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五、书面表达
在成长道路上，我们总会遇见许多给予我们温暖、指引与力量的人。他们或许是名人榜样，如科学家、运动员；或是身边至亲好友，像父母、同窗挚友。请以“The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most”为题，结合自身经历与要点提示，写一篇100词左右的短文。
要点提示:1. Who has influenced you the most?
2. What are his/her qualities?
3. How did he/she influence you?
4. What changes has he/she brought to you?
The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most
在成长道路上，我们总会遇见许多给予我们温暖、指引与力量的人。他们或许是名人榜样，如科学家、运动员；或是身边至亲好友，像父母、同窗挚友。请以“The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most”为题，结合自身经历与要点提示，写一篇100词左右的短文。
要点提示:1. Who has influenced you the most?
2. What are his/her qualities?
3. How did he/she influence you?
4. What changes has he/she brought to you?
The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most
Among all the people I have met, my mother is the person who has influenced me most.
She is kind, hard-working and always full of courage. No matter how tough life is, she never gives up easily. She is also patient enough to listen to my problems and always encourages me to move forward.
When I was under a lot of stress and even wanted to drop out of school because of bad grades, she cheered me up and told me that success never came easy. She spent plenty of time helping me with my lessons.
With her help, I became more confident and braver. I no longer fear difficulties and keep working hard all the time. I truly thank her for all she has done for me.
She is kind, hard-working and always full of courage. No matter how tough life is, she never gives up easily. She is also patient enough to listen to my problems and always encourages me to move forward.
When I was under a lot of stress and even wanted to drop out of school because of bad grades, she cheered me up and told me that success never came easy. She spent plenty of time helping me with my lessons.
With her help, I became more confident and braver. I no longer fear difficulties and keep working hard all the time. I truly thank her for all she has done for me.
答案
The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most
Among all the people I have met, my mother is the person who has influenced me most.
She is kind, hard-working and always full of courage. No matter how tough life is, she never gives up easily. She is also patient enough to listen to my problems and always encourages me to move forward.
When I was under a lot of stress and even wanted to drop out of school because of bad grades, she cheered me up and told me that success never came easy. She spent plenty of time helping me with my lessons.
With her help, I became more confident and braver. I no longer fear difficulties and keep working hard all the time. I truly thank her for all she has done for me.
Among all the people I have met, my mother is the person who has influenced me most.
She is kind, hard-working and always full of courage. No matter how tough life is, she never gives up easily. She is also patient enough to listen to my problems and always encourages me to move forward.
When I was under a lot of stress and even wanted to drop out of school because of bad grades, she cheered me up and told me that success never came easy. She spent plenty of time helping me with my lessons.
With her help, I became more confident and braver. I no longer fear difficulties and keep working hard all the time. I truly thank her for all she has done for me.
解析
【分析】
本次写作要求围绕“影响自己最大的人”展开，需紧扣四个要点完成：第一步，确定核心人物（选母亲这类贴近生活的人物易写作）；第二步，提炼人物的优秀品质；第三步，结合自身具体经历体现人物的影响；第四步，说明人物带来的自身变化。写作时要结构清晰，开头点题，中间叙事，结尾升华情感，控制词数在100词左右，语言通顺。
【解析】
写作步骤：1. 开头段：直接点明影响自己最大的人是母亲，呼应题目；2. 第二段：描述母亲的品质（善良、勤奋、耐心等），为后续叙事铺垫；3. 第三段：结合自身经历（如成绩差想辍学，母亲鼓励并帮助），体现母亲的影响；4. 结尾段：说明母亲带来的变化（更自信勇敢），表达感谢，完成主题。
【答案】
The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most
Among all the people I have met, my mother is the person who has influenced me most.
She is kind, hard-working and always full of courage. No matter how tough life is, she never gives up easily. She is also patient enough to listen to my problems and always encourages me to move forward.
When I was under a lot of stress and even wanted to drop out of school because of bad grades, she cheered me up and told me that success never came easy. She spent plenty of time helping me with my lessons.
With her help, I became more confident and braver. I no longer fear difficulties and keep working hard all the time. I truly thank her for all she has done for me.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作、人物品质描写、要点式书面表达
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求的四个要点，结构完整，叙事具体，情感真实，语言流畅自然，符合初中英语书面表达的要求，清晰传达了“母亲对自己的深远影响”这一主题。
【难度系数】
0.6
本次写作要求围绕“影响自己最大的人”展开，需紧扣四个要点完成：第一步，确定核心人物（选母亲这类贴近生活的人物易写作）；第二步，提炼人物的优秀品质；第三步，结合自身具体经历体现人物的影响；第四步，说明人物带来的自身变化。写作时要结构清晰，开头点题，中间叙事，结尾升华情感，控制词数在100词左右，语言通顺。
【解析】
写作步骤：1. 开头段：直接点明影响自己最大的人是母亲，呼应题目；2. 第二段：描述母亲的品质（善良、勤奋、耐心等），为后续叙事铺垫；3. 第三段：结合自身经历（如成绩差想辍学，母亲鼓励并帮助），体现母亲的影响；4. 结尾段：说明母亲带来的变化（更自信勇敢），表达感谢，完成主题。
【答案】
The Person Who Has Influenced Me Most
Among all the people I have met, my mother is the person who has influenced me most.
She is kind, hard-working and always full of courage. No matter how tough life is, she never gives up easily. She is also patient enough to listen to my problems and always encourages me to move forward.
When I was under a lot of stress and even wanted to drop out of school because of bad grades, she cheered me up and told me that success never came easy. She spent plenty of time helping me with my lessons.
With her help, I became more confident and braver. I no longer fear difficulties and keep working hard all the time. I truly thank her for all she has done for me.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作、人物品质描写、要点式书面表达
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求的四个要点，结构完整，叙事具体，情感真实，语言流畅自然，符合初中英语书面表达的要求，清晰传达了“母亲对自己的深远影响”这一主题。
【难度系数】
0.6
