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Ⅲ. 书面表达
假如你所在中学的校刊近期开辟英文专栏，征集发生在大家身边的感人故事。请根据以下提示，为该专栏投稿。
（1）上周学校举办艺术节，李明参加了歌唱比赛。
（2）起初，感到不舒服；登台演出前，他因太紧张说不出话。
（3）老师鼓励他不放弃，同学们也给他加油打气。
（4）最终成功地完成比赛。虽然没有获奖，但为自己感到骄傲。
（5）你觉得……
参考词汇：登台演出 perform on the stage
写作要求：
（1）词数：80个左右。
（2）题目和开头已给出，不计入总词数。
（3）要点齐全，行文连贯，可适当发挥。
A Moving Story
Our school held an art festival last week and
假如你所在中学的校刊近期开辟英文专栏，征集发生在大家身边的感人故事。请根据以下提示，为该专栏投稿。
（1）上周学校举办艺术节，李明参加了歌唱比赛。
（2）起初，感到不舒服；登台演出前，他因太紧张说不出话。
（3）老师鼓励他不放弃，同学们也给他加油打气。
（4）最终成功地完成比赛。虽然没有获奖，但为自己感到骄傲。
（5）你觉得……
参考词汇：登台演出 perform on the stage
写作要求：
（1）词数：80个左右。
（2）题目和开头已给出，不计入总词数。
（3）要点齐全，行文连贯，可适当发挥。
A Moving Story
Our school held an art festival last week and
Li Ming took part in the singing competition. At first, he felt awful and he became so nervous that he couldn't say a word before performing on the stage. At that time, his teachers encouraged him not to give up and his classmates cheered him up. Finally, he finished the competition successfully. Although he didn't win a prize, he felt proud of himself.
Li Ming didn't give up when facing difficulties. I feel moved and I believe we are supposed to learn from him. Besides, I would like to be the one who can help and support the people around me, giving them courage and confidence.
Li Ming didn't give up when facing difficulties. I feel moved and I believe we are supposed to learn from him. Besides, I would like to be the one who can help and support the people around me, giving them courage and confidence.
答案
( One possible version )
Our school held an art festival last week and Li Ming took part in the singing competition. At first, he felt awful and he became so nervous that he couldn't say a word before performing on the stage. At that time, his teachers encouraged him not to give up and his classmates cheered him up. Finally, he finished the competition successfully. Although he didn't win a prize, he felt proud of himself.
Li Ming didn't give up when facing difficulties. I feel moved and I believe we are supposed to learn from him. Besides, I would like to be the one who can help and support the people around me, giving them courage and confidence.
Our school held an art festival last week and Li Ming took part in the singing competition. At first, he felt awful and he became so nervous that he couldn't say a word before performing on the stage. At that time, his teachers encouraged him not to give up and his classmates cheered him up. Finally, he finished the competition successfully. Although he didn't win a prize, he felt proud of himself.
Li Ming didn't give up when facing difficulties. I feel moved and I believe we are supposed to learn from him. Besides, I would like to be the one who can help and support the people around me, giving them courage and confidence.
解析
【分析】
首先明确写作任务是为校刊英文专栏投稿，撰写身边的感人故事，开头已给出，需补充内容。解题思路：1. 承接开头，点明李明参加歌唱比赛的事件；2. 按时间顺序依次描述李明赛前的状态（身体不适、紧张到说不出话）；3. 叙述老师和同学对他的鼓励；4. 说明李明最终完成比赛的结果（未获奖但为自己骄傲）；5. 加入个人感悟，突出感人主题，需使用参考词汇，控制词数，全程用一般过去时确保时态正确，保证要点齐全、行文连贯。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，用“Li Ming took part in the singing competition”点明核心事件；2. 描述赛前状态：“At first, he felt awful and he became so nervous that he couldn't say a word before performing on the stage”，运用参考词汇perform on the stage；3. 写鼓励环节：“his teachers encouraged him not to give up and his classmates cheered him up”；4. 说明比赛结果：“Finally, he finished the competition successfully. Although he didn't win a prize, he felt proud of himself”；5. 加入个人感悟：“Li Ming didn't give up when facing difficulties. I feel moved and I believe we are supposed to learn from him. Besides, I would like to be the one who can help and support the people around me, giving them courage and confidence”，确保要点齐全，时态正确，行文连贯，符合词数要求。
【答案】
( One possible version )
Our school held an art festival last week and Li Ming took part in the singing competition. At first, he felt awful and he became so nervous that he couldn't say a word before performing on the stage. At that time, his teachers encouraged him not to give up and his classmates cheered him up. Finally, he finished the competition successfully. Although he didn't win a prize, he felt proud of himself.
Li Ming didn't give up when facing difficulties. I feel moved and I believe we are supposed to learn from him. Besides, I would like to be the one who can help and support the people around me, giving them courage and confidence.
【知识点】
英语书面表达，一般过去时，常用短语搭配
【点评】
该作文紧扣校刊感人故事的主题，要点齐全，叙事逻辑清晰，时态运用准确，加入了个人感悟，语言简洁流畅，符合词数要求，是一篇合格的投稿作文。
【难度系数】
0.5
首先明确写作任务是为校刊英文专栏投稿，撰写身边的感人故事，开头已给出，需补充内容。解题思路：1. 承接开头，点明李明参加歌唱比赛的事件；2. 按时间顺序依次描述李明赛前的状态（身体不适、紧张到说不出话）；3. 叙述老师和同学对他的鼓励；4. 说明李明最终完成比赛的结果（未获奖但为自己骄傲）；5. 加入个人感悟，突出感人主题，需使用参考词汇，控制词数，全程用一般过去时确保时态正确，保证要点齐全、行文连贯。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，用“Li Ming took part in the singing competition”点明核心事件；2. 描述赛前状态：“At first, he felt awful and he became so nervous that he couldn't say a word before performing on the stage”，运用参考词汇perform on the stage；3. 写鼓励环节：“his teachers encouraged him not to give up and his classmates cheered him up”；4. 说明比赛结果：“Finally, he finished the competition successfully. Although he didn't win a prize, he felt proud of himself”；5. 加入个人感悟：“Li Ming didn't give up when facing difficulties. I feel moved and I believe we are supposed to learn from him. Besides, I would like to be the one who can help and support the people around me, giving them courage and confidence”，确保要点齐全，时态正确，行文连贯，符合词数要求。
【答案】
( One possible version )
Our school held an art festival last week and Li Ming took part in the singing competition. At first, he felt awful and he became so nervous that he couldn't say a word before performing on the stage. At that time, his teachers encouraged him not to give up and his classmates cheered him up. Finally, he finished the competition successfully. Although he didn't win a prize, he felt proud of himself.
Li Ming didn't give up when facing difficulties. I feel moved and I believe we are supposed to learn from him. Besides, I would like to be the one who can help and support the people around me, giving them courage and confidence.
【知识点】
英语书面表达，一般过去时，常用短语搭配
【点评】
该作文紧扣校刊感人故事的主题，要点齐全，叙事逻辑清晰，时态运用准确，加入了个人感悟，语言简洁流畅，符合词数要求，是一篇合格的投稿作文。
【难度系数】
0.5
