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假如你是阳光中学的王刚，来自美国的初中生游学团要来学校访问交流。你将代表全体同学发言，请用英语写一篇70词左右的发言稿，向他们介绍你自己和你的学校。
[高分范文]
Dear friends,
Welcome to our Sunshine Middle School. I am Wang Gang.
I am glad to introduce myself and our school to you. ¹
As for me ², I like Chinese and English. But ³ my favourite subject is geography. Because ³ I like travelling and ³ I can learn about the places around the world.
As for our school ², we have nice teachers
. They are kind to us. There are a lot of facilities in our school, such as ³ three teaching buildings and a library. There are different clubs, such as ³ the English club, the chess club, the swimming club, the art club and so on. Our classmates are friendly, too. We help each other all the time.
I hope you have a good time in our school. We are so glad to share our wonderful school life with you. ⁴
[名师点评]
短文以发言稿的形式介绍了“我”和“我们”的学校。
① 开篇点题，说明了要介绍的内容：“我”和“我们”的学校。
② As for me 和 As for our school 分别引出对“我”和“我们”的学校的介绍，使文章脉络清晰。
③ But、Because、and、such as 等词的恰当运用使文章衔接流畅，过渡自然。
④ 结尾宾语从句和不定式结构的运用显示了作者较为扎实的写作功底。
假如你是阳光中学的王刚，来自美国的初中生游学团要来学校访问交流。你将代表全体同学发言，请用英语写一篇70词左右的发言稿，向他们介绍你自己和你的学校。
[高分范文]
Dear friends,
Welcome to our Sunshine Middle School. I am Wang Gang.
I am glad to introduce myself and our school to you. ¹
As for me ², I like Chinese and English. But ³ my favourite subject is geography. Because ³ I like travelling and ³ I can learn about the places around the world.
As for our school ², we have nice teachers
. They are kind to us. There are a lot of facilities in our school, such as ³ three teaching buildings and a library. There are different clubs, such as ³ the English club, the chess club, the swimming club, the art club and so on. Our classmates are friendly, too. We help each other all the time.I hope you have a good time in our school. We are so glad to share our wonderful school life with you. ⁴
[名师点评]
短文以发言稿的形式介绍了“我”和“我们”的学校。
① 开篇点题，说明了要介绍的内容：“我”和“我们”的学校。
② As for me 和 As for our school 分别引出对“我”和“我们”的学校的介绍，使文章脉络清晰。
③ But、Because、and、such as 等词的恰当运用使文章衔接流畅，过渡自然。
④ 结尾宾语从句和不定式结构的运用显示了作者较为扎实的写作功底。
答案
参考范文：
Dear friends,
Welcome to our Sunshine Middle School! I'm Wang Gang. I'm glad to introduce myself and our school to you.
I love English very much, and I hope we can have fun talking later. Our school has kind teachers, three new teaching buildings and many interesting clubs. All the students here are very friendly.
Wish you a good time in our school!
Dear friends,
Welcome to our Sunshine Middle School! I'm Wang Gang. I'm glad to introduce myself and our school to you.
I love English very much, and I hope we can have fun talking later. Our school has kind teachers, three new teaching buildings and many interesting clubs. All the students here are very friendly.
Wish you a good time in our school!
解析
【分析】本题是英语写作题，要求以阳光中学学生王刚的身份，为来访的美国初中生写一篇70词左右的发言稿，核心是介绍自己和学校。写作思路需遵循发言稿的规范：开头问候并自我介绍、点明写作主题；中间分模块介绍自身情况、学校的老师/设施/同学；结尾表达祝福，同时注意语言简洁、衔接自然，控制字数。
【解析】1. 开头：使用发言稿常用的问候语“Dear friends”，自我介绍（I'm Wang Gang），明确写作目的（introduce myself and our school to you）；2. 主体：先介绍自身喜好（体现个人特点），再介绍学校核心内容：友善的老师、教学设施、有趣的俱乐部，以及同学的友好；3. 结尾：用礼貌的祝福语收尾，确保总词数约70，符合要求，语言符合英语表达习惯。
【答案】
Dear friends,
Welcome to our Sunshine Middle School! I'm Wang Gang. I'm glad to introduce myself and our school to you.
I love English very much, and I hope we can have fun talking later. Our school has kind teachers, three new teaching buildings and many interesting clubs. All the students here are very friendly.
Wish you a good time in our school!
【知识点】英语发言稿写作、常用交际句型
【点评】该范文严格遵循发言稿格式，内容紧扣题目要求，语言简洁流畅，衔接自然，字数符合要求，是一篇符合标准的优秀写作范例，体现了良好的英语运用能力。
【难度系数】0.6
【解析】1. 开头：使用发言稿常用的问候语“Dear friends”，自我介绍（I'm Wang Gang），明确写作目的（introduce myself and our school to you）；2. 主体：先介绍自身喜好（体现个人特点），再介绍学校核心内容：友善的老师、教学设施、有趣的俱乐部，以及同学的友好；3. 结尾：用礼貌的祝福语收尾，确保总词数约70，符合要求，语言符合英语表达习惯。
【答案】
Dear friends,
Welcome to our Sunshine Middle School! I'm Wang Gang. I'm glad to introduce myself and our school to you.
I love English very much, and I hope we can have fun talking later. Our school has kind teachers, three new teaching buildings and many interesting clubs. All the students here are very friendly.
Wish you a good time in our school!
【知识点】英语发言稿写作、常用交际句型
【点评】该范文严格遵循发言稿格式，内容紧扣题目要求，语言简洁流畅，衔接自然，字数符合要求，是一篇符合标准的优秀写作范例，体现了良好的英语运用能力。
【难度系数】0.6
素材积累＞＞
[开头句]
1. Welcome to junior high! （表达欢迎）
2. I'd like to tell you something about my school. （引出话题）
[中间句]
1. My favourite subject is physics because it's interesting. （陈述喜好）
2. To make more friends, I'm going to take part in sports. （阐述计划）
[结尾句]
1. I want to make friends with you all! （表达期盼）
2. I have a good time every day at school. （抒发感受）
[名言警句]
1. Well begun is half done.
良好的开端是成功的一半。
2. Plans are nothing; planning is everything.
计划乃浮云，会计划才是一切。
写作演练＞＞
假如你是阳光中学七年级三班的Peter，你很想告诉朋友们你在新学校的校园生活。请根据下表中的要点提示，用英文给你的好朋友Tom写一封信。
写作要求:1. 70词左右,已给出部分不计入总词数;2. 文中须包括所有要点,不要逐词翻译,可适当发挥,使语句通顺,意思连贯。
[思路点拨]
1. 时态:以一般现在时为主;2. 人称:以第一人称为主;3. 写作时:第一段引出话题,第二段介绍自己的学校,第三段介绍自己的业余生活。
教材语篇
[开头句]
1. Welcome to junior high! （表达欢迎）
2. I'd like to tell you something about my school. （引出话题）
[中间句]
1. My favourite subject is physics because it's interesting. （陈述喜好）
2. To make more friends, I'm going to take part in sports. （阐述计划）
[结尾句]
1. I want to make friends with you all! （表达期盼）
2. I have a good time every day at school. （抒发感受）
[名言警句]
1. Well begun is half done.
良好的开端是成功的一半。
2. Plans are nothing; planning is everything.
计划乃浮云，会计划才是一切。
写作演练＞＞
假如你是阳光中学七年级三班的Peter，你很想告诉朋友们你在新学校的校园生活。请根据下表中的要点提示，用英文给你的好朋友Tom写一封信。
写作要求:1. 70词左右,已给出部分不计入总词数;2. 文中须包括所有要点,不要逐词翻译,可适当发挥,使语句通顺,意思连贯。
[思路点拨]
1. 时态:以一般现在时为主;2. 人称:以第一人称为主;3. 写作时:第一段引出话题,第二段介绍自己的学校,第三段介绍自己的业余生活。
教材语篇
答案
参考范文：
Dear Tom,
I'd like to tell you something about my new school.
Our school is big and beautiful, with a playground and a modern library. We have lessons from Monday to Friday, six classes a day. We have lots of time for after-school activities. I have many nice friends here, they are all kind to me.
I love reading and I like playing basketball too. I have a good time every day at school.
Yours,
Peter
Dear Tom,
I'd like to tell you something about my new school.
Our school is big and beautiful, with a playground and a modern library. We have lessons from Monday to Friday, six classes a day. We have lots of time for after-school activities. I have many nice friends here, they are all kind to me.
I love reading and I like playing basketball too. I have a good time every day at school.
Yours,
Peter
解析
【分析】
本题要求以阳光中学七年级三班Peter的身份给好友Tom写一封介绍新学校校园生活的英文信，需包含表格中“新学校”和“业余生活”的所有要点，遵循书信格式，使用一般现在时、第一人称，结构分为引出话题、介绍学校情况、介绍业余生活三部分，注意语句通顺，适当发挥，控制词数在70词左右。
【解析】
1. 书信格式：开头用“Dear Tom”称呼，结尾用“Yours,”署名，最后写名字Peter；
2. 开篇：用给定的引出话题句“I'd like to tell you something about my new school.”开启正文；
3. 介绍学校：结合要点，说明学校又大又美，有操场和现代化图书馆，周一到周五上课，每天六节课，有很多课外活动时间，还有很多友好的朋友；
4. 介绍业余生活：写出热爱阅读、喜欢打篮球；
5. 结尾：用给定的抒发感受句“I have a good time every day at school.”收尾，确保语句连贯，时态统一为一般现在时，避免逐词翻译，适当调整使表达自然。
【答案】
Dear Tom,
I'd like to tell you something about my new school.
Our school is big and beautiful, with a playground and a modern library. We have lessons from Monday to Friday, six classes a day. We have lots of time for after-school activities. I have many nice friends here, they are all kind to me.
I love reading and I like playing basketball too. I have a good time every day at school.
Yours,
Peter
【知识点】
英语书信写作、一般现在时运用、要点整合写作
【点评】
本题考查学生的英语书面表达能力，要求整合给定信息完成书信写作，需注意格式、时态和语句连贯性，难度适中，适合七年级学生练习。
【难度系数】
0.5
本题要求以阳光中学七年级三班Peter的身份给好友Tom写一封介绍新学校校园生活的英文信，需包含表格中“新学校”和“业余生活”的所有要点，遵循书信格式，使用一般现在时、第一人称，结构分为引出话题、介绍学校情况、介绍业余生活三部分，注意语句通顺，适当发挥，控制词数在70词左右。
【解析】
1. 书信格式：开头用“Dear Tom”称呼，结尾用“Yours,”署名，最后写名字Peter；
2. 开篇：用给定的引出话题句“I'd like to tell you something about my new school.”开启正文；
3. 介绍学校：结合要点，说明学校又大又美，有操场和现代化图书馆，周一到周五上课，每天六节课，有很多课外活动时间，还有很多友好的朋友；
4. 介绍业余生活：写出热爱阅读、喜欢打篮球；
5. 结尾：用给定的抒发感受句“I have a good time every day at school.”收尾，确保语句连贯，时态统一为一般现在时，避免逐词翻译，适当调整使表达自然。
【答案】
Dear Tom,
I'd like to tell you something about my new school.
Our school is big and beautiful, with a playground and a modern library. We have lessons from Monday to Friday, six classes a day. We have lots of time for after-school activities. I have many nice friends here, they are all kind to me.
I love reading and I like playing basketball too. I have a good time every day at school.
Yours,
Peter
【知识点】
英语书信写作、一般现在时运用、要点整合写作
【点评】
本题考查学生的英语书面表达能力，要求整合给定信息完成书信写作，需注意格式、时态和语句连贯性，难度适中，适合七年级学生练习。
【难度系数】
0.5
