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假定你是学生李辉,即将参加学校英语社团组织的以“古代中国智慧故事”为主题的征文活动。请你根据以下提示写一篇英语文章参加比赛。内容包括:
审要点
1.司马光和小伙伴们玩耍;2.一个小伙伴掉进水缸(water tank)中;3.司马光砸破水缸救出小伙伴。
审时态:以一般过去时为主;
审人称:以第三人称为主
注意:1.词数80词左右;2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;3.文中不能出现真实姓名及学校名称。
审词数
优秀范文
My name is Li Hui, and today I’m delighted① to share with you an ancient Chinese wisdom story about Sima Guang.
One day, Sima Guang and his friends were playing happily in a courtyard. In the corner of the courtyard stood a huge water tank. Suddenly, one of his friends lost his balance and fell into the tank while② they were playing around the tank. The other children were so frightened① that③ they didn’t know what to do next. But Sima Guang remained calm①. He quickly looked around and an idea came to him when② he saw a big stone nearby. He picked up the stone and threw it at the water tank hard. The tank broke and the water ran out①. The boy was saved at last.
This story teaches us that② in difficult situations, we should stay calm and try to solve the problem in a right way.
亮点评析
① 使用了“delighted”“frightened”“remain calm”“run out”提升文章档次。
②使用了时间状语从句和宾语从句,丰富文章内容。
③使用了so...that...结构,强调前因后果的逻辑关系,同时也增强了语言的表现力。
假定你是学生李辉,即将参加学校英语社团组织的以“古代中国智慧故事”为主题的征文活动。请你根据以下提示写一篇英语文章参加比赛。内容包括:
审要点
1.司马光和小伙伴们玩耍;2.一个小伙伴掉进水缸(water tank)中;3.司马光砸破水缸救出小伙伴。
审时态:以一般过去时为主;
审人称:以第三人称为主
注意:1.词数80词左右;2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;3.文中不能出现真实姓名及学校名称。
审词数
优秀范文
My name is Li Hui, and today I’m delighted① to share with you an ancient Chinese wisdom story about Sima Guang.
One day, Sima Guang and his friends were playing happily in a courtyard. In the corner of the courtyard stood a huge water tank. Suddenly, one of his friends lost his balance and fell into the tank while② they were playing around the tank. The other children were so frightened① that③ they didn’t know what to do next. But Sima Guang remained calm①. He quickly looked around and an idea came to him when② he saw a big stone nearby. He picked up the stone and threw it at the water tank hard. The tank broke and the water ran out①. The boy was saved at last.
This story teaches us that② in difficult situations, we should stay calm and try to solve the problem in a right way.
亮点评析
① 使用了“delighted”“frightened”“remain calm”“run out”提升文章档次。
②使用了时间状语从句和宾语从句,丰富文章内容。
③使用了so...that...结构,强调前因后果的逻辑关系,同时也增强了语言的表现力。
答案
My name is Li Hui, and today I'm delighted to share with you an ancient Chinese wisdom story about Sima Guang.
One day, Sima Guang and his friends were playing happily in a courtyard. Suddenly, one of his friends lost his balance and fell into a huge water tank while they were playing around it. The other children were so frightened that they didn't know what to do. But Sima Guang stayed calm. He found a big stone nearby, picked it up and threw it at the tank hard. The tank broke, the water ran out and the boy was saved at last.
This story teaches us that when in trouble, we should stay calm and try to solve problems wisely.
One day, Sima Guang and his friends were playing happily in a courtyard. Suddenly, one of his friends lost his balance and fell into a huge water tank while they were playing around it. The other children were so frightened that they didn't know what to do. But Sima Guang stayed calm. He found a big stone nearby, picked it up and threw it at the tank hard. The tank broke, the water ran out and the boy was saved at last.
This story teaches us that when in trouble, we should stay calm and try to solve problems wisely.
解析
【分析】
这是一篇英语写作题，要求以学生李辉的身份参加“古代中国智慧故事”主题征文。解题思路：首先明确写作要求：时态用一般过去时，人称以第三人称为主，词数80左右，需覆盖三个核心要点（司马光与伙伴玩耍、伙伴掉进水缸、司马光砸缸救人）；其次按照给定的结构（开头引出话题、中间叙述故事、结尾表达看法）展开内容；最后运用高分句式（如so...that...）提升语言表现力，确保行文连贯。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：1. 开头：用第一人称引出话题，说明要分享司马光的智慧故事，对应句子“My name is Li Hui, and today I'm delighted to share with you an ancient Chinese wisdom story about Sima Guang.”；2. 中间：按时间顺序叙述故事：先交代司马光和伙伴玩耍的场景，接着写伙伴不慎掉进水缸，再描述其他孩子惊慌失措的反应，随后写司马光冷静找到石头砸破水缸救人的过程，最后点明孩子得救；3. 结尾：点明故事蕴含的道理，即遇到困难要保持冷静，用正确方法解决问题。全程使用一般过去时，符合时态要求，要点齐全，语言连贯。
【答案】
My name is Li Hui, and today I'm delighted to share with you an ancient Chinese wisdom story about Sima Guang.
One day, Sima Guang and his friends were playing happily in a courtyard. Suddenly, one of his friends lost his balance and fell into a huge water tank while they were playing around it. The other children were so frightened that they didn't know what to do. But Sima Guang stayed calm. He found a big stone nearby, picked it up and threw it at the tank hard. The tank broke, the water ran out and the boy was saved at last.
This story teaches us that when in trouble, we should stay calm and try to solve problems wisely.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作、一般过去时运用、高分句式运用
【点评】
本文紧扣“古代中国智慧故事”主题，核心要点完整覆盖，时态运用准确，结构清晰，语言流畅，运用了丰富的词汇和句式（如so...that...）增强表达效果，符合征文要求，是一篇优秀的英语习作。
【难度系数】
0.4
这是一篇英语写作题，要求以学生李辉的身份参加“古代中国智慧故事”主题征文。解题思路：首先明确写作要求：时态用一般过去时，人称以第三人称为主，词数80左右，需覆盖三个核心要点（司马光与伙伴玩耍、伙伴掉进水缸、司马光砸缸救人）；其次按照给定的结构（开头引出话题、中间叙述故事、结尾表达看法）展开内容；最后运用高分句式（如so...that...）提升语言表现力，确保行文连贯。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：1. 开头：用第一人称引出话题，说明要分享司马光的智慧故事，对应句子“My name is Li Hui, and today I'm delighted to share with you an ancient Chinese wisdom story about Sima Guang.”；2. 中间：按时间顺序叙述故事：先交代司马光和伙伴玩耍的场景，接着写伙伴不慎掉进水缸，再描述其他孩子惊慌失措的反应，随后写司马光冷静找到石头砸破水缸救人的过程，最后点明孩子得救；3. 结尾：点明故事蕴含的道理，即遇到困难要保持冷静，用正确方法解决问题。全程使用一般过去时，符合时态要求，要点齐全，语言连贯。
【答案】
My name is Li Hui, and today I'm delighted to share with you an ancient Chinese wisdom story about Sima Guang.
One day, Sima Guang and his friends were playing happily in a courtyard. Suddenly, one of his friends lost his balance and fell into a huge water tank while they were playing around it. The other children were so frightened that they didn't know what to do. But Sima Guang stayed calm. He found a big stone nearby, picked it up and threw it at the tank hard. The tank broke, the water ran out and the boy was saved at last.
This story teaches us that when in trouble, we should stay calm and try to solve problems wisely.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作、一般过去时运用、高分句式运用
【点评】
本文紧扣“古代中国智慧故事”主题，核心要点完整覆盖，时态运用准确，结构清晰，语言流畅，运用了丰富的词汇和句式（如so...that...）增强表达效果，符合征文要求，是一篇优秀的英语习作。
【难度系数】
0.4
