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话题分析
本单元核心写作话题是描述家乡/生活的变化(Changes in Hometown/Life),要求围绕“过去与现在的对比”展开写作,从环境、交通、生活、经济、个人成长等维度,梳理变化的内容、原因与影响,同时表达自己的感受与思考,锻炼对比描写、逻辑梳理与书面表达能力。
写作积累
[高分词汇]
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10.
[高分句式]
1. 近年来,人们的生活发生了巨大的变化。
2. 过去道路狭窄脏乱,如今宽阔洁净。
3. 这些变化主要源于我国的快速发展。
4. 新技术不仅带来便利,也彻底改变了我们的生活方式。
5. 我为这些巨大变化感到自豪,并热爱新生活。
典例讲解
假设你是李华,你校英文报将举办“我眼中的家乡变化”主题英语征文活动,请你写一篇英语短文投稿。内容包括:
1. 家乡过去与现在的变化(至少2个方面);2. 变化带来的影响;3. 你的感受与展望。
注意:1. 词数100左右;
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
3. 不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
[审题思路]
▶审体裁:本篇写作核心是介绍家乡的变化,包含过去与现在的对比、变化的影响与个人感受,兼具描写性与抒情性,属于记叙文/说明文结合的中考高频写作体裁。
▶审人称:介绍家乡客观变化以第三人称为主;表达个人感受以第一人称为主,增强真实感与感染力。
▶审时态:用一般过去时描述家乡过去的情况;用一般现在时描述现在的变化与现状;用一般将来时表达对未来的展望。
[写作提纲]
[优秀范文]
Great changes have taken place in my hometown in recent years, and it has become a much better place to live in.
In the past, the roads were narrow and rough, and it took us a whole day to get to the nearby city. Besides, the environment was poor with frequent sandstorms. Now, wide highways and high-speed railways connect us to the world, cutting travel time greatly. What's more, green trees and clean rivers make the town beautiful and comfortable.
These changes not only bring great convenience but also improve local people's living standards. I take pride in my hometown's development, and I'm sure it will become more wonderful in the future.
实战演练
初中三年,相信大家在外貌、性格、学习和爱好等各方面都有了自己的变化和进步。学校英语角正在以“How I Have Changed These Years”为题进行征文活动,请你根据以下提示,用英语写一篇谈论自己近年各方面改变的文章。提示:
1. What did you use to be like?
2. What is the most important change?
3. And how did it happen? Tell something about it.
注意:1. 词数100左右,标题和开头部分已给出,不计入总词数;
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
3. 不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
How I Have Changed These Years
Time goes by quickly. Looking back at the past years, I have changed a lot.
话题分析
本单元核心写作话题是描述家乡/生活的变化(Changes in Hometown/Life),要求围绕“过去与现在的对比”展开写作,从环境、交通、生活、经济、个人成长等维度,梳理变化的内容、原因与影响,同时表达自己的感受与思考,锻炼对比描写、逻辑梳理与书面表达能力。
写作积累
[高分词汇]
1.
take place
发生2.
in recent years
近年来3.
compared with ...
和……相比4.
living standards
生活水平5.
make great progress
取得巨大进步6.
thanks to
多亏了7.
take pride in
为……感到自豪8.
become more convenient
变得更便利9.
used to
过去常常10.
lead a better life
过上更好的生活[高分句式]
1. 近年来,人们的生活发生了巨大的变化。
Great changes have taken place in people's lives in recent years.
2. 过去道路狭窄脏乱,如今宽阔洁净。
The roads used to be narrow and dirty, while now they are wide and clean.
3. 这些变化主要源于我国的快速发展。
These changes are mainly because of the fast development of our country.
4. 新技术不仅带来便利,也彻底改变了我们的生活方式。
New technology not only brings convenience but also changes our lifestyle completely.
5. 我为这些巨大变化感到自豪,并热爱新生活。
I take pride in these great changes and love the new life.
典例讲解
假设你是李华,你校英文报将举办“我眼中的家乡变化”主题英语征文活动,请你写一篇英语短文投稿。内容包括:
1. 家乡过去与现在的变化(至少2个方面);2. 变化带来的影响;3. 你的感受与展望。
注意:1. 词数100左右;
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
3. 不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
[审题思路]
▶审体裁:本篇写作核心是介绍家乡的变化,包含过去与现在的对比、变化的影响与个人感受,兼具描写性与抒情性,属于记叙文/说明文结合的中考高频写作体裁。
▶审人称:介绍家乡客观变化以第三人称为主;表达个人感受以第一人称为主,增强真实感与感染力。
▶审时态:用一般过去时描述家乡过去的情况;用一般现在时描述现在的变化与现状;用一般将来时表达对未来的展望。
[写作提纲]
[优秀范文]
Great changes have taken place in my hometown in recent years, and it has become a much better place to live in.
In the past, the roads were narrow and rough, and it took us a whole day to get to the nearby city. Besides, the environment was poor with frequent sandstorms. Now, wide highways and high-speed railways connect us to the world, cutting travel time greatly. What's more, green trees and clean rivers make the town beautiful and comfortable.
These changes not only bring great convenience but also improve local people's living standards. I take pride in my hometown's development, and I'm sure it will become more wonderful in the future.
实战演练
初中三年,相信大家在外貌、性格、学习和爱好等各方面都有了自己的变化和进步。学校英语角正在以“How I Have Changed These Years”为题进行征文活动,请你根据以下提示,用英语写一篇谈论自己近年各方面改变的文章。提示:
1. What did you use to be like?
2. What is the most important change?
3. And how did it happen? Tell something about it.
注意:1. 词数100左右,标题和开头部分已给出,不计入总词数;
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
3. 不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
How I Have Changed These Years
Time goes by quickly. Looking back at the past years, I have changed a lot.
I used to be a shy and quiet girl who was afraid to speak in public. I would hide behind my desk in class and never took part in any group activities. The most important change is that I have become outgoing and confident.
It all started when my English teacher asked me to join the school speech contest. At first, I refused, but she encouraged me to have a try. I practised every day after school, and finally stood on the stage. That experience changed me completely. Now I am active in class and even take charge of class activities. I am proud of my growth.
答案
[高分词汇]
1. take place 2. in recent years 3. compared with ...
4. living standards 5. make great progress 6. thanks to
7. take pride in 8. become more convenient 9. used to
10. lead a better life
[高分句式]
1. Great changes have taken place in people's lives in recent years.
2. The roads used to be narrow and dirty, while now they are wide and clean.
3. These changes are mainly because of the fast development of our country.
4. New technology not only brings convenience but also changes our lifestyle completely.
5. I take pride in these great changes and love the new life.
【实战演练】
One possible version：
How I Have Changed These Years
Time goes by quickly. Looking back at the past years, I have changed a lot.
I used to be a shy and quiet girl who was afraid to speak in public. I would hide behind my desk in class and never took part in any group activities. The most important change is that I have become outgoing and confident.
It all started when my English teacher asked me to join the school speech contest. At first, I refused, but she encouraged me to have a try. I practised every day after school, and finally stood on the stage. That experience changed me completely. Now I am active in class and even take charge of class activities. I am proud of my growth.
1. take place 2. in recent years 3. compared with ...
4. living standards 5. make great progress 6. thanks to
7. take pride in 8. become more convenient 9. used to
10. lead a better life
[高分句式]
1. Great changes have taken place in people's lives in recent years.
2. The roads used to be narrow and dirty, while now they are wide and clean.
3. These changes are mainly because of the fast development of our country.
4. New technology not only brings convenience but also changes our lifestyle completely.
5. I take pride in these great changes and love the new life.
【实战演练】
One possible version：
How I Have Changed These Years
Time goes by quickly. Looking back at the past years, I have changed a lot.
I used to be a shy and quiet girl who was afraid to speak in public. I would hide behind my desk in class and never took part in any group activities. The most important change is that I have become outgoing and confident.
It all started when my English teacher asked me to join the school speech contest. At first, I refused, but she encouraged me to have a try. I practised every day after school, and finally stood on the stage. That experience changed me completely. Now I am active in class and even take charge of class activities. I am proud of my growth.
解析
【分析】
首先审题明确写作要求：需围绕“自己近年的变化”，包含三个核心要点：过去的状态、最重要的变化、变化的过程。确定体裁为第一人称记叙文，时态上描述过去用一般过去时，描述现在用一般现在时，讲述变化契机用一般过去时。写作时要紧扣提示，用合适连接词使语句连贯，控制词数在100左右，避免出现真实信息。
【解析】
写作步骤：1. 承接给定开头，用used to结构描述过去的自己（如害羞、不敢当众发言）；2. 点明最重要的变化（从害羞到外向自信）；3. 详细说明变化原因：以老师鼓励参加演讲比赛为契机，通过练习获得成功，进而改变自己；4. 收尾表达对自身成长的感受，使文章完整。
【答案】
How I Have Changed These Years
Time goes by quickly. Looking back at the past years, I have changed a lot.
I used to be a shy and quiet girl who was afraid to speak in public. I would hide behind my desk in class and never took part in any group activities. The most important change is that I have become outgoing and confident.
It all started when my English teacher asked me to join the school speech contest. At first, I refused, but she encouraged me to have a try. I practised every day after school, and finally stood on the stage. That experience changed me completely. Now I am active in class and even take charge of class activities. I am proud of my growth.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作；时态运用；对比描写
【点评】
本文严格遵循题目要求，结构清晰，要点齐全，准确运用used to等结构对比过去与现在，通过具体事例说明变化原因，语言流畅自然，符合初中英语写作评分标准，很好展现了个人成长主题。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先审题明确写作要求：需围绕“自己近年的变化”，包含三个核心要点：过去的状态、最重要的变化、变化的过程。确定体裁为第一人称记叙文，时态上描述过去用一般过去时，描述现在用一般现在时，讲述变化契机用一般过去时。写作时要紧扣提示，用合适连接词使语句连贯，控制词数在100左右，避免出现真实信息。
【解析】
写作步骤：1. 承接给定开头，用used to结构描述过去的自己（如害羞、不敢当众发言）；2. 点明最重要的变化（从害羞到外向自信）；3. 详细说明变化原因：以老师鼓励参加演讲比赛为契机，通过练习获得成功，进而改变自己；4. 收尾表达对自身成长的感受，使文章完整。
【答案】
How I Have Changed These Years
Time goes by quickly. Looking back at the past years, I have changed a lot.
I used to be a shy and quiet girl who was afraid to speak in public. I would hide behind my desk in class and never took part in any group activities. The most important change is that I have become outgoing and confident.
It all started when my English teacher asked me to join the school speech contest. At first, I refused, but she encouraged me to have a try. I practised every day after school, and finally stood on the stage. That experience changed me completely. Now I am active in class and even take charge of class activities. I am proud of my growth.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作；时态运用；对比描写
【点评】
本文严格遵循题目要求，结构清晰，要点齐全，准确运用used to等结构对比过去与现在，通过具体事例说明变化原因，语言流畅自然，符合初中英语写作评分标准，很好展现了个人成长主题。
【难度系数】
0.6
