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假定你是李华,要参加学校英语周的征文比赛。请以“My most special gift”为题写一篇短文,内容包括:
1.对礼物的总体描述;
2.你和礼物之间的故事;
3.你对礼物的感受。
注意:
1.词数80—100;
2.短文须包括所给内容信息,可适当增加细节,使行文连贯;
3.文章中不得出现真实的人名或校名。
My most special gift
优秀范文
My most special gift
The most special gift I have ever received is a hand-knit scarf from my grandma.① It is soft and warm, with light blue and white patterns that look like small stars②. It is not expensive, but it means the world to me.
I got it on a cold winter morning before I left for school. My grandma handed it to me with a gentle smile, saying she spent three weeks knitting it while I was at school②. When I put it on②, I felt a warm feeling spread through my body, and my eyes were a little wet.
This scarf is more than just a piece of cloth③. It carries my grandma’s deep love and care for me. Whenever I wear it②, I feel like she is right there with me. I will keep it and treasure it forever.
1.对礼物的总体描述;
2.你和礼物之间的故事;
3.你对礼物的感受。
注意:
1.词数80—100;
2.短文须包括所给内容信息,可适当增加细节,使行文连贯;
3.文章中不得出现真实的人名或校名。
My most special gift
优秀范文
My most special gift
The most special gift I have ever received is a hand-knit scarf from my grandma.① It is soft and warm, with light blue and white patterns that look like small stars②. It is not expensive, but it means the world to me.
I got it on a cold winter morning before I left for school. My grandma handed it to me with a gentle smile, saying she spent three weeks knitting it while I was at school②. When I put it on②, I felt a warm feeling spread through my body, and my eyes were a little wet.
This scarf is more than just a piece of cloth③. It carries my grandma’s deep love and care for me. Whenever I wear it②, I feel like she is right there with me. I will keep it and treasure it forever.
答案
解析
【分析】
本题为英语应用文写作题，要求以“My most special gift”为题完成征文，需涵盖礼物总体描述、相关故事、个人感受三个核心要点。解题思路：1. 依据给定的思维导图（开头引出话题、中间讲礼物故事、结尾升华感受）确定文章结构；2. 对应各部分填充符合语境的内容，运用定语从句、时间状语从句等高分句式提升表达；3. 控制词数在80-100之间，确保行文连贯、无真实信息。
【解析】
写作步骤：1. 开头：用定语从句“I have ever received”修饰gift，开门见山点明最特别的礼物是奶奶织的围巾，引出话题；2. 中间：描述围巾的外观（柔软温暖、有蓝白星星图案）、价值（不贵但意义重大），再讲述收到礼物的时间（上学前的冬日早晨）、奶奶的动作（微笑递围巾）及自己戴上后的感动感受；3. 结尾：升华主题，说明围巾承载奶奶的爱，表达会珍藏的愿望，使用高分句式增强感染力，满足征文要求。
【答案】
My most special gift
The most special gift I have ever received is a hand-knit scarf from my grandma. It is soft and warm, with light blue and white patterns that look like small stars. It is not expensive, but it means the world to me.
I got it on a cold winter morning before I left for school. My grandma handed it to me with a gentle smile, saying she spent three weeks knitting it while I was at school. When I put it on, I felt a warm feeling spread through my body, and my eyes were a little wet.
This scarf is more than just a piece of cloth. It carries my grandma’s deep love and care for me. Whenever I wear it, I feel like she is right there with me. I will keep it and treasure it forever.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作；定语从句运用；情感表达写作
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求，结构清晰完整，语言流畅自然，使用了定语从句、时间状语从句等高分句式，情感真挚，完美契合征文比赛的要求，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
本题为英语应用文写作题，要求以“My most special gift”为题完成征文，需涵盖礼物总体描述、相关故事、个人感受三个核心要点。解题思路：1. 依据给定的思维导图（开头引出话题、中间讲礼物故事、结尾升华感受）确定文章结构；2. 对应各部分填充符合语境的内容，运用定语从句、时间状语从句等高分句式提升表达；3. 控制词数在80-100之间，确保行文连贯、无真实信息。
【解析】
写作步骤：1. 开头：用定语从句“I have ever received”修饰gift，开门见山点明最特别的礼物是奶奶织的围巾，引出话题；2. 中间：描述围巾的外观（柔软温暖、有蓝白星星图案）、价值（不贵但意义重大），再讲述收到礼物的时间（上学前的冬日早晨）、奶奶的动作（微笑递围巾）及自己戴上后的感动感受；3. 结尾：升华主题，说明围巾承载奶奶的爱，表达会珍藏的愿望，使用高分句式增强感染力，满足征文要求。
【答案】
My most special gift
The most special gift I have ever received is a hand-knit scarf from my grandma. It is soft and warm, with light blue and white patterns that look like small stars. It is not expensive, but it means the world to me.
I got it on a cold winter morning before I left for school. My grandma handed it to me with a gentle smile, saying she spent three weeks knitting it while I was at school. When I put it on, I felt a warm feeling spread through my body, and my eyes were a little wet.
This scarf is more than just a piece of cloth. It carries my grandma’s deep love and care for me. Whenever I wear it, I feel like she is right there with me. I will keep it and treasure it forever.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作；定语从句运用；情感表达写作
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求，结构清晰完整，语言流畅自然，使用了定语从句、时间状语从句等高分句式，情感真挚，完美契合征文比赛的要求，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
