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假设你是David，你们学校Sunshine Middle School正在进行题为“My school”的征文活动，请你根据要点提示的内容，用英语介绍你的学校和校园生活。
要点：
1. What is your school like?
2. What activities do you often do at your school?
3. Why do you love your school?
要求：
1. 根据要点适当发挥，书写规范，表达流畅；
2. 词数:不少于70(开头已给出,不计入总词数)。
My school
I am David, a Grade 7 student of Sunshine Middle School. I love my school very much.
要点：
1. What is your school like?
2. What activities do you often do at your school?
3. Why do you love your school?
要求：
1. 根据要点适当发挥，书写规范，表达流畅；
2. 词数:不少于70(开头已给出,不计入总词数)。
My school
I am David, a Grade 7 student of Sunshine Middle School. I love my school very much.
My school is big and clean. There are five classroom buildings. My classroom is on the first floor. Our modern library is the best in our city.
I study very hard at school. We have different kinds of interesting activities after school, like doing sports, watching films and so on. I go to the Reading Club twice a week. I can learn a lot at school. I also make many friends here. Our school life is colourful.
答案
【高分范文】
My school
I am David, a Grade 7 student of Sunshine Middle School. I love my school very much.
My school is big and clean. There are five classroom buildings. My classroom is on the first floor. Our modern library is the best in our city.
I study very hard at school. We have different kinds of interesting activities after school, like doing sports, watching films and so on. I go to the Reading Club twice a week.
I can learn a lot at school. I also make many friends here. Our school life is colourful.
亮点赏析
文章要点齐全，内容完整，行文连贯，条理清晰。既紧扣问题提示，又进行合理且紧扣主题的发挥。
运用“big and clean，on the first floor”和“the best”等短语准确地描述校园设施。
短语“different kinds of interesting activities after school，like doing... and so on，twice a week”鲜明生动地介绍了学校活动，再结合自身情况进行描述，显得具体细致。
对学校的热爱之情抒发到位，并和第一段首尾呼应，情真意切。
素材积累
【开头句】
2. I'd like to tell you something about...
3. I am..., a Grade 7 student of... school.
【中间句】
1.... is quiet and beautiful.
2. It is a good place to study.
3. We have different kinds of interesting activities after school, like...
【结尾句】
1. I love my school very much.
2. Our school life is colourful.
3. I hope you can come to visit my school.
My school
I am David, a Grade 7 student of Sunshine Middle School. I love my school very much.
My school is big and clean. There are five classroom buildings. My classroom is on the first floor. Our modern library is the best in our city.
I study very hard at school. We have different kinds of interesting activities after school, like doing sports, watching films and so on. I go to the Reading Club twice a week.
I can learn a lot at school. I also make many friends here. Our school life is colourful.
亮点赏析
文章要点齐全，内容完整，行文连贯，条理清晰。既紧扣问题提示，又进行合理且紧扣主题的发挥。
运用“big and clean，on the first floor”和“the best”等短语准确地描述校园设施。
短语“different kinds of interesting activities after school，like doing... and so on，twice a week”鲜明生动地介绍了学校活动，再结合自身情况进行描述，显得具体细致。
对学校的热爱之情抒发到位，并和第一段首尾呼应，情真意切。
素材积累
【开头句】
2. I'd like to tell you something about...
3. I am..., a Grade 7 student of... school.
【中间句】
1.... is quiet and beautiful.
2. It is a good place to study.
3. We have different kinds of interesting activities after school, like...
【结尾句】
1. I love my school very much.
2. Our school life is colourful.
3. I hope you can come to visit my school.
解析
【分析】
这是一篇校园主题的英语征文，需紧扣题目给出的三个核心要点展开写作：一是描述学校的样貌（如大小、环境、设施）；二是介绍校园内的活动；三是说明爱学校的原因。写作时要结合已给出的开头，适当补充具体细节（如自身参与的活动），保证行文流畅、词数达标，情感表达贴合主题。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：
1. 回应第一个要点：用简单准确的形容词描述学校整体情况，补充具体设施（如五栋教学楼、现代化图书馆），让内容更具体；
2. 回应第二个要点：列举课后活动类型，结合自身参加的阅读俱乐部（每周两次），使内容真实可感；
3. 回应第三个要点：说明爱学校的原因（学到知识、交到朋友），用“colourful”总结校园生活，呼应开头的“love my school”，保证结构完整。
【答案】
My school
I am David, a Grade 7 student of Sunshine Middle School. I love my school very much.
My school is big and clean. There are five classroom buildings. My classroom is on the first floor. Our modern library is the best in our city.
I study very hard at school. We have different kinds of interesting activities after school, like doing sports, watching films and so on. I go to the Reading Club twice a week.
I can learn a lot at school. I also make many friends here. Our school life is colourful.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、校园话题英语表达
【点评】
范文紧扣题目三个核心要点，内容完整，细节具体，行文连贯，情感真挚，运用了丰富的短语准确描述校园与活动，符合征文要求，是优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.3
这是一篇校园主题的英语征文，需紧扣题目给出的三个核心要点展开写作：一是描述学校的样貌（如大小、环境、设施）；二是介绍校园内的活动；三是说明爱学校的原因。写作时要结合已给出的开头，适当补充具体细节（如自身参与的活动），保证行文流畅、词数达标，情感表达贴合主题。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：
1. 回应第一个要点：用简单准确的形容词描述学校整体情况，补充具体设施（如五栋教学楼、现代化图书馆），让内容更具体；
2. 回应第二个要点：列举课后活动类型，结合自身参加的阅读俱乐部（每周两次），使内容真实可感；
3. 回应第三个要点：说明爱学校的原因（学到知识、交到朋友），用“colourful”总结校园生活，呼应开头的“love my school”，保证结构完整。
【答案】
My school
I am David, a Grade 7 student of Sunshine Middle School. I love my school very much.
My school is big and clean. There are five classroom buildings. My classroom is on the first floor. Our modern library is the best in our city.
I study very hard at school. We have different kinds of interesting activities after school, like doing sports, watching films and so on. I go to the Reading Club twice a week.
I can learn a lot at school. I also make many friends here. Our school life is colourful.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、校园话题英语表达
【点评】
范文紧扣题目三个核心要点，内容完整，细节具体，行文连贯，情感真挚，运用了丰富的短语准确描述校园与活动，符合征文要求，是优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.3
