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假如某视频网站上的一名英国公益活动博主Jack发的一条公益视频引起了你的共鸣,你打算在评论区分享自己的一次志愿活动经历如学校义卖、访问敬老院等。请用英语在评论区留言。词数100左右,开头已给出,不计入总词数。
写作要点:
1. Why did you take part in this volunteer activity?
2. Where and when did you go?
3. What did you do during the activity?
4. What did you learn from this experience?
Jack, I really enjoyed your video. It reminded me of my volunteer experience.
假如某视频网站上的一名英国公益活动博主Jack发的一条公益视频引起了你的共鸣,你打算在评论区分享自己的一次志愿活动经历如学校义卖、访问敬老院等。请用英语在评论区留言。词数100左右,开头已给出,不计入总词数。
写作要点:
1. Why did you take part in this volunteer activity?
2. Where and when did you go?
3. What did you do during the activity?
4. What did you learn from this experience?
Jack, I really enjoyed your video. It reminded me of my volunteer experience.
Last summer, I, together with some classmates, went to a nursing home to bring some joy and warmth to the old people there. We sang songs, danced, and taught them how to use the smartphones. I also read stories to them, and they shared their life experiences with me. It was so nice to see them smile and laugh.
This experience was very special to me. I learnt that just spending time with them can make a big difference in their lives. I feel pleased while helping others. I hope more and more people can join in the volunteer activities. Together we'll make the world a better place.
答案
One possible version:
Jack, I really enjoyed your video. It reminded me of my volunteer experience.
Last summer, I, together with some classmates, went to a nursing home to bring some joy and warmth to the old people there. We sang songs, danced, and taught them how to use the smartphones. I also read stories to them, and they shared their life experiences with me. It was so nice to see them smile and laugh.
→share... with sb与某人分享……
This experience was very special to me. I learnt that just spending time with them can make a big difference in their lives. I feel pleased while helping others. I hope more and more people can join in the volunteer activities. Together we'll make the world a better place.
[思路引导] [总体分析]
①题材:本文属于材料作文。②时态:以一般过去时为主。③提示:文章开头以及要点已经给出,按照提示的要点逐点阐述,可以适当增加细节,并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步,承接短文开头,介绍自己参加志愿活动的原因、时间和地点;第二步,简要介绍自己在活动中做了什么,可列举具体的事例;第三步,介绍自己在活动中学到了什么,表达感悟并书写结语。
[亮点词汇]
①together with和……一起 ②make a big difference产生巨大影响
[高分句型]
①We sang songs, danced, and taught them how to use the smartphones.(疑问词+动词不定式)
②I learnt that just spending time with them can make a big difference in their lives.(that引导宾语从句)
Jack, I really enjoyed your video. It reminded me of my volunteer experience.
Last summer, I, together with some classmates, went to a nursing home to bring some joy and warmth to the old people there. We sang songs, danced, and taught them how to use the smartphones. I also read stories to them, and they shared their life experiences with me. It was so nice to see them smile and laugh.
→share... with sb与某人分享……
This experience was very special to me. I learnt that just spending time with them can make a big difference in their lives. I feel pleased while helping others. I hope more and more people can join in the volunteer activities. Together we'll make the world a better place.
[思路引导] [总体分析]
①题材:本文属于材料作文。②时态:以一般过去时为主。③提示:文章开头以及要点已经给出,按照提示的要点逐点阐述,可以适当增加细节,并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步,承接短文开头,介绍自己参加志愿活动的原因、时间和地点;第二步,简要介绍自己在活动中做了什么,可列举具体的事例;第三步,介绍自己在活动中学到了什么,表达感悟并书写结语。
[亮点词汇]
①together with和……一起 ②make a big difference产生巨大影响
[高分句型]
①We sang songs, danced, and taught them how to use the smartphones.(疑问词+动词不定式)
②I learnt that just spending time with them can make a big difference in their lives.(that引导宾语从句)
解析
【分析】
本题为英语应用文写作，要求在视频评论区留言分享志愿经历。需紧扣四个写作要点：参与原因、时间地点、活动内容、收获感悟，以给定开头衔接，时态以一般过去时为主，语言需通顺自然，符合留言的语境，词数控制在100左右。
【解析】
第一步，承接开头，说明参与志愿活动的原因（想给敬老院老人带去温暖）、时间（去年夏天）和地点（敬老院）；第二步，列举活动具体内容，如唱歌、教老人使用智能手机、读故事等；第三步，阐述活动收获，表达陪伴的重要性，呼吁更多人参与志愿活动。
【答案】
Jack, I really enjoyed your video. It reminded me of my volunteer experience.
Last summer, I, together with some classmates, went to a nursing home to bring some joy and warmth to the old people there. We sang songs, danced, and taught them how to use the smartphones. I also read stories to them, and they shared their life experiences with me. It was so nice to see them smile and laugh.
This experience was very special to me. I learnt that just spending time with them can make a big difference in their lives. I feel pleased while helping others. I hope more and more people can join in the volunteer activities. Together we'll make the world a better place.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、一般过去时运用
【点评】
本文紧扣写作要点，结构清晰，语言流畅，运用了亮点词汇与高分句型，准确传达了志愿经历与感悟，符合留言的语境要求。
【难度系数】
0.5
本题为英语应用文写作，要求在视频评论区留言分享志愿经历。需紧扣四个写作要点：参与原因、时间地点、活动内容、收获感悟，以给定开头衔接，时态以一般过去时为主，语言需通顺自然，符合留言的语境，词数控制在100左右。
【解析】
第一步，承接开头，说明参与志愿活动的原因（想给敬老院老人带去温暖）、时间（去年夏天）和地点（敬老院）；第二步，列举活动具体内容，如唱歌、教老人使用智能手机、读故事等；第三步，阐述活动收获，表达陪伴的重要性，呼吁更多人参与志愿活动。
【答案】
Jack, I really enjoyed your video. It reminded me of my volunteer experience.
Last summer, I, together with some classmates, went to a nursing home to bring some joy and warmth to the old people there. We sang songs, danced, and taught them how to use the smartphones. I also read stories to them, and they shared their life experiences with me. It was so nice to see them smile and laugh.
This experience was very special to me. I learnt that just spending time with them can make a big difference in their lives. I feel pleased while helping others. I hope more and more people can join in the volunteer activities. Together we'll make the world a better place.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、一般过去时运用
【点评】
本文紧扣写作要点，结构清晰，语言流畅，运用了亮点词汇与高分句型，准确传达了志愿经历与感悟，符合留言的语境要求。
【难度系数】
0.5
