写作任务
红星中学的校运动会刚刚结束,校英文报刊以“An unforgettable sports event”为主题,面向全体参赛学生进行征文活动。假设你是学生李辉,请你根据下列提示内容写一篇英语文章,进行投稿。
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参赛项目:3000米长跑
事件:一个男孩摔倒→膝盖受伤→我停下脚步,提供帮助→两人一起完成比赛
收获:1.不放弃;2.……
要求:(1)包括所有提示信息,可适当拓展;(2)条理清楚,意思连贯,语句通顺,语法正确;(3)70词左右;(4)短文的开头已给出,不计入总词数。
参考词汇:lap(跑道的)一圈;knee膝盖
An Unforgettable Sports Event
Last Friday, I took part in the 3,000-metre race on the School Sports Day.
红星中学的校运动会刚刚结束,校英文报刊以“An unforgettable sports event”为主题,面向全体参赛学生进行征文活动。假设你是学生李辉,请你根据下列提示内容写一篇英语文章,进行投稿。
<图1>
参赛项目:3000米长跑
事件:一个男孩摔倒→膝盖受伤→我停下脚步,提供帮助→两人一起完成比赛
收获:1.不放弃;2.……
要求:(1)包括所有提示信息,可适当拓展;(2)条理清楚,意思连贯,语句通顺,语法正确;(3)70词左右;(4)短文的开头已给出,不计入总词数。
参考词汇:lap(跑道的)一圈;knee膝盖
An Unforgettable Sports Event
Last Friday, I took part in the 3,000-metre race on the School Sports Day.
I was confident that I could win. However, when I ran my last lap, I saw a boy fall and hurt his right knee. I stopped running and went to ask, "Is it serious?" The boy smiled and said, "No. I'm fine!" I helped the boy stand up, and we ran together again. In the end, neither the boy nor I won the race. But that day, I learnt two important lessons. First, never give up. Second, helping others is more important than winning.
答案
I was confident that I could win. However, when I ran my last lap, I saw a boy fall and hurt his right knee. I stopped running and went to ask, "Is it serious?" The boy smiled and said, "No. I'm fine!" I helped the boy stand up, and we ran together again. In the end, neither the boy nor I won the race. But that day, I learnt two important lessons. First, never give up. Second, helping others is more important than winning.
解析
【分析】本题为英语记叙文写作任务,需以学生李辉的身份,围绕校运会难忘事件投稿校英文报。解题思路:① 承接已给开头,交代比赛的关键节点(最后一圈);② 完整叙述男孩摔倒受伤、自己停下提供帮助、两人共同完成比赛的过程;③ 结合提示明确写出两点收获(永不放弃、帮助他人比获胜更重要);④ 确保所有提示信息齐全,语句连贯,符合70词左右的要求,正确运用参考词汇。
【解析】1. 承接开头,用“when I ran my last lap”引出事件背景,符合叙事逻辑;2. 准确描述男孩摔倒(fall)、膝盖受伤(hurt his right knee)的细节,运用参考词汇lap;3. 体现自己的行为(stopped running, helped the boy stand up),突出帮助的过程;4. 点明结果(两人未获胜),并结合提示写出两点收获,传递积极价值观;5. 整体语句通顺,语法正确,符合字数要求。
【答案】I was confident that I could win. However, when I ran my last lap, I saw a boy fall and hurt his right knee. I stopped running and went to ask, "Is it serious?" The boy smiled and said, "No. I'm fine!" I helped the boy stand up, and we ran together again. In the end, neither the boy nor I won the race. But that day, I learnt two important lessons. First, never give up. Second, helping others is more important than winning.
【知识点】英语记叙文写作、英语常用词汇运用、英语写作要点表达
【点评】本文紧扣征文主题,全面覆盖所有提示信息,叙事条理清晰,情感真挚自然,既完成了写作任务,又传递了积极向上的价值观,符合征文的各项要求。
【难度系数】0.6
【解析】1. 承接开头,用“when I ran my last lap”引出事件背景,符合叙事逻辑;2. 准确描述男孩摔倒(fall)、膝盖受伤(hurt his right knee)的细节,运用参考词汇lap;3. 体现自己的行为(stopped running, helped the boy stand up),突出帮助的过程;4. 点明结果(两人未获胜),并结合提示写出两点收获,传递积极价值观;5. 整体语句通顺,语法正确,符合字数要求。
【答案】I was confident that I could win. However, when I ran my last lap, I saw a boy fall and hurt his right knee. I stopped running and went to ask, "Is it serious?" The boy smiled and said, "No. I'm fine!" I helped the boy stand up, and we ran together again. In the end, neither the boy nor I won the race. But that day, I learnt two important lessons. First, never give up. Second, helping others is more important than winning.
【知识点】英语记叙文写作、英语常用词汇运用、英语写作要点表达
【点评】本文紧扣征文主题,全面覆盖所有提示信息,叙事条理清晰,情感真挚自然,既完成了写作任务,又传递了积极向上的价值观,符合征文的各项要求。
【难度系数】0.6
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