写作提优专题
话题分析
本单元的核心写作话题是我的音乐故事，要求学生围绕音乐相关经历，从音乐/乐器的基本信息(喜欢的音乐类型、乐器、音乐人等)、音乐故事/经历、音乐对自己的影响(个人观点、感悟)等方面展开写作，引导学生分享音乐感悟、锻炼叙事类写作与书面表达能力，同时巩固定语从句的运用。
写作积累
[高分词汇]
1. 弹吉他/钢琴/拉二胡
2. 使某人振作
3. 充满活力
4. 触动某人的心
5. 在某人空闲时间
6. 参加音乐比赛
7. 因……而著名
8. 在……中起重要作用
[高分句式]
1. 我最喜欢的乐器是吉他，我已经弹了3年了。

2. 有着悠久历史的中国传统音乐，深受我们喜爱。

3. 音乐在我的生活中起重要作用，在我沮丧时总能让我振作。

4. 我经常和朋友分享我喜欢的音乐，这让我们的友谊更深厚。

5. 这首歌优美的旋律触动了我的心，也教会我珍惜幸福生活。

典例讲解
音乐不仅能够给人们带来好的享受，还能在一定程度上疏解压力。假如你是Mike，校报正在进行有关音乐方面的征文稿，请你根据以下要点提示，写一篇英语短文，向校报投稿。
内容包括：
1. What kind of music do you like?
2. One experience where music helped you.
3. Why do you like music?
注意:1. 词数100左右;2. 短文须包含内容要点,可适当发挥,以使行文连贯;3. 不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。

[审题思路]
▶审体裁:本篇写作的核心目的是向读者分享个人对音乐的喜爱,包括喜欢的音乐类型、音乐帮助自己的经历、喜欢音乐的原因,兼具叙事性和抒情性,属于夹叙夹议的记叙文。
▶审人称:介绍个人音乐经历与感受时以第一人称为主,使表达更具主观性和真实感,符合投稿的语境。
▶审时态:用一般现在时描述自己喜欢的音乐类型、对音乐的喜爱现状;用一般过去时讲述音乐帮助自己的具体经历;用一般现在时阐述喜欢音乐的原因、音乐带来的收获与感悟,时态逻辑清晰,符合中考写作要求。
[写作提纲]

[优秀范文]
My Love for Music
I love soft and relaxing music that can calm me down, especially light music and folk music. Music has become an important part of my life and goes with me every day.
Once I failed an important exam and felt really upset. I locked myself in my room and listened to my favourite light music on repeat. It slowly cheered me up, helped me calm down and face my mistakes bravely. I love music because it not only brings me great enjoyment, but also helps me relieve stress when I am under pressure.
From music, I’ve learnt to stay positive and find beauty in life. It is my best friend that will always accompany me, and its power will never fade away.
实战演练
假设你是李华,你校英语社团正在举办以“An Instrument and My Story”为主题的征文活动,请你结合自身经历写一篇英语短文投稿。内容包括:
1. 你最喜欢的乐器是什么;
2. 讲述一个你与这件乐器有关的人物故事;
3. 谈谈这件乐器带给你的成长或感悟。
注意:1. 词数100左右;2. 短文须包含内容要点,可适当发挥,以使行文连贯;3. 不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
参考词汇:persistent 坚持不懈的

[高分词汇]
1. play the guitar/piano/erhu
2. cheer sb up
3. be full of energy
4. touch one's heart
5. in one's spare time
6. take part in a music competition
7. be famous for
8. play an important part in
[高分句式]
1. My favourite musical instrument is the guitar, which I have played for 3 years.
2. Traditional Chinese music, which has a long history, is deeply loved by us.
3. Music plays an important part in my life and always cheers me up when I feel down.
4. I often share my favourite music with my friends, which makes our friendship closer.
5. The beautiful melody of this song touches my heart and teaches me to cherish the happy life.
【实战演练】
One possible version:
My favourite musical instrument is the erhu. It carries a special story between my grandpa and me. My grandpa is a man who loves traditional Chinese music, and he can play the erhu very well.
When I was 9, I was shy and afraid to speak in public. My grandpa noticed this and taught me to play the erhu. He practised with me every afternoon, patiently correcting my mistakes. At first, the sound I made was terrible, but he never stopped encouraging me. With his help, I gradually fell in love with the erhu and became more confident.
Now, I can play many erhu pieces well. The erhu is not just an instrument; it is a symbol of my grandpa's love. It teaches me to be persistent and brave, and reminds me of the warm moments with my grandpa.

【分析】首先审题，明确本次写作主题为“An Instrument and My Story”，需涵盖三个核心要点：最喜欢的乐器、与该乐器相关的人物故事、乐器带来的成长感悟。接着确定写作框架：采用第一人称，时态结合一般现在时（描述现状与感悟）和一般过去时（讲述具体故事），体裁为夹叙夹议的记叙文。构思时选择具体乐器（如二胡），结合亲情相关的真实经历（和爷爷学二胡、克服害羞），融入高分词汇与定语从句等语法，确保内容连贯、符合词数要求。
【解析】1. 审题：明确体裁为夹叙夹议的记叙文，人称用第一人称，时态区分一般现在时（现状、感悟）和一般过去时（故事）；2. 构思：确定核心乐器为二胡，设计故事线（爷爷教二胡→克服害羞→收获自信），提炼感悟（坚持不懈、亲情）；3. 写作：开头点出最喜欢的乐器，中间叙述学琴经历（体现耐心鼓励、自身变化），结尾升华感悟；4. 检查：确认要点齐全、语法正确、词数达标，无真实信息。
【答案】One possible version:
My favourite musical instrument is the erhu. It carries a special story between my grandpa and me. My grandpa is a man who loves traditional Chinese music, and he can play the erhu very well.
When I was 9, I was shy and afraid to speak in public. My grandpa noticed this and taught me to play the erhu. He practised with me every afternoon, patiently correcting my mistakes. At first, the sound I made was terrible, but he never stopped encouraging me. With his help, I gradually fell in love with the erhu and became more confident.
Now, I can play many erhu pieces well. The erhu is not just an instrument; it is a symbol of my grandpa's love. It teaches me to be persistent and brave, and reminds me of the warm moments with my grandpa.
【知识点】英语记叙文写作、定语从句运用、乐器类词汇运用
【点评】范文紧扣主题，完整覆盖所有写作要点，叙事清晰且情感真挚，运用了定语从句等语法结构，语言流畅自然，符合征文要求，是优秀的写作范例。
【难度系数】0.5