems with friends. Last but not least, I'll make future plans which remind me to keep on trying.
I dream of being a scientist when I grow up. Thanks to the meaningful self-improvement activities, I believe I will not only achieve my own dream one day, but also make valuable contributions to society in the future.
I believe small things like planting a tree can make a big difference.
【知识点】
英语提纲作文写作，逻辑连接词运用，写作主题升华
【点评】
本篇范文选择个人成长的写作方向，完整覆盖了题干给出的全部要点，行文逻辑清晰，连接词使用恰当，句式丰富有变化，结尾部分将个人成长和服务社会的目标结合，完美贴合本次征文的主题要求。同学们也可以选择奉献担当的方向，串联帮助同学、救助流浪动物、敬老院志愿活动、家乡环保等要点，同样可以写出符合要求的优秀作文。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道题首先要完成审题步骤：明确写作主题是“如何让空闲时间更有意义”，要求从“个人成长”和“奉献担当”两个方向二选一创作，词数100左右，给定的开头不计入总词数。接下来梳理写作思路：第一，承接给定开头，直接点明自己的核心选择，比如选个人成长方向就说明打算把空闲时间用于自我提升；第二，用逻辑连接词把对应方向的所有题干给出要点串联起来，每个要点补充少量细节，比如写多读书可以说明书能帮我们获取成长所需的知识，让内容不空洞生硬；第三，最后收尾升华，把当下的行动和征文“小我成长、大我奉献”的核心主题结合，说明当下的成长未来也能为社会创造价值，提升作文立意。最后检查要点是否遗漏、语句是否通顺、词数是否符合要求即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：本题属于材料类征文写作，核心要求是围绕空闲时间的意义展开，二选一确定写作方向，整体时态以一般现在时、一般将来时为主，词数控制在100词左右。
2. 搭建行文结构：
① 开篇承接给定开头，直接亮明核心观点：选择把空闲时间用于自我提升，走个人成长的写作方向。
② 主体部分用To start with、furthermore、meanwhile、last but not least等逻辑连接词，依次串联多读书、和家人友好相处、结交益友、制定个人规划四个要点，每个要点补充细节让内容连贯自然。
③ 结尾部分升华主题，将个人成长的目标和未来为社会做贡献的愿景结合，呼应本次征文的核心立意。
3. 优化表达：适当使用地道短语和定语从句丰富句式，避免表达单一，检查语法错误，调整内容让总词数符合要求。
【答案】
How to make free time meaningful
As a middle school student, I love my free time and usually do something meaningful. As for me, I'd like to spend my free time doing something that can improve myself.
To start with, I will keep reading for knowledge. Books are like engines of growth. Furthermore, I will offer to help around my house and get on well with my family. Meanwhile, I'm going to make more friends who are positive and can bring out the best of me. It's great to share youth problems with friends. Last but not least, I'll make future plans which remind me to keep on trying.
I dream of being a scientist when I grow up. Thanks to the meaningful self-improvement activities, I believe I will not only achieve my own dream one day, but also make valuable contributions to society in the future.
I believe small things like planting a tree can make a big difference.
【知识点】
英语提纲作文写作，逻辑连接词运用，写作主题升华
【点评】
本篇范文选择个人成长的写作方向，完整覆盖了题干给出的全部要点，行文逻辑清晰，连接词使用恰当，句式丰富有变化，结尾部分将个人成长和服务社会的目标结合，完美贴合本次征文的主题要求。同学们也可以选择奉献担当的方向，串联帮助同学、救助流浪动物、敬老院志愿活动、家乡环保等要点，同样可以写出符合要求的优秀作文。
【难度系数】
0.6
