主题写作专项 练写作 答案D30
主题词网
优选词汇
背景介绍
• science fiction • short story • written by • abstracted from • a masterpiece of
主要人物
• main character • hero/heroine • be portrayed as(被描写成) • play a small part in
主要情节
• main plot • pretend that... • succeed in • fail to • in the end • thanks to
个人评论
• bad/happy ending • meaningful • educational • impressive • be impressed by
写作实例
假设你是九年级学生李华,你刚读完寓言故事《龟兔赛跑》("The Tortoise and the Hare"),准备向校英语报"读后感"专栏投稿。请写一篇短文,介绍这个故事,谈谈你的感受。
内容提示:
1.故事基本信息(如角色);
2.故事情节(兔子Hare骄傲轻敌,乌龟Tortoise坚持不懈等);
3.你的感想与启示(至少两点)。
要求:
1.词数100左右(开头已给出,不计入总词数);
2.语句通顺,内容完整;
3.文中不得出现真实人名、校名等信息。
The story "The Tortoise and the Hare" is a famous fable.
写作支架
开头 介绍故事的主要角色 The story "The Tortoise and the Hare" is a famous fable. The main characters are , and also play a small part in the story.
中间 介绍故事的主要情节 The story is about . At first, . because . (高分句式1) However, . In the end, .
结尾 对故事进行评论,谈谈你的收获或感受 After reading the story, I learn two lessons. First, we should . Second, is more important than . No matter , we should . (高分句式2)
优秀范文
The story "The Tortoise and the Hare" is a famous fable. The main characters are the tortoise and the hare, and some other animals also play a small part in the story.①
The story is about a race between a proud hare and a slow tortoise. At first②, the hare runs very fast and believes he will win easily. Then② he stops to sleep under a tree because he is too confident. However②, the tortoise keeps moving slowly but never gives up. In the end②, the tortoise wins the race.
After reading the story, I learn two lessons. First, we should not be too proud or careless. Second, persistence is more important than speed. No matter how difficult things are③, we should keep trying and never give up.
亮点评析
①运用"The main character(s) is/are...and...also play(s) a small part in the story."结构,介绍了故事的角色。
②运用at first、then、however、in the end,清晰明了地概括了故事情节。
③运用no matter how引导让步状语从句,强调了深刻的道理。

1. 故事基本信息(如角色):The main characters are the tortoise and the hare, and some other animals also play a small part in the story.
2. 故事情节(兔子Hare骄傲轻敌,乌龟Tortoise坚持不懈等):The story is about a race between a proud hare and a slow tortoise. At first, the hare runs very fast and believes he will win easily. Then he stops to sleep under a tree because he is too confident. However, the tortoise keeps moving slowly but never gives up. In the end, the tortoise wins the race.
3. 你的感想与启示(至少两点):After reading the story, I learn two lessons. First, we should not be too proud or careless. Second, persistence is more important than speed. No matter how difficult things are, we should keep trying and never give up.
优秀范文
The story "The Tortoise and the Hare" is a famous fable. The main characters are the tortoise and the hare, and some other animals also play a small part in the story.
The story is about a race between a proud hare and a slow tortoise. At first, the hare runs very fast and believes he will win easily. Then he stops to sleep under a tree because he is too confident. However, the tortoise keeps moving slowly but never gives up. In the end, the tortoise wins the race.
After reading the story, I learn two lessons. First, we should not be too proud or careless. Second, persistence is more important than speed. No matter how difficult things are, we should keep trying and never give up.
亮点评析
①运用"The main character(s) is/are...and...also play(s) a small part in the story."结构,介绍了故事的角色。
②运用at first、then、however、in the end,清晰明了地概括了故事情节。
③运用no matter how引导让步状语从句,强调了深刻的道理。

【分析】
本题为英语读后感写作题，要求围绕《龟兔赛跑》完成写作，需涵盖故事角色、主要情节、个人启示三部分。解题思路：1. 开头部分，根据支架明确主要角色为乌龟和兔子，补充次要角色（其他动物）；2. 中间部分，用at first、then、however、in the end等连接词梳理情节，突出兔子骄傲轻敌、乌龟坚持不懈的核心；3. 结尾部分，结合故事提炼两点启示，运用高分句式（no matter...）增强表达效果，确保符合词数要求。
【解析】
按照写作要求与支架结构：1. 开头介绍角色：明确主要角色是乌龟和兔子，其他动物为次要角色；2. 中间梳理情节：围绕赛跑展开，先写兔子起初自信跑得快，再写兔子因骄傲睡觉，接着写乌龟坚持前进，最后写乌龟获胜；3. 结尾谈启示：结合故事得出不骄傲、坚持比速度重要的结论，用no matter引导让步状语从句升华主题，语句连贯且符合要求。
【答案】
The story "The Tortoise and the Hare" is a famous fable. The main characters are the tortoise and the hare, and some other animals also play a small part in the story.
The story is about a race between a proud hare and a slow tortoise. At first, the hare runs very fast and believes he will win easily. Then he stops to sleep under a tree because he is too confident. However, the tortoise keeps moving slowly but never gives up. In the end, the tortoise wins the race.
After reading the story, I learn two lessons. First, we should not be too proud or careless. Second, persistence is more important than speed. No matter how difficult things are, we should keep trying and never give up.
【知识点】
英语写作、寓言故事读后感、英语复合句运用
【点评】
范文严格遵循写作支架，结构清晰，用连接词梳理情节逻辑，运用高分句式提升表达，内容完整准确，符合词数要求，完美契合题目各项要求。
【难度系数】
0.6