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② 运用first、Next、Finally三个顺序连接词，清晰梳理出制作步骤，让行文逻辑连贯。
③ 使用which引导的非限制性定语从句，补充说明山水松景图案的寓意。
④ 采用“not only ... but also ...”并列结构，既总结了DIY的乐趣，又点明收获。
“DIY故事”的征文比赛，请你用英语写一篇短文投稿，介绍你自己的DIY经历及看法，词数90左右。短文中须包含以下几个方面的内容：
[思路点拨]
① 人称：以第一人称为主；② 时态：以一般过去时和一般现在时为主；③ 写作时首先介绍身份，接着讲述DIY故事，最后表达自己对DIY的看法。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
（更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”）
③ 使用which引导的非限制性定语从句，补充说明山水松景图案的寓意。
④ 采用“not only ... but also ...”并列结构，既总结了DIY的乐趣，又点明收获。
“DIY故事”的征文比赛，请你用英语写一篇短文投稿，介绍你自己的DIY经历及看法，词数90左右。短文中须包含以下几个方面的内容：
[思路点拨]
① 人称：以第一人称为主；② 时态：以一般过去时和一般现在时为主；③ 写作时首先介绍身份，接着讲述DIY故事，最后表达自己对DIY的看法。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
（更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”）
答案
写作专训
One possible version：
I am a Grade Eight student who is crazy about DIY. I enjoy cooking and drawing because I can find great joy in creating things with my own hands.
DIY has become a wonderful part of my life. It brings me happiness and a sense of achievement. Last week, I successfully put in a light in my room by myself. At first, I had no idea how to do it, but I didn't give up. I searched online for step-by-step instructions and followed them carefully. When I finally made it, I was so excited that I couldn't help laughing and cheering for myself.
In my opinion, DIY makes life more colourful and meaningful. It helps me realize how capable I can be. Through DIY, I've learned that with patience and effort, anything is possible.
One possible version：
I am a Grade Eight student who is crazy about DIY. I enjoy cooking and drawing because I can find great joy in creating things with my own hands.
DIY has become a wonderful part of my life. It brings me happiness and a sense of achievement. Last week, I successfully put in a light in my room by myself. At first, I had no idea how to do it, but I didn't give up. I searched online for step-by-step instructions and followed them carefully. When I finally made it, I was so excited that I couldn't help laughing and cheering for myself.
In my opinion, DIY makes life more colourful and meaningful. It helps me realize how capable I can be. Through DIY, I've learned that with patience and effort, anything is possible.
解析
【分析】
首先明确写作要求：以第一人称为主，用一般过去时叙述DIY经历，一般现在时表达看法；需包含first、Next、Finally等顺序连接词，which引导的非限制性定语从句，not only...but also...并列结构；结构上分为身份介绍、DIY故事、看法总结三部分。写作时先点明身份与对DIY的热爱，再讲述具体DIY事件，用指定连接词梳理步骤，补充图案寓意，最后用并列结构总结DIY的乐趣与收获，表达对DIY的看法。
【解析】
1. 开头：用一般现在时介绍自己是热爱DIY的八年级学生，点明对DIY的喜爱，符合人称时态要求；
2. 中间：用一般过去时叙述DIY经历，运用first、finally梳理步骤，体现过程连贯性；
3. 结尾：用not only...but also...并列结构总结DIY的乐趣与收获，再表达对DIY的看法，升华主题，符合征文要求。
【答案】
One possible version：
I am a Grade Eight student who is crazy about DIY. I enjoy cooking and drawing because I can find great joy in creating things with my own hands.
DIY has become a wonderful part of my life. It brings me happiness and a sense of achievement. Last week, I successfully put in a light in my room by myself. At first, I had no idea how to do it, but I didn't give up. I searched online for step-by-step instructions and followed them carefully. When I finally made it, I was so excited that I couldn't help laughing and cheering for myself.
In my opinion, DIY makes life more colourful and meaningful. It helps me realize how capable I can be. Through DIY, I've learned that with patience and effort, anything is possible.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、非限制性定语从句、并列结构
【点评】
本文符合征文要求，人称时态准确，逻辑清晰，涵盖所有指定写作要点，语言流畅自然，生动展现了DIY的经历与感悟，是一篇优秀的习作。
【难度系数】
0.5
首先明确写作要求：以第一人称为主，用一般过去时叙述DIY经历，一般现在时表达看法；需包含first、Next、Finally等顺序连接词，which引导的非限制性定语从句，not only...but also...并列结构；结构上分为身份介绍、DIY故事、看法总结三部分。写作时先点明身份与对DIY的热爱，再讲述具体DIY事件，用指定连接词梳理步骤，补充图案寓意，最后用并列结构总结DIY的乐趣与收获，表达对DIY的看法。
【解析】
1. 开头：用一般现在时介绍自己是热爱DIY的八年级学生，点明对DIY的喜爱，符合人称时态要求；
2. 中间：用一般过去时叙述DIY经历，运用first、finally梳理步骤，体现过程连贯性；
3. 结尾：用not only...but also...并列结构总结DIY的乐趣与收获，再表达对DIY的看法，升华主题，符合征文要求。
【答案】
One possible version：
I am a Grade Eight student who is crazy about DIY. I enjoy cooking and drawing because I can find great joy in creating things with my own hands.
DIY has become a wonderful part of my life. It brings me happiness and a sense of achievement. Last week, I successfully put in a light in my room by myself. At first, I had no idea how to do it, but I didn't give up. I searched online for step-by-step instructions and followed them carefully. When I finally made it, I was so excited that I couldn't help laughing and cheering for myself.
In my opinion, DIY makes life more colourful and meaningful. It helps me realize how capable I can be. Through DIY, I've learned that with patience and effort, anything is possible.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、非限制性定语从句、并列结构
【点评】
本文符合征文要求，人称时态准确，逻辑清晰，涵盖所有指定写作要点，语言流畅自然，生动展现了DIY的经历与感悟，是一篇优秀的习作。
【难度系数】
0.5
