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Ⅶ.书面表达。
曾经的小渔村，如今的大都市，四十年沧海桑田，四十载沧桑巨变。请结合下列提示支架，写一写40多年来深圳翻天覆地的变化，畅想未来的深圳。
1.认真研读下列支架结构。
2.结合下列参考词汇，完成书面表达。
tall building (高楼大厦)；highway (高速公路)；tunnel (隧道)；factory (工厂)；underground (地铁)；airport (机场)；hotel (酒店)；skyscraper (摩天大楼)…
Changes in Shenzhen
40 years ago, Shenzhen was a fishing village. It was small and old.
Now, Shenzhen is big and modern.
In the future, Shenzhen will be more beautiful.
曾经的小渔村，如今的大都市，四十年沧海桑田，四十载沧桑巨变。请结合下列提示支架，写一写40多年来深圳翻天覆地的变化，畅想未来的深圳。
1.认真研读下列支架结构。
2.结合下列参考词汇，完成书面表达。
tall building (高楼大厦)；highway (高速公路)；tunnel (隧道)；factory (工厂)；underground (地铁)；airport (机场)；hotel (酒店)；skyscraper (摩天大楼)…
Changes in Shenzhen
40 years ago, Shenzhen was a fishing village. It was small and old.
There was no underground or airport. There were no tall buildings. There were not many restaurants, shops or museums. But there were many trees. There were not many people at that time. People washed clothes by hand. Postmen sent letters every day. They watched black and white TV. They lived in the small and old houses.
Now, Shenzhen is big and modern.
There is an airport in Bao'an. There are some undergrounds. There are many skyscrapers. There are many shopping malls, supermarkets and restaurants. There are many trees and flowers. There are many people in Shenzhen now. People wash clothes with the washing machine. We watch digital TV. We chat by email, QQ and WeChat. We use cell phones to talk and take photos. Life has changed a lot.
In the future, Shenzhen will be more beautiful.
There will be more skyscrapers. More foreigners will come to Shenzhen. People will stay at home and work online. We will travel to space. We will study online. Life will be more convenient in the future.
答案
Ⅶ. 参考范文:
40 years ago, Shenzhen was a fishing village. It
was small and old. There was no underground
or airport. There were no tall buildings.
There were not many restaurants, shops or museums.
But there were many trees. There were not
many people at that time. People washed clothes
by hand. Postmen sent letters every day. They
watched black and white TV. They lived in the
small and old houses.
Now, Shenzhen is big and modern. There is an
airport in Bao'an. There are some undergrounds.
There are many skyscrapers. There are many
shopping malls, supermarkets and restaurants.
There are many trees and flowers. There are many
people in Shenzhen now. People wash clothes with
the washing machine. We watch digital TV. We chat
by email, QQ and WeChat. We use cell phones to
talk and take photos. Life has changed a lot.
In the future, Shenzhen will be more beautiful.
There will be more skyscrapers. More foreigners
will come to Shenzhen. People will stay at home
and work online. We will travel to space. We will
study online. Life will be more convenient in the
future.
40 years ago, Shenzhen was a fishing village. It
was small and old. There was no underground
or airport. There were no tall buildings.
There were not many restaurants, shops or museums.
But there were many trees. There were not
many people at that time. People washed clothes
by hand. Postmen sent letters every day. They
watched black and white TV. They lived in the
small and old houses.
Now, Shenzhen is big and modern. There is an
airport in Bao'an. There are some undergrounds.
There are many skyscrapers. There are many
shopping malls, supermarkets and restaurants.
There are many trees and flowers. There are many
people in Shenzhen now. People wash clothes with
the washing machine. We watch digital TV. We chat
by email, QQ and WeChat. We use cell phones to
talk and take photos. Life has changed a lot.
In the future, Shenzhen will be more beautiful.
There will be more skyscrapers. More foreigners
will come to Shenzhen. People will stay at home
and work online. We will travel to space. We will
study online. Life will be more convenient in the
future.
解析
【分析】
这道书面表达题给出了清晰的时间线写作支架，解题时可以按照三步思路展开：1. 先拆分三个独立的写作模块，分别对应40年前、现在、未来三个时间维度，每个模块都按照“城市整体面貌→人们的日常活动”的逻辑来组织内容，完全贴合思维导图给出的提示。2. 匹配对应时态：描述40年前的内容全部使用一般过去时，套用提示里的There was/were相关句型；描述当下深圳的内容使用一般现在时，套用There is/are相关句型；描述未来畅想的内容使用一般将来时，套用There will be相关句型，避免时态混用出错。3. 自然融入题目给出的参考词汇，补充符合生活常识的细节，让文章内容连贯、逻辑通顺，符合深圳的实际发展变化。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：
1. 第一段（40年前部分）：开篇点明40年前深圳是老旧小渔村的属性，用一般过去时的there be句型说明当时没有地铁、机场、高楼大厦，配套的商铺、人口都很少，接着描述当时人们的生活方式：手洗衣服、靠邮递员送信，居住在老旧小房子里，符合过去的时代特征。
2. 第二段（现在部分）：点明当下深圳是现代化大都市的属性，用一般现在时的there be句型说明现在有机场、多条地铁线路、大量摩天大楼，配套的商场、绿化都很完善，接着描述当下人们的生活方式：用洗衣机洗衣、通过邮件、QQ、微信沟通，线上购物，生活十分便利。
3. 第三段（未来部分）：点明未来深圳会更加美丽的发展方向，用一般将来时的there be句型说明未来会有更多摩天大楼，更多外来人口来到深圳，接着畅想未来人们的生活：线上办公、太空旅行、线上学习，生活便捷度进一步提升。
全程注意时态统一，语句衔接自然，符合题目给出的所有提示要求。
【答案】
参考范文:
40 years ago, Shenzhen was a fishing village. It was small and old. There was no underground or airport. There were no tall buildings. There were not many restaurants, shops or museums. But there were many trees. There were not many people at that time. People washed clothes by hand. Postmen sent letters every day. They watched black and white TV. They lived in the small and old houses.
Now, Shenzhen is big and modern. There is an airport in Bao'an. There are some undergrounds. There are many skyscrapers. There are many shopping malls, supermarkets and restaurants. There are many trees and flowers. There are many people in Shenzhen now. People wash clothes with the washing machine. We watch digital TV. We chat by email, QQ and WeChat. We use cell phones to talk and take photos. Life has changed a lot.
In the future, Shenzhen will be more beautiful. There will be more skyscrapers. More foreigners will come to Shenzhen. People will stay at home and work online. We will travel to space. We will study online. Life will be more convenient in the future.
【知识点】
一般过去时，一般现在时，一般将来时
【点评】
本题属于框架引导类的英语写作题，给出的思维导图清晰划分了写作逻辑，大幅降低了写作门槛，重点考察学生对不同时态的区分运用能力，同时引导学生感知城市发展的巨大变化，写作时只要严格按照三个时间节点对应时态，顺着“城市样貌-居民生活”的提示展开内容，很容易写出符合要求的完整作文。
【难度系数】
0.7
这道书面表达题给出了清晰的时间线写作支架，解题时可以按照三步思路展开：1. 先拆分三个独立的写作模块，分别对应40年前、现在、未来三个时间维度，每个模块都按照“城市整体面貌→人们的日常活动”的逻辑来组织内容，完全贴合思维导图给出的提示。2. 匹配对应时态：描述40年前的内容全部使用一般过去时，套用提示里的There was/were相关句型；描述当下深圳的内容使用一般现在时，套用There is/are相关句型；描述未来畅想的内容使用一般将来时，套用There will be相关句型，避免时态混用出错。3. 自然融入题目给出的参考词汇，补充符合生活常识的细节，让文章内容连贯、逻辑通顺，符合深圳的实际发展变化。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：
1. 第一段（40年前部分）：开篇点明40年前深圳是老旧小渔村的属性，用一般过去时的there be句型说明当时没有地铁、机场、高楼大厦，配套的商铺、人口都很少，接着描述当时人们的生活方式：手洗衣服、靠邮递员送信，居住在老旧小房子里，符合过去的时代特征。
2. 第二段（现在部分）：点明当下深圳是现代化大都市的属性，用一般现在时的there be句型说明现在有机场、多条地铁线路、大量摩天大楼，配套的商场、绿化都很完善，接着描述当下人们的生活方式：用洗衣机洗衣、通过邮件、QQ、微信沟通，线上购物，生活十分便利。
3. 第三段（未来部分）：点明未来深圳会更加美丽的发展方向，用一般将来时的there be句型说明未来会有更多摩天大楼，更多外来人口来到深圳，接着畅想未来人们的生活：线上办公、太空旅行、线上学习，生活便捷度进一步提升。
全程注意时态统一，语句衔接自然，符合题目给出的所有提示要求。
【答案】
参考范文:
40 years ago, Shenzhen was a fishing village. It was small and old. There was no underground or airport. There were no tall buildings. There were not many restaurants, shops or museums. But there were many trees. There were not many people at that time. People washed clothes by hand. Postmen sent letters every day. They watched black and white TV. They lived in the small and old houses.
Now, Shenzhen is big and modern. There is an airport in Bao'an. There are some undergrounds. There are many skyscrapers. There are many shopping malls, supermarkets and restaurants. There are many trees and flowers. There are many people in Shenzhen now. People wash clothes with the washing machine. We watch digital TV. We chat by email, QQ and WeChat. We use cell phones to talk and take photos. Life has changed a lot.
In the future, Shenzhen will be more beautiful. There will be more skyscrapers. More foreigners will come to Shenzhen. People will stay at home and work online. We will travel to space. We will study online. Life will be more convenient in the future.
【知识点】
一般过去时，一般现在时，一般将来时
【点评】
本题属于框架引导类的英语写作题，给出的思维导图清晰划分了写作逻辑，大幅降低了写作门槛，重点考察学生对不同时态的区分运用能力，同时引导学生感知城市发展的巨大变化，写作时只要严格按照三个时间节点对应时态，顺着“城市样貌-居民生活”的提示展开内容，很容易写出符合要求的完整作文。
【难度系数】
0.7
