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四、书面表达
某杂志社正在进行征稿活动,主题是"My hometown"。假如你
是来自阳光镇的丹丹,请你根据下面的信息,写一篇英语短文,向读
者们介绍你的家乡。
注意:
1. 语句通顺,意思连贯,条理清楚,书写规范;
2. 文章不少于80个词,开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数;
3. 文中不得出现真实的姓名、校名等信息。
Dear readers,
Come and take a look at my hometown—Sunshine Town.
I hope you can come to my hometown and visit it some day.
某杂志社正在进行征稿活动,主题是"My hometown"。假如你
是来自阳光镇的丹丹,请你根据下面的信息,写一篇英语短文,向读
者们介绍你的家乡。
注意:
1. 语句通顺,意思连贯,条理清楚,书写规范;
2. 文章不少于80个词,开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数;
3. 文中不得出现真实的姓名、校名等信息。
Dear readers,
Come and take a look at my hometown—Sunshine Town.
I hope you can come to my hometown and visit it some day.
答案
One possible version:
Dear readers,
Come and take a look at my hometown—Sunshine Town. Sunshine Town is about 10 kilometres
away from Sunshine Railway Station. You can come here by bus, by car or by high-speed railway.
There are about 20,000 people living here. They are all friendly. My hometown is a great place to
have fun. You can go hiking in the hills and go fishing by the lakes around the town. You can see
beautiful flowers and green trees when spring comes. You can hear birds sing every morning. The air is
also fresh. In autumn, you can go to pick all kinds of fruit on the farm. You can easily make friends with
the friendly people in my town.
In a word, the town is a nice and wonderful place to live. I love my hometown.
I hope you can come to my hometown and visit it some day.
Dear readers,
Come and take a look at my hometown—Sunshine Town. Sunshine Town is about 10 kilometres
away from Sunshine Railway Station. You can come here by bus, by car or by high-speed railway.
There are about 20,000 people living here. They are all friendly. My hometown is a great place to
have fun. You can go hiking in the hills and go fishing by the lakes around the town. You can see
beautiful flowers and green trees when spring comes. You can hear birds sing every morning. The air is
also fresh. In autumn, you can go to pick all kinds of fruit on the farm. You can easily make friends with
the friendly people in my town.
In a word, the town is a nice and wonderful place to live. I love my hometown.
I hope you can come to my hometown and visit it some day.
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道书面表达题，第一步先明确写作要求：主题是介绍我的家乡阳光镇，需要完整覆盖表格给出的所有信息点，同时语句通顺，字数达标。我们可以按照从客观属性到体验感受的逻辑来构思：首先先介绍家乡的地理位置，点明它距离阳光火车站10公里的区位特点；接下来介绍当地的人口规模，以及便利的交通方式，让读者直观了解出行的便利性；之后重点介绍家乡的自然环境和可参与的活动，把山湖环绕、花草繁茂、可以采摘水果这些信息自然融入，还可以补充符合场景的合理细节比如徒步、钓鱼、居民友善让内容更生动；最后抒发自己对家乡的喜爱之情，衔接好给定的开头和结尾，就可以完成符合要求的短文。
【解析】
1. 要点梳理：先把表格所有给定信息全部罗列出来，避免遗漏：① 名称：Sunshine Town，位置：距离阳光火车站约10公里；② 常住人口：20000；③ 交通方式：公交、私家车、高铁；④ 特色景观与活动：周边有山和湖，遍布花草树木，可以采摘各类水果；⑤ 补充个人感受部分，表达对家乡的认可与喜爱。
2. 行文组织：采用一般现在时作为整体时态，符合介绍客观事物的语境，按照“区位介绍→人口交通→游玩体验→情感抒发”的顺序排布内容，用合适的过渡词衔接语句，适当添加符合场景的细节（比如居民友善、空气清新、春日赏花秋日摘果）让内容连贯饱满，避免生硬翻译要点，最终保证总词数超过80，符合题目要求。
【答案】
Dear readers,
Come and take a look at my hometown—Sunshine Town. Sunshine Town is about 10 kilometres away from Sunshine Railway Station. You can come here by bus, by car or by high-speed railway. There are about 20,000 people living here. They are all friendly. My hometown is a great place to have fun. You can go hiking in the hills and go fishing by the lakes around the town. You can see beautiful flowers and green trees when spring comes. You can hear birds sing every morning. The air is also fresh. In autumn, you can go to pick all kinds of fruit on the farm. You can easily make friends with the friendly people in my town.
In a word, the town is a nice and wonderful place to live. I love my hometown.
I hope you can come to my hometown and visit it some day.
【知识点】
地点类英语写作
信息整合表达
一般现在时应用
【点评】
本题属于提纲类提示作文，难度适中，核心考察学生对地点介绍类话题的常用表达掌握能力，只需要完整覆盖表格给出的全部信息点，适当补充少量合理细节让行文连贯，避免出现语法错误，就可以写出符合要求的短文，学生写作时注意不要逐字生硬翻译要点，适当用不同句式丰富表达即可。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先拿到这道书面表达题，第一步先明确写作要求：主题是介绍我的家乡阳光镇，需要完整覆盖表格给出的所有信息点，同时语句通顺，字数达标。我们可以按照从客观属性到体验感受的逻辑来构思：首先先介绍家乡的地理位置，点明它距离阳光火车站10公里的区位特点；接下来介绍当地的人口规模，以及便利的交通方式，让读者直观了解出行的便利性；之后重点介绍家乡的自然环境和可参与的活动，把山湖环绕、花草繁茂、可以采摘水果这些信息自然融入，还可以补充符合场景的合理细节比如徒步、钓鱼、居民友善让内容更生动；最后抒发自己对家乡的喜爱之情，衔接好给定的开头和结尾，就可以完成符合要求的短文。
【解析】
1. 要点梳理：先把表格所有给定信息全部罗列出来，避免遗漏：① 名称：Sunshine Town，位置：距离阳光火车站约10公里；② 常住人口：20000；③ 交通方式：公交、私家车、高铁；④ 特色景观与活动：周边有山和湖，遍布花草树木，可以采摘各类水果；⑤ 补充个人感受部分，表达对家乡的认可与喜爱。
2. 行文组织：采用一般现在时作为整体时态，符合介绍客观事物的语境，按照“区位介绍→人口交通→游玩体验→情感抒发”的顺序排布内容，用合适的过渡词衔接语句，适当添加符合场景的细节（比如居民友善、空气清新、春日赏花秋日摘果）让内容连贯饱满，避免生硬翻译要点，最终保证总词数超过80，符合题目要求。
【答案】
Dear readers,
Come and take a look at my hometown—Sunshine Town. Sunshine Town is about 10 kilometres away from Sunshine Railway Station. You can come here by bus, by car or by high-speed railway. There are about 20,000 people living here. They are all friendly. My hometown is a great place to have fun. You can go hiking in the hills and go fishing by the lakes around the town. You can see beautiful flowers and green trees when spring comes. You can hear birds sing every morning. The air is also fresh. In autumn, you can go to pick all kinds of fruit on the farm. You can easily make friends with the friendly people in my town.
In a word, the town is a nice and wonderful place to live. I love my hometown.
I hope you can come to my hometown and visit it some day.
【知识点】
地点类英语写作
信息整合表达
一般现在时应用
【点评】
本题属于提纲类提示作文，难度适中，核心考察学生对地点介绍类话题的常用表达掌握能力，只需要完整覆盖表格给出的全部信息点，适当补充少量合理细节让行文连贯，避免出现语法错误，就可以写出符合要求的短文，学生写作时注意不要逐字生硬翻译要点，适当用不同句式丰富表达即可。
【难度系数】
0.7
